Comment from Rasmine

Exceptional

Robina!

This is a beautiful poem. The picture and colors you used compliment the writing well. I just have one suggestion, and that is to make the font bigger so people with eye problems can read it better.

I wish you luck in the contest.

Nome

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week.

Comment from Eternal Muse

Excellent

A great Terzanelle. I wrote one years ago and practically forgot its structure. Such a dream-like verse about a Mermaid. Excellent imagery and visuals. A top drawer poem that stays with a reader.

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week.

Comment from jdrhye

Excellent

Wow....what a difficult style of poetry. I don't think I could ever be able to create such an in depth rules ... I'd get confused part the way through and have to start all over again!
The imagery is well laid out. It reads like a sailors ballad.
Bravo...congrats!
J

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week.

Comment from Angela Post

Excellent

I enjoyed your poem. It makes me want to be a mermaid! It is very calming and relaxing to read. This poetry type seems complicated. I like the phrase "between reality and a sweet dream". Nice work.

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a good start of the week.

Comment from sharyl

Exceptional

I really love this poem. It's so soothing, you can almost feel the undulating ocean. I've never tried to write one of these, but I like this style a lot. Very beautiful and well done....thank you for writing.

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a good start of the week. Thanks for the lovely six, much appreciated.

Comment from Harry Smith

Excellent

Beautifully written is this poem with lots of imagery and the picture selection was outstanding and went very well with the poem. enjoyed the read and will be returning to read more.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a good weekend.

Comment from ExperiencingLiphe

Excellent

If I knew how to swim I'd say take me there, but if I were a mermaid I guess I wouldn't have to worry about swimming. Alright, I'll come along. They actually make things you can wear that you can wear in the water and look like a mermaid.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a good weekend.

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

Well written, well rhymed, and well done.
You have managed the Terzanelle structure nicely and created a beautiful verse.
Good luck to you with the Poem of the Month contest.
Sharon

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a good start of the week.

Comment from Pantygynt

Good

I am sorry to say this seems to me to be a case of the 'emperors clothes'. It does not follow either the rhyme scheme you have set down, or the rhyme scheme given in Wikipedia, which is different again. I appreciate that this has attracted rave reviews (I checked them out) but frankly, although it is an intriguing poem, they are are unjustified as the rhyming is incorrect. I know this will make me unpopular, but I can't help that. As an instructor on this site I simply cannot award more than four stars because, as it stands it is not a terzanelle and, were I to award it full marks it would make me look the fool.

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 Comment Written 31-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a good start of the week.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written Terzanelle about the Mermaid Queen who mostly exist in our dreams. No one can proof without a doubt but she is still there real in our dreams.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a good start of the week.