Mirror
a man discover himself.....95 total reviews
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
I read this not once, but twice to realize that I was looking at me.
Excellent piece of thought provoking poetry done in this format.
Well done,,,,,,,,Jim
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I read this not once, but twice to realize that I was looking at me.
Excellent piece of thought provoking poetry done in this format.
Well done,,,,,,,,Jim
Comment Written 22-May-2012
Comment from Razz
He blinks when I blink,
And stares deeply into mine,
he and I are..... me
He sure is.
Very cool.
Nicely done.
Razz
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He blinks when I blink,
And stares deeply into mine,
he and I are..... me
He sure is.
Very cool.
Nicely done.
Razz
Comment Written 22-May-2012
Comment from Aarondodd1989
An interesting poem about discovering yourself for the first time, something that most of us cannot remember. There is a mistake in your description. It says a man discover himself but it should be discovers.
Good luck in the contest.
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An interesting poem about discovering yourself for the first time, something that most of us cannot remember. There is a mistake in your description. It says a man discover himself but it should be discovers.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-May-2012
Comment from laren
A nice poem, more than that, a fun riddle about the author. The answer Eureka! The mirror.
Well written with metric 5-7-5.
I enjoyed reading it!
Congratulations!
Laren
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A nice poem, more than that, a fun riddle about the author. The answer Eureka! The mirror.
Well written with metric 5-7-5.
I enjoyed reading it!
Congratulations!
Laren
Comment Written 22-May-2012
Comment from whispersofthesoul
Hiya,
This is great take on a mirror image but it doesn't sit right. The first time I read it I didn't quite get wat you mean particularly the second line as doesn't follow on from what has been written in lines 1&3 in those lines you separate the two and each are mentioned where line 3 talks of only one-the mirror surely you would be staring into the mirror more intensely As that is the point of looking into the mirror to study something?
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Hiya,
This is great take on a mirror image but it doesn't sit right. The first time I read it I didn't quite get wat you mean particularly the second line as doesn't follow on from what has been written in lines 1&3 in those lines you separate the two and each are mentioned where line 3 talks of only one-the mirror surely you would be staring into the mirror more intensely As that is the point of looking into the mirror to study something?
Comment Written 22-May-2012
Comment from misscookie
I like your poem very much
This is what I call a food for thought poem....Meaning after you read it you go Hmmmm
Thank you for sharing.
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I like your poem very much
This is what I call a food for thought poem....Meaning after you read it you go Hmmmm
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 22-May-2012
Comment from Fluffyhead
Interesting so siple so deep that you guys are so close you are one. I would make your font draker is a little hard to read. Otherwise total awesomeness
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Interesting so siple so deep that you guys are so close you are one. I would make your font draker is a little hard to read. Otherwise total awesomeness
Comment Written 22-May-2012
Comment from Anisa-
I'm sorry, but I really don't get this and I don't think it comes across very clearly. The beginning is a bit cliche and the end left me wondering ... wtf just happened.
Your syllable count is spot-on, but the rest fell flat.
Anisa
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I'm sorry, but I really don't get this and I don't think it comes across very clearly. The beginning is a bit cliche and the end left me wondering ... wtf just happened.
Your syllable count is spot-on, but the rest fell flat.
Anisa
Comment Written 22-May-2012
Comment from thmedina
Great 5-7-5 poem! It has a resonating feeling. Very strong, consistent with the title. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure.
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Great 5-7-5 poem! It has a resonating feeling. Very strong, consistent with the title. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure.
Comment Written 22-May-2012
Comment from Munkysam
I like the closeness of this poem, the intimacy. I've always felt weird making eye contact with myself in the mirror. There is something strange about it. I think the last line of your poem touches on it, actually. This is nice work, and it leaves me pondering things. Thank you for sharing this.
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I like the closeness of this poem, the intimacy. I've always felt weird making eye contact with myself in the mirror. There is something strange about it. I think the last line of your poem touches on it, actually. This is nice work, and it leaves me pondering things. Thank you for sharing this.
Comment Written 22-May-2012
