Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 64 "part three, Chapter 19"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Anisa-
Another great chapter, Barbara. I've missed a chapter or two I believe because the last thing that I remember was her being in the house held captive.
Anyway, good job. The emotions are clearly expressed in this one.
Anisa
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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Another great chapter, Barbara. I've missed a chapter or two I believe because the last thing that I remember was her being in the house held captive.
Anyway, good job. The emotions are clearly expressed in this one.
Anisa
Comment Written 30-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I would say you missed the last post, It was about Anna being rescued.
Comment from Hollyhock
Another well-crafted section to this chapter. You keep the story-line going while adding to the interest by allowing all your characters to talk and react and develop according to their individual characterization.
I was not sure at first about Troy's thoughts being in italics, but once I picked up on the idea it really worked for me. It actually gives a good opportunity to really round a character out fully, being able to hear thoughts as well as just speech without having to explain what is going on all the time.
This scene is almost a drama within a drama, it gives the opportunity for Troy to ask questions of Paul, which he might never have got around to voicing, had this situation not arisen.
A compelling read.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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Another well-crafted section to this chapter. You keep the story-line going while adding to the interest by allowing all your characters to talk and react and develop according to their individual characterization.
I was not sure at first about Troy's thoughts being in italics, but once I picked up on the idea it really worked for me. It actually gives a good opportunity to really round a character out fully, being able to hear thoughts as well as just speech without having to explain what is going on all the time.
This scene is almost a drama within a drama, it gives the opportunity for Troy to ask questions of Paul, which he might never have got around to voicing, had this situation not arisen.
A compelling read.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and encouragement.
Comment from Imsharrison
Another well written chapter Barbara. Glad I discovered your story a few chapters ago.. It has been a very interesting read.
Once again a twist at the end that makes your reader wonder what will happen next. But more importantly. I find the subject your story is about, a very difficult subject to cover.
Looking forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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Another well written chapter Barbara. Glad I discovered your story a few chapters ago.. It has been a very interesting read.
Once again a twist at the end that makes your reader wonder what will happen next. But more importantly. I find the subject your story is about, a very difficult subject to cover.
Looking forward to reading more.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
Sometimes there is no ready end to a situation; yet all situations change. I do feel a little anxious about how much longer then inevitable will be put off.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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Sometimes there is no ready end to a situation; yet all situations change. I do feel a little anxious about how much longer then inevitable will be put off.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rtobaygo
TOUCH AT THE END OF THE CHAPTER. YOU RE-CREATED THE WAITING ROOM ATMOSPHERE QUITE WELL. BOTH DIALOGUE AND CHARACTERS MOVED CHAPTERS PLOT ALONG. ALSO SHOWED MORE OF YOUR CHARACTERS' PERSONALITIES BY PLACING CONFLICT INTO THEIR LIFE'S. WELL DONE!
TAKE CARE,
RAY
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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TOUCH AT THE END OF THE CHAPTER. YOU RE-CREATED THE WAITING ROOM ATMOSPHERE QUITE WELL. BOTH DIALOGUE AND CHARACTERS MOVED CHAPTERS PLOT ALONG. ALSO SHOWED MORE OF YOUR CHARACTERS' PERSONALITIES BY PLACING CONFLICT INTO THEIR LIFE'S. WELL DONE!
TAKE CARE,
RAY
Comment Written 30-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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THANK YOU FOR THE KIND REVIEW.
Comment from bookishfabler
Oh, look at you leaving another cliff-hanger. You go girl. I really am enjoying your book. You write so well, I can't even pick on you. Thanks for sharing. Looking forward to the next one.
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Heidi
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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Oh, look at you leaving another cliff-hanger. You go girl. I really am enjoying your book. You write so well, I can't even pick on you. Thanks for sharing. Looking forward to the next one.
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Heidi
Comment Written 30-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
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you're welcome
Comment from guinea
Abuse is devastating to the person and to the family that experiences it. I thought this was very good. I could picture the waiting room and all that were there.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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Abuse is devastating to the person and to the family that experiences it. I thought this was very good. I could picture the waiting room and all that were there.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
Comment from whispersofthesoul
Hiya,
This part 3 chapter 19 is excellent, the suspense is great you are really great crafting this. I think I said this last time, sorry, but the whole concept is growing and expanding and it does not divert from reality the details you right are reality so the reader gets the story in a true reality and the story is at a point where it could loose the reality and become fiction which would make too far fetched. I applaud you for being Able to right fiction keeping it real.
You here this all the time but it is very well written
What I like you have split the chapter and not letting the fanstory reader read the whole chapter as it would be too long and many people would loose interest, again well done.
Overall well done xx
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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Hiya,
This part 3 chapter 19 is excellent, the suspense is great you are really great crafting this. I think I said this last time, sorry, but the whole concept is growing and expanding and it does not divert from reality the details you right are reality so the reader gets the story in a true reality and the story is at a point where it could loose the reality and become fiction which would make too far fetched. I applaud you for being Able to right fiction keeping it real.
You here this all the time but it is very well written
What I like you have split the chapter and not letting the fanstory reader read the whole chapter as it would be too long and many people would loose interest, again well done.
Overall well done xx
Comment Written 30-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Chris Tee
Wow! Barbara, please don't let her die now! This is an excellent part and filled with suspense. I enjoy your story so muck Well done ma'am.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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Wow! Barbara, please don't let her die now! This is an excellent part and filled with suspense. I enjoy your story so muck Well done ma'am.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from dbmccarter
I just read the last two chapters and a lot of action and tenseness kept me reading. I knew there had to be some kind f a confrontation. I just know you are not going to let Anna die. Can't wait for more.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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I just read the last two chapters and a lot of action and tenseness kept me reading. I knew there had to be some kind f a confrontation. I just know you are not going to let Anna die. Can't wait for more.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
