Mirror
a man discover himself.....95 total reviews
Comment from Wendyanne
Hi Joe. This is quite a good 5-7-5 poem although I would personally change line 2 to 'and stares deep into my eyes' as mine doesn't mean anything. Good luck with this
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Hi Joe. This is quite a good 5-7-5 poem although I would personally change line 2 to 'and stares deep into my eyes' as mine doesn't mean anything. Good luck with this
Comment Written 20-May-2012
Comment from cvcopac
Ah, a 5/7/5 delving into the plurality of mans many faces. Beware, you know what happened to narcissus and he only had a pool of water to view with.
An excellent introspective 5/7/5. Good luck in the contest.
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Ah, a 5/7/5 delving into the plurality of mans many faces. Beware, you know what happened to narcissus and he only had a pool of water to view with.
An excellent introspective 5/7/5. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-May-2012
Comment from Kelleigh
Well said! I've alwaysbeen fascinated by mirrors and the world that seems to exist just beyond our reach on the other side. If everything looks the same but in reverse, does that mean that everything that goes on in that reflected realm is also the complete opposite??
~Kelleigh
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Well said! I've alwaysbeen fascinated by mirrors and the world that seems to exist just beyond our reach on the other side. If everything looks the same but in reverse, does that mean that everything that goes on in that reflected realm is also the complete opposite??
~Kelleigh
Comment Written 20-May-2012
Comment from Chris Tee
Your poem "Mirror" is true to the requirements of the 5-7-5 poetry format and all your syllables counted correctly. Well done and good luck in the contest.
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Your poem "Mirror" is true to the requirements of the 5-7-5 poetry format and all your syllables counted correctly. Well done and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-May-2012
Comment from PJJuarez
This was a nicely done 5/7/5 poem. I thought it was an interesting way of discovering yourself. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
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This was a nicely done 5/7/5 poem. I thought it was an interesting way of discovering yourself. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-May-2012
Comment from Christina 201
A fun reflection (pun intended) on staring into the mirror and pondering on who we really are.
I am interested by the color selection suggesting the mirror gazer is feeling less than joyful and perhaps regretful of something they did or didn't do. Interesting poem.
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A fun reflection (pun intended) on staring into the mirror and pondering on who we really are.
I am interested by the color selection suggesting the mirror gazer is feeling less than joyful and perhaps regretful of something they did or didn't do. Interesting poem.
Comment Written 20-May-2012
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Mirror' is a well-written and thought-provoking piece. This talented poet appears to have found himself. This work was a pleasure to both read and review.
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'Mirror' is a well-written and thought-provoking piece. This talented poet appears to have found himself. This work was a pleasure to both read and review.
Comment Written 20-May-2012
Comment from uniqueauthor
You have the appropriate syllable count for this poetry form, and it meets the requirements for the prompt, but the Japanese make scant use of caps unless the noun is proper, and there are not supposed to be spaces between the lines.
Correct these errors, and I will revisit my rating.
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You have the appropriate syllable count for this poetry form, and it meets the requirements for the prompt, but the Japanese make scant use of caps unless the noun is proper, and there are not supposed to be spaces between the lines.
Correct these errors, and I will revisit my rating.
Comment Written 20-May-2012
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi averagejoe,
You have penned a fabulous 5/7/5 poem for the contest. There is something so profound about your words. They are different and compelling. Well done and good luck in the contest....chey
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Hi averagejoe,
You have penned a fabulous 5/7/5 poem for the contest. There is something so profound about your words. They are different and compelling. Well done and good luck in the contest....chey
Comment Written 20-May-2012
Comment from constantwriter
Nice 5-7-5 poem, I like it alot! :) Just a random comment: I like how the last line ends with '.... me' instead of '.... one', which is what I was expecting when I was reading it; poetry that gives me the unexpected is always my favorite! Good luck with the contest!
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Nice 5-7-5 poem, I like it alot! :) Just a random comment: I like how the last line ends with '.... me' instead of '.... one', which is what I was expecting when I was reading it; poetry that gives me the unexpected is always my favorite! Good luck with the contest!
Comment Written 20-May-2012
