Mirror
a man discover himself.....95 total reviews
Comment from HPicasso
The Mirror was enjoyable to read and interesting.
You followed the 5-7-5 writing prompt.
Very nicely done; its creativity. I enjoyed the post and the message. Great little poem in depth for such a short poem. Congratulation!
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The Mirror was enjoyable to read and interesting.
You followed the 5-7-5 writing prompt.
Very nicely done; its creativity. I enjoyed the post and the message. Great little poem in depth for such a short poem. Congratulation!
Comment Written 21-May-2012
Comment from Kingsland
He and I and the guy in the mirror make three. If you have two looking into a mirror then you have four. Okay that's enough of my nonsense. I really enjoyed reading this ultra short poetic format... John
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He and I and the guy in the mirror make three. If you have two looking into a mirror then you have four. Okay that's enough of my nonsense. I really enjoyed reading this ultra short poetic format... John
Comment Written 21-May-2012
Comment from mumsyone
He blinks when I blink,
And stares deeply into mine, (mine what?)
he and I are..... me
I really like your idea here; however, 'and stares deeply into mine' leaves me hanging. Maybe 'stares deeply into me', but mine just doesn't work here, for me, at least. Otherwise, it's a great poem.
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He blinks when I blink,
And stares deeply into mine, (mine what?)
he and I are..... me
I really like your idea here; however, 'and stares deeply into mine' leaves me hanging. Maybe 'stares deeply into me', but mine just doesn't work here, for me, at least. Otherwise, it's a great poem.
Comment Written 21-May-2012
Comment from strandloper
Haiku poetry by their very nature has to be very powerful. The reviewer has only 17 syllables on which to form an opinion or image. And off course a lot is implied, as syllables are at a premium. I consider the title and the charateristic of the mirror " his left, my right, poking fun," my suggestion of the image in the mirror. Good luck!
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Haiku poetry by their very nature has to be very powerful. The reviewer has only 17 syllables on which to form an opinion or image. And off course a lot is implied, as syllables are at a premium. I consider the title and the charateristic of the mirror " his left, my right, poking fun," my suggestion of the image in the mirror. Good luck!
Comment Written 21-May-2012
Comment from amada
Much is said in this 5-7-5 syllables. Romantic and flimsy at the same time, it seems like the beginning of a great romance. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
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Much is said in this 5-7-5 syllables. Romantic and flimsy at the same time, it seems like the beginning of a great romance. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 21-May-2012
Comment from gifted$1
Very simple, but then so is a mirror. I like how you captured it in this poem. As a kid, didn't we all try to see if we could do something our mirror image wouldn't? You hit the 5-7-5 format right on. Good job.
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Very simple, but then so is a mirror. I like how you captured it in this poem. As a kid, didn't we all try to see if we could do something our mirror image wouldn't? You hit the 5-7-5 format right on. Good job.
Comment Written 21-May-2012
Comment from HalfHoff
great 5 - 7 - 5 entry. Really visual writing.
line three should be
he and I are ... me
(only 3 ... between)
Best of luck in the contest! Lea
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great 5 - 7 - 5 entry. Really visual writing.
line three should be
he and I are ... me
(only 3 ... between)
Best of luck in the contest! Lea
Comment Written 20-May-2012
Comment from Yuliya Keaton
well written 5 7 5 poem. I liked it
I was just wondering about the title. may be its better to name it " reflection" ? Mirroe is not really stares at you, your reflection does.
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well written 5 7 5 poem. I liked it
I was just wondering about the title. may be its better to name it " reflection" ? Mirroe is not really stares at you, your reflection does.
Comment Written 20-May-2012
Comment from angel123
I enjoyed reading your poem, but I think you could have used a better word than mine in your second sentence. Good luck in the contest.
Angel123
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I enjoyed reading your poem, but I think you could have used a better word than mine in your second sentence. Good luck in the contest.
Angel123
Comment Written 20-May-2012
Comment from Glasstruth
Very clever 5-7-5 with excellent internal rhymes like "blinks, blink and he, me" Love the last line. Great stuff! Good luck with the contest! Les
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Very clever 5-7-5 with excellent internal rhymes like "blinks, blink and he, me" Love the last line. Great stuff! Good luck with the contest! Les
Comment Written 20-May-2012
