Mirror
a man discover himself.....95 total reviews
Comment from anydamaru
Deep, yet simple, as expected from a haiku. Sometimes hard to put something really good in such small amount of words, but you did it). Alex
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Deep, yet simple, as expected from a haiku. Sometimes hard to put something really good in such small amount of words, but you did it). Alex
Comment Written 21-May-2012
Comment from Ekim777
Do we love ourselves as a reflection of God or more so as a reflection of ourselves. What do we project into the mirror so lovingly. We see illusions and lies, enough to flatter ourselves. No matter, "We are such stuff as dreams are made of..." Better self love than self hate. But as we observe ourselves is there enough love left over to offer someone else? -Ekim777
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Do we love ourselves as a reflection of God or more so as a reflection of ourselves. What do we project into the mirror so lovingly. We see illusions and lies, enough to flatter ourselves. No matter, "We are such stuff as dreams are made of..." Better self love than self hate. But as we observe ourselves is there enough love left over to offer someone else? -Ekim777
Comment Written 21-May-2012
Comment from pharp
Excellent job in the 5-7-5 poem. You have managed with very few words to find out who you are, in doing so my friend you did an excellent job! Nicely and cleverly done. Best wishes in the contest.
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Excellent job in the 5-7-5 poem. You have managed with very few words to find out who you are, in doing so my friend you did an excellent job! Nicely and cleverly done. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 21-May-2012
Comment from Dutchie
Very clever written this 5-7-5 poem.
Right syllable count and smooth flow.
I love this idea, quite a discovery, that man in the mirror.LOL. Well done, Fia
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Very clever written this 5-7-5 poem.
Right syllable count and smooth flow.
I love this idea, quite a discovery, that man in the mirror.LOL. Well done, Fia
Comment Written 21-May-2012
Comment from Starlit Ink
This depicts in few words the importance of discovering and knowing yourself. The syllable count is right and it is a positive entry which is a joy to read, so good luck in the contest. Starlit Ink :)
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This depicts in few words the importance of discovering and knowing yourself. The syllable count is right and it is a positive entry which is a joy to read, so good luck in the contest. Starlit Ink :)
Comment Written 21-May-2012
Comment from justjo66
I liked this very much. It has correct form (which
is important). :o) Even more it has a sense of
humor which I really appreciate.
Good job. I also love your "handle" averagejoe.
justjo (Jo)
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I liked this very much. It has correct form (which
is important). :o) Even more it has a sense of
humor which I really appreciate.
Good job. I also love your "handle" averagejoe.
justjo (Jo)
Comment Written 21-May-2012
Comment from RaymondJohn
Very fine 5-7-5 poetry. You have great movement, instruction (it tells a story) and the ending is really funny. Whenever I compliment someone on their Haiku, I get slammed because it isn't Haiku. Neat poem. Best of luck in the contest. Ray.
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Very fine 5-7-5 poetry. You have great movement, instruction (it tells a story) and the ending is really funny. Whenever I compliment someone on their Haiku, I get slammed because it isn't Haiku. Neat poem. Best of luck in the contest. Ray.
Comment Written 21-May-2012
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your 5-7-5 effectively conveys the theme that the physical entity we see in the mirror is only part of us. The unseen part is just as important.
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Your 5-7-5 effectively conveys the theme that the physical entity we see in the mirror is only part of us. The unseen part is just as important.
Comment Written 21-May-2012
Comment from LilHippie
Well, simple and still great! I love the way you wrote it, He blinks - "stares deeply into mine" and my favorite is, of course, the ending "he and I are . . . . me! This is well written, so teeny, but so well written! Very nicely done little poem
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Well, simple and still great! I love the way you wrote it, He blinks - "stares deeply into mine" and my favorite is, of course, the ending "he and I are . . . . me! This is well written, so teeny, but so well written! Very nicely done little poem
Comment Written 21-May-2012
Comment from Chris Davis
This is a clever idea on a 5-7-5 poem and think the last line is the perfect tie-in ending for it all. It was not the direction I thought it was going, but in a good way. :) Although, if I'd paid close attention to the title, I may have had a clue. ;)
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This is a clever idea on a 5-7-5 poem and think the last line is the perfect tie-in ending for it all. It was not the direction I thought it was going, but in a good way. :) Although, if I'd paid close attention to the title, I may have had a clue. ;)
Comment Written 21-May-2012
