Mirror
a man discover himself.....95 total reviews
Comment from Titanx9
This is deep and gives new meaning to the terminology, he completes me. This is a perfect 5-7-5 poem. I wish you well in the contest!
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This is deep and gives new meaning to the terminology, he completes me. This is a perfect 5-7-5 poem. I wish you well in the contest!
Comment Written 19-May-2012
Comment from Barlock
I thought it was great.
A very unusual "out of the box" thinking.
I thought this poem was very good
It actually put me in the right poetic mood
Even though I'm not a poet but I guess I would
Try to write something of this kind, if I could.
Cheers,
JB
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I thought it was great.
A very unusual "out of the box" thinking.
I thought this poem was very good
It actually put me in the right poetic mood
Even though I'm not a poet but I guess I would
Try to write something of this kind, if I could.
Cheers,
JB
Comment Written 19-May-2012
Comment from Jean Lutz
First of all, welcome to FanStory.com. I joined at age 68 about three and a half years ago. I doubt if I would have ever written had it not been for this site. You will find lots of encouragement here. I really like this 5-7-5. You just reviewed something of mine and questioned the chiastic form -- it is a reversal of words or ideas. A mirror image. Consider this:
I stare at the mirror
the mirror stares at me
Draw a line from I to me; then a criss-crossing line from mirror to mirror. You have written a chiasmus. Wasn't hard, was it?
reply by the author on 19-May-2012
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First of all, welcome to FanStory.com. I joined at age 68 about three and a half years ago. I doubt if I would have ever written had it not been for this site. You will find lots of encouragement here. I really like this 5-7-5. You just reviewed something of mine and questioned the chiastic form -- it is a reversal of words or ideas. A mirror image. Consider this:
I stare at the mirror
the mirror stares at me
Draw a line from I to me; then a criss-crossing line from mirror to mirror. You have written a chiasmus. Wasn't hard, was it?
Comment Written 19-May-2012
reply by the author on 19-May-2012
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i see... thank you for your time explining that... and for your warm welcome...
Comment from Gungalo
Very clever five seven five write. LOL if he did something quite different he'd quite frankly scare you half to death. Imaging that?
reply by the author on 19-May-2012
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Very clever five seven five write. LOL if he did something quite different he'd quite frankly scare you half to death. Imaging that?
Comment Written 19-May-2012
reply by the author on 19-May-2012
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yes he would.....
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LOL.
Comment from Linda England Bonam
Good job on this 5-7-5. The syllable count is spot on, and the subject matter was solid. Easy to relate to. Nice job of writing this. Are you new to this site?
reply by the author on 19-May-2012
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Good job on this 5-7-5. The syllable count is spot on, and the subject matter was solid. Easy to relate to. Nice job of writing this. Are you new to this site?
Comment Written 19-May-2012
reply by the author on 19-May-2012
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yes, but ive been writing poetry for years... this is the first one i have ever posted anywhere... thank you for your kind remarks- joe
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Welcome to the site, then, and it seems like you are off to an awesome start! You can post two per day, so if you have been writing for years, you have a lot of posting to do. I look forward to reading more.
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Hey, I just noticed we are both in Indiana! I live just west of Indy.
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im just east of chicago
Comment from snowflakes77
I really enjoyed this 5-7-5 Haiku poem. The "Mirror" was enjoyable to read and interesting. Nicely written with good flow and word usage. I like the line, "He blinks when I blink". Good luck in the contest! :) Randa
reply by the author on 19-May-2012
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I really enjoyed this 5-7-5 Haiku poem. The "Mirror" was enjoyable to read and interesting. Nicely written with good flow and word usage. I like the line, "He blinks when I blink". Good luck in the contest! :) Randa
Comment Written 19-May-2012
reply by the author on 19-May-2012
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thanks randa...i appeciate it.... vote for me
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 form
Good use of personification of the mirror
This reminds me of Sylvia Plath's Mirror :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 19-May-2012
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Your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 form
Good use of personification of the mirror
This reminds me of Sylvia Plath's Mirror :-) Brooke
Comment Written 19-May-2012
reply by the author on 19-May-2012
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i wrote that in about 5 m iutes. Ive heard of plathe so ill have to check her out... thank you for the great review...
Comment from micci
Great little poem in depth for such a short poem I think we all look at our own reflection sometimes and question it, might be just me I suppose
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Great little poem in depth for such a short poem I think we all look at our own reflection sometimes and question it, might be just me I suppose
Comment Written 19-May-2012
reply by the author on 19-May-2012
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thank you for the great review
Comment from Meta~Mark
I like this structured poem here..He blinks when I blink, And stares deeply into mine, he and I are..... me, keep up the great work..excellent work
reply by the author on 19-May-2012
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I like this structured poem here..He blinks when I blink, And stares deeply into mine, he and I are..... me, keep up the great work..excellent work
Comment Written 19-May-2012
reply by the author on 19-May-2012
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thank you for the great review... im a big fan of your work.
Comment from guinea
This speaks like a man that is mentally disabled. It is quite good. i could picture him looking at the figure in the mirror. Good job.
reply by the author on 19-May-2012
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This speaks like a man that is mentally disabled. It is quite good. i could picture him looking at the figure in the mirror. Good job.
Comment Written 19-May-2012
reply by the author on 19-May-2012
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thank you... and no im not mentally disabled..lol
