Mirror
a man discover himself.....95 total reviews
Comment from kleinifer
There is this narcissistic aura that I can sense from the poem =D
Unfortunately,
I have read a couple of poems that have this same image of a mirror
and i cannot stop myself from comparing those that I have
already read to yours.
This is the reason why I find your poem
relatively ordinary,
not in a very bad way though.
I still find it well done
as you were able to make it fit the number of syllables required by the form =)
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There is this narcissistic aura that I can sense from the poem =D
Unfortunately,
I have read a couple of poems that have this same image of a mirror
and i cannot stop myself from comparing those that I have
already read to yours.
This is the reason why I find your poem
relatively ordinary,
not in a very bad way though.
I still find it well done
as you were able to make it fit the number of syllables required by the form =)
Comment Written 22-May-2012
Comment from rashi kumar
Aha! That's an intelligent poem!
A 5/7/5 poem in correct form and format,a powerful expression too.
We all need to discover that great being inside us.
All the best!
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Aha! That's an intelligent poem!
A 5/7/5 poem in correct form and format,a powerful expression too.
We all need to discover that great being inside us.
All the best!
Comment Written 21-May-2012
Comment from Taurean Monkey
Ooh, are you one of the same? I get it, you're staring back at your mirror image! Very clever 5-7-5 poem; it certainly meets the criteria and to be honest, I thought your poem was about something else, which made me smile. A well written piece and good luck with the contest.
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Ooh, are you one of the same? I get it, you're staring back at your mirror image! Very clever 5-7-5 poem; it certainly meets the criteria and to be honest, I thought your poem was about something else, which made me smile. A well written piece and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 21-May-2012
Comment from el twelve
very nicely written I do enjoy these concise styles of poetry. with so few words, so much is said. thanks for sharing and good luck
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very nicely written I do enjoy these concise styles of poetry. with so few words, so much is said. thanks for sharing and good luck
Comment Written 21-May-2012
Comment from awesome1234
It is an awesome poem but at the end it loses it's rhythm. I love your use of words to allude to a mirror without actually saying it but you need a smoother ending.
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It is an awesome poem but at the end it loses it's rhythm. I love your use of words to allude to a mirror without actually saying it but you need a smoother ending.
Comment Written 21-May-2012
Comment from Elizabeth Daniels
Very good 5-7-5. If you hadn't named it Mirror, I think I would have guessed anyhow. LOL Good luck in the contest. Elizabeth Daniels.
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Very good 5-7-5. If you hadn't named it Mirror, I think I would have guessed anyhow. LOL Good luck in the contest. Elizabeth Daniels.
Comment Written 21-May-2012
Comment from Adam J Santos
Averagejoe, this is a excellent 5-7-5. It's a great double entendre as well. I enjoyed the introspection and good luck in the contest. Take care Adam:)
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Averagejoe, this is a excellent 5-7-5. It's a great double entendre as well. I enjoyed the introspection and good luck in the contest. Take care Adam:)
Comment Written 21-May-2012
Comment from godlucifer
eye to eye contact is a familiar view,especially from the mirror. sometime a clear view of yourself is better then the eye that is connecting you to the fashion. your poem makes sense,especially in such few words. i enjoyed n reading your poem. thanks for the read.
your so vain
godlucifer
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eye to eye contact is a familiar view,especially from the mirror. sometime a clear view of yourself is better then the eye that is connecting you to the fashion. your poem makes sense,especially in such few words. i enjoyed n reading your poem. thanks for the read.
your so vain
godlucifer
Comment Written 21-May-2012
Comment from dmt1967
I liked this poem it was very direct and I got the point straight away or the point I think it was trying to make a lot of the time we don't actually see who we are but what we think we are thank you
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I liked this poem it was very direct and I got the point straight away or the point I think it was trying to make a lot of the time we don't actually see who we are but what we think we are thank you
Comment Written 21-May-2012
Comment from skye
He blinks when I blink,
And stares deeply into mine,
he and I are..... me
I love this. Two images in the mirror, both me.
Well done.
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He blinks when I blink,
And stares deeply into mine,
he and I are..... me
I love this. Two images in the mirror, both me.
Well done.
Comment Written 21-May-2012
