Products of the War
How the war changes our young soldiers.16 total reviews
Comment from Judian James
A very timely piece, Honeycomb. Oh, war is such a tragedy for all and yet men keep starting them and fighting them, never seeming to learn from past mistakes. Well done
(I think using the word "boy" implies a son, rather than a husband. Perhaps "man" would be better? Just a thought.)
reply by the author on 17-May-2012
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A very timely piece, Honeycomb. Oh, war is such a tragedy for all and yet men keep starting them and fighting them, never seeming to learn from past mistakes. Well done
(I think using the word "boy" implies a son, rather than a husband. Perhaps "man" would be better? Just a thought.)
Comment Written 17-May-2012
reply by the author on 17-May-2012
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I wasn't thinking of him as a husband. Just a boyfriend.Just a kid who had his life changed by war.
Thank you for the great review. Can you imagine what it must be like for those young people? I thank God my son didn't have to go. Nancy
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The beginning verses sounded like lovers to me, that's why I suggested the change. I love the piece Nancy.
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They were, then he went to war and returned a stranger to her. Sad but it happens. Have a great vacation!
Comment from percival86jack
To begin, I apologize for the late review, Nancy!
"A world that's cruel and unforgiving.
A world that made life not worth living.
It's sad, the war has changed you so.
You're not the boy I used to know"
A very powerful write... hugs, Jack xxxxxx
reply by the author on 17-May-2012
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To begin, I apologize for the late review, Nancy!
"A world that's cruel and unforgiving.
A world that made life not worth living.
It's sad, the war has changed you so.
You're not the boy I used to know"
A very powerful write... hugs, Jack xxxxxx
Comment Written 17-May-2012
reply by the author on 17-May-2012
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I noticed you were among the missing. I have lost my muse again and Have been searching for old poems from the past. Thanks for the review. Nancy xxxx
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I noticed you were among the missing. I have lost my muse again and Have been searching for old poems from the past. Thanks for the review. Nancy xxxx
Comment from Tristian
This touches the heart and tells truths that many are not willing to address. Your stanzas and rhymes are just right. Thank you for sharing this.
reply by the author on 16-May-2012
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This touches the heart and tells truths that many are not willing to address. Your stanzas and rhymes are just right. Thank you for sharing this.
Comment Written 16-May-2012
reply by the author on 16-May-2012
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review it. Honeycomb
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your title and rhyming couplets as you made your indictment about war. Your use of repetition is very powerful and the final repeat is quite evocative. -Joan
reply by the author on 16-May-2012
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I admired your title and rhyming couplets as you made your indictment about war. Your use of repetition is very powerful and the final repeat is quite evocative. -Joan
Comment Written 16-May-2012
reply by the author on 16-May-2012
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Thank you for reading and commenting on my poem Joan. Honeycomb
Comment from heyjude
Nancy, I'm sure this is true. How could being in a war
not change someone; especially if you are shooting at
someone and trying to dodge bullets yourself. We know
that there are soldiers who have mental health problems
as well as physical after they return. Well written.
reply by the author on 16-May-2012
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Nancy, I'm sure this is true. How could being in a war
not change someone; especially if you are shooting at
someone and trying to dodge bullets yourself. We know
that there are soldiers who have mental health problems
as well as physical after they return. Well written.
Comment Written 16-May-2012
reply by the author on 16-May-2012
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Thank you Judy. It is a tragedy.Thanks for reading and reviewing. Nancy
Comment from Bina1
But I am sure it tells the story of many. I don't know if it was a good or bad decision, I only know we paid a very high price with our men and women in the service, way too high. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-May-2012
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But I am sure it tells the story of many. I don't know if it was a good or bad decision, I only know we paid a very high price with our men and women in the service, way too high. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 15-May-2012
reply by the author on 15-May-2012
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Thank you very much for the review. Nancy
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Thank you very much for the review. Nancy
Comment from artemis53
This is very powerful and it makes me a bit uncomfortable which is alright. My youngest was in Iraq at the height of the battle and is now flying Blackhawks in Afghanistan. We don't speak of war. It's communicated in our eyes.
reply by the author on 15-May-2012
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This is very powerful and it makes me a bit uncomfortable which is alright. My youngest was in Iraq at the height of the battle and is now flying Blackhawks in Afghanistan. We don't speak of war. It's communicated in our eyes.
Comment Written 15-May-2012
reply by the author on 15-May-2012
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Yes I remember you have a boy over there. I pray he will be okay. How much longer will he have to be there? Thanks for the review Diane. Nancy
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Yes I remember you have a boy over there. I pray he will be okay. How much longer will he have to be there? Thanks for the review Diane. Nancy
Comment from Capricorn30
Thank you for this poignant quatrain of the ugliness of war;it changes many aspects of people's lives--its permanent scars are difficult to erase--thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 15-May-2012
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Thank you for this poignant quatrain of the ugliness of war;it changes many aspects of people's lives--its permanent scars are difficult to erase--thank you for sharing
Comment Written 15-May-2012
reply by the author on 15-May-2012
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my poem. Nancy
Comment from Carole Rosa
Nancy, This is very nice. Isn't it sad how many men and women have lost their lives in war. They must be so afraid while they are in battle. We will never know what goes through the minds of soldiers. This is a wonderful piece. It's thought provoking. It makes me, the reader, think about the soldiers, when in an ordinary day, I don't think of them. Blessings to you. Carole
reply by the author on 15-May-2012
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Nancy, This is very nice. Isn't it sad how many men and women have lost their lives in war. They must be so afraid while they are in battle. We will never know what goes through the minds of soldiers. This is a wonderful piece. It's thought provoking. It makes me, the reader, think about the soldiers, when in an ordinary day, I don't think of them. Blessings to you. Carole
Comment Written 15-May-2012
reply by the author on 15-May-2012
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Thank you for the review Carole. Yes it is very sad how they can take a boy raised to believe Thou shall not kill and teach him to do it.. Boggles the brain.Nancy
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Thank you for the review Carole. Yes it is very sad how they can take a boy raised to believe Thou shall not kill and teach him to do it.. Boggles the brain.Nancy
Comment from Linda England Bonam
You did an awesome job of writing this, Nancy, and it was so real, I thought this was something from your own personal experience, so I was surprised to read your author's notes! Great Job~~
reply by the author on 15-May-2012
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You did an awesome job of writing this, Nancy, and it was so real, I thought this was something from your own personal experience, so I was surprised to read your author's notes! Great Job~~
Comment Written 15-May-2012
reply by the author on 15-May-2012
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Shhhhh! The fun part was Jim and I but he had already been in the service and never saw any action. I can't believe it looking back, that I actually got in that airplane. I would have followed him to hell I guess. LOL. I don't know why I added the war story. Devine guidence I suppose. Thanks for the review Linda.And big thanks for the six!!! Nancy
