The Bewitching Wedding Pages
Just a hobby...39 total reviews
Comment from Fluffyhead
Ya I like to read what kind of dress they had and how many bridesmaids. I like the casual pictures the best. It is nice o know what people are wearing and what is in. Very breezy fun to read story.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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Ya I like to read what kind of dress they had and how many bridesmaids. I like the casual pictures the best. It is nice o know what people are wearing and what is in. Very breezy fun to read story.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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So glad to know this pastime of mine was a good read for you. Best wishes.
Comment from inkedone
Great writing. I've really been observing the writing on this site to try and get an idea of what I can do better. It's good to read writing like this because it helps me to grow as a writer. Thanks for educating me.
reply by the author on 03-May-2012
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Great writing. I've really been observing the writing on this site to try and get an idea of what I can do better. It's good to read writing like this because it helps me to grow as a writer. Thanks for educating me.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 03-May-2012
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Thank you for reading and commenting in my work.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi amada,
You do have a unique hobby and one I enjoyed reading about. The picture you chose is just beautiful and serves to enhance your theme. As I read I could easily see you sitting there and pouring over the newspaper to satisfy your hobby. This story should do very well in the contest and I wish you loads of luck...blessings, chey
reply by the author on 02-May-2012
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Hi amada,
You do have a unique hobby and one I enjoyed reading about. The picture you chose is just beautiful and serves to enhance your theme. As I read I could easily see you sitting there and pouring over the newspaper to satisfy your hobby. This story should do very well in the contest and I wish you loads of luck...blessings, chey
Comment Written 28-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 02-May-2012
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Thank you chey for reading my work and for your best wishes.
Comment from zlp22
I also like to read about weddings, and your story put into words how I feel about people getting married. I just wish that the papers would visit the couples in the years to come to see if they are still married.
reply by the author on 03-May-2012
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I also like to read about weddings, and your story put into words how I feel about people getting married. I just wish that the papers would visit the couples in the years to come to see if they are still married.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 03-May-2012
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Thank you for reading and commenting in my work.
Comment from Allison78
I think this is a great entry into this contest and I really enjoyed reading it. I found it very interesting how you look into these photographs and catch the small details that tell how about these couples. Well written, great job!
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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I think this is a great entry into this contest and I really enjoyed reading it. I found it very interesting how you look into these photographs and catch the small details that tell how about these couples. Well written, great job!
Comment Written 27-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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Thank you Allison!
Comment from Gungalo
I like you r way of thinking Amada. All the best scenarios and then to come back to your own reality. Sigh, it is worth it, isn't it?
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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I like you r way of thinking Amada. All the best scenarios and then to come back to your own reality. Sigh, it is worth it, isn't it?
Comment Written 27-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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Thank you so much Gungalo for reading and commenting in my work.
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Smile!!
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
joyous semi grin << SEMI always requires a hyphen, SEMI-GRIN
as if a minuscule particle of dust crossed the air at that particular time and they caught it together; and that time became frozen in time. << Semi-colon is clumsy here... should be comma and written like this:
as if a minuscule particle of dust crossed the air at that particular time and they caught it together, THE MOMENT FROZEN IN TIME. << That said, the imagery in this line is marvelous!
Very good essay, interesting and generally well written, BUT you use waaayyyy too many semi-colons. Try to reword for more simplicity of statement, cutting their number by about 2/3. Use ;'s only where it HELPS to express the thought. In many cases here it just breaks the flow for the reader instead.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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joyous semi grin << SEMI always requires a hyphen, SEMI-GRIN
as if a minuscule particle of dust crossed the air at that particular time and they caught it together; and that time became frozen in time. << Semi-colon is clumsy here... should be comma and written like this:
as if a minuscule particle of dust crossed the air at that particular time and they caught it together, THE MOMENT FROZEN IN TIME. << That said, the imagery in this line is marvelous!
Very good essay, interesting and generally well written, BUT you use waaayyyy too many semi-colons. Try to reword for more simplicity of statement, cutting their number by about 2/3. Use ;'s only where it HELPS to express the thought. In many cases here it just breaks the flow for the reader instead.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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I truly thank you for this very truthful and conscious review. My best to your enlightening words.
Comment from MumEsGirl
This was a very sweet story and very well presented. It is short but full of information. You have a very distincitve style of writing which appeals to me on many levels.
Thank you for sharing this and I wish you all the best in the contest
hugs
kate
reply by the author on 03-May-2012
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This was a very sweet story and very well presented. It is short but full of information. You have a very distincitve style of writing which appeals to me on many levels.
Thank you for sharing this and I wish you all the best in the contest
hugs
kate
Comment Written 27-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 03-May-2012
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Kate, what a very nice thing to say about my writing. Thanks!
Comment from Cobalt Blue
Quite an interesting hobby you have there! I like to look at the obituaries and compute the perecentages of those who were older than me and those who were younger. I feel it is a good day when the majority are older! You are evidently a people watcher, a dreamer, and obviously a writer. Well, in this piece you did a great job writing. The piece was smooth with a logical progression. You told a lot in this short essay. Well done!
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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Quite an interesting hobby you have there! I like to look at the obituaries and compute the perecentages of those who were older than me and those who were younger. I feel it is a good day when the majority are older! You are evidently a people watcher, a dreamer, and obviously a writer. Well, in this piece you did a great job writing. The piece was smooth with a logical progression. You told a lot in this short essay. Well done!
Comment Written 27-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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Thank you so much for finding this essay worth of reading. It makes my day!
Comment from mommerry
Your story was well written, easily understood and what I consider a tribute to the photographers who wanted to "say" what you are seeing in the pictures. I do see a couple of things that I would change if it were my piece:
In list of reasons: Reunited at (eliminate after)
Parag. beginning: My eyes beam... - caught in one same (I thought that redundant).
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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Your story was well written, easily understood and what I consider a tribute to the photographers who wanted to "say" what you are seeing in the pictures. I do see a couple of things that I would change if it were my piece:
In list of reasons: Reunited at (eliminate after)
Parag. beginning: My eyes beam... - caught in one same (I thought that redundant).
Comment Written 27-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my work!
