Mirror
a man discover himself.....95 total reviews
Comment from 4hisglory
Very good. It's kinda like the saying "where ever I go, there I am". The title makes the poem.
You followed the 5-7-5 writing prompt. Blessings in the contest. LaVonne
reply by the author on 19-May-2012
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Very good. It's kinda like the saying "where ever I go, there I am". The title makes the poem.
You followed the 5-7-5 writing prompt. Blessings in the contest. LaVonne
Comment Written 19-May-2012
reply by the author on 19-May-2012
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your too kind with the 5 stars. thank you
Comment from Modee
Very nicely done. So much said in so few words with these little 5.7.5 poems. I enjoyed the post and the messeage. Good luck in the contest. :)
reply by the author on 19-May-2012
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Very nicely done. So much said in so few words with these little 5.7.5 poems. I enjoyed the post and the messeage. Good luck in the contest. :)
Comment Written 19-May-2012
reply by the author on 19-May-2012
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thank you for your reply, im greatful for my mirror in the bathroom!~
Comment from Solacium Mariae
What I like about this poem is its creativity. It's a neat idea. A couple of thoughts for your consideration: On the second line, instead of "And", use "eyes" somewhere. Also, with the last line, perhaps put the space after "I" and before "are" rather than after "are". Or even have it both places.
Good job.
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reply by the author on 19-May-2012
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What I like about this poem is its creativity. It's a neat idea. A couple of thoughts for your consideration: On the second line, instead of "And", use "eyes" somewhere. Also, with the last line, perhaps put the space after "I" and before "are" rather than after "are". Or even have it both places.
Good job.
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Comment Written 19-May-2012
reply by the author on 19-May-2012
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thank you for your constructive critism... i tried putting eyes in there instaed of mine.... i just couldnt make it work with the 5-7-5 format... but thank you....
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I think if you take out the "and" it would work. Replacing, not adding, a syllable. Either way, good job.
Comment from ennahanid
Your Mirror 5-7-5 Poetry contest entry is very good. So I kind of glanced over this one when I first popped in, I do that when the presentation lacks in color and picture and such, and it is my bad habit and I am trying to be better, so I stayed in here and read it properly and I am very glad I did.
Your words are very telling and I think you rose to the challenge well and I wish you luck...Dinah
reply by the author on 09-May-2012
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Your Mirror 5-7-5 Poetry contest entry is very good. So I kind of glanced over this one when I first popped in, I do that when the presentation lacks in color and picture and such, and it is my bad habit and I am trying to be better, so I stayed in here and read it properly and I am very glad I did.
Your words are very telling and I think you rose to the challenge well and I wish you luck...Dinah
Comment Written 07-May-2012
reply by the author on 09-May-2012
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im new to this and just kind of figuring it out as i go.... thank you for the kind words and i will put color and pictures in my next poem.
Comment from Rob Caudle
Ok, that was kinda of fun. Usually I read poetry but don't comment as I know very little about it. But that was fun thanks for the giggle. Actually I really like the final line.
Rob
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reply by the author on 09-May-2012
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Ok, that was kinda of fun. Usually I read poetry but don't comment as I know very little about it. But that was fun thanks for the giggle. Actually I really like the final line.
Rob
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Comment Written 07-May-2012
reply by the author on 09-May-2012
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thank you for your kind words. this is the first poem i have ever had reviewed and im so excited that yuou enjoyed it. there are many more to come.
