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Leave me alone. 112 words

Most of the fear is in the early stages.

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Comment from Cheryl Baker
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I like your poem. It describes the confusion of someone with Alzheimer's and reminds us of some risky behaviours such as cooking and driving. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 10-May-2012

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    Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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Well written, capturing the dreadful state of this poor persons mind. So hard and sad for them and their family. Good luck in the contest! xsx

 Comment Written 10-May-2012

reply by the author on 10-May-2012
    Thank you for reviewing. That came from personal experience. It was the beginning of my mother's descent into hell. It was the hardest part for her because she realized what was happening
reply by Sandra Stoner-Mitchell on 10-May-2012
    That must have been awful for her and for you. It's a dreadful illness, one I have learnt lots about through this contest. I sincerely hope yours does well! xsx
reply by the author on 10-May-2012
    Thank you for your kind comments. Mom has been comotose for a few years now. Responds to nothing.
reply by Sandra Stoner-Mitchell on 10-May-2012
    I am so very sorry! It is a hateful illness, destroys everything. It just isn't right. I really feel for you! xsx
reply by the author on 10-May-2012
    Thank you. The numbers continue to grow as we live longer..
Comment from snowflakes77
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I really thought this was an interesting poem. I've dealt with relatives with this disease and it's not easy. You describe it really well. Thank you for sharing :)

 Comment Written 09-May-2012

reply by the author on 10-May-2012
    This is how it went down with my mom in the beginning. Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from bard owl
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You paint a very vivid picture of the belligerance that affects some of the dementia patients. I saw my mother go through the same thing, trying to hide her fading abilities. Painfully excellent picture you paint. Best of luck in the contest. Blessings, Linda

 Comment Written 09-May-2012

reply by the author on 09-May-2012
    Thanks for the kind review. This was extracted from a life experience with my mom.
    The early stages are the hardest because they are aware of what is happening.
Comment from katmckeown
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So what the sink ran over twice
your dad over reacted,
don't tell me I'm the only one
who sometimes gets distracted

My favorite lines from this work. Great job. I enjoyed it.

 Comment Written 09-May-2012

reply by the author on 09-May-2012
    Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from RYME4U
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This is well done. I like that you have chosen the beginning phase of Alzheimers. This is such a heartbreaking condition. Denial is the first stage. Good job!

 Comment Written 09-May-2012

reply by the author on 09-May-2012
    To me it is the mot hearbreaking part because th victim is aware and full of fear. I know because that is how it happened to my mom. Thanks for reading.
Comment from Spiritual Echo
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Perfect.

Like the POV, the detailed examples of demtia, but still retained an indignant tone, perfect.

Crawling into someone's headspace and being able to write about something not yet experienced,,,oh, say, what was I saying?

Well done.

 Comment Written 09-May-2012

reply by the author on 09-May-2012
    The onset is the most heartbreaking for the victim because they realize what is happening and are full of fear. That littls scene was an extract of my experience with my mom.
Comment from Joan E.
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I admired your speaking in the first person and characterizing the effects of Alzheimer's disease so realistically. Your rhyming quatrains are quite effective. Best wishes in the contest. -Joan

 Comment Written 08-May-2012

reply by the author on 09-May-2012
    Thanks, Joan. That came from personal experience.
reply by Joan E. on 09-May-2012
    I was hoping the realism was not biographical. -Joan
reply by the author on 09-May-2012
    It was. Almost verbatim. We were trying to convince mom to see a psychiatrist under the guise that we thought she might be under stress. It was just the beginning of the nightmare that led up to our having to place her in a nursing home about four years later
    It sounds like everyone else who contributed has had some kind of personal experience.
reply by Joan E. on 09-May-2012
    Thank you again for sharing your personal experience. There is always a certain strength in numbers. -J
Comment from Tonulak
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Dallas,
I liked the poem and thought you met the requirements well. Anyone who suffers, or begins to suffer is not aware and is bitter and clings to independence. This poem showed this aspect very well. good luck in the contest--Ted

 Comment Written 08-May-2012

reply by the author on 08-May-2012
    Thanks, it came from personal experience.
Comment from angel123
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Your poem is interesting and meaningful and I enjoyed reading it. It flows and rhymes well and good alliteration of l, b, s, and o words.

Angel123

 Comment Written 08-May-2012

reply by the author on 08-May-2012
    Thank you for reviewing