The English Assignment
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "The Devil lives in Mastic."The author tells a tale how he tried to better him
3 total reviews
Comment from MumEsGirl
Thank you for sharing this wonderful story. I cant understand the attitude of a person who wouuld scare a child like this.
I am a bit bewildered at the low rating you have received. The story is good but maybe there are spelling and grammar issues that I have not noticed
hugs
kate
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Thank you for sharing this wonderful story. I cant understand the attitude of a person who wouuld scare a child like this.
I am a bit bewildered at the low rating you have received. The story is good but maybe there are spelling and grammar issues that I have not noticed
hugs
kate
Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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yes I'm working on the issues. thank you,
Comment from JoyMarie
I was intrigued by your story right from the start, then I thought it was going to be a joke when I saw sole. I thought maybe he was going to sell his shoe to a man name Devil or something so I was taken off the story line making assumptions. Here are the typos or ? I found:
there=their?
sole or soul?
brake or break?
profit or prophet?
then instead of than.
quotes on= "Is that It? etc.
than=then
sole=soul?
Hope this helps? I otherwise enjoyed the story.
JoyMarie
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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I was intrigued by your story right from the start, then I thought it was going to be a joke when I saw sole. I thought maybe he was going to sell his shoe to a man name Devil or something so I was taken off the story line making assumptions. Here are the typos or ? I found:
there=their?
sole or soul?
brake or break?
profit or prophet?
then instead of than.
quotes on= "Is that It? etc.
than=then
sole=soul?
Hope this helps? I otherwise enjoyed the story.
JoyMarie
Comment Written 21-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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thank you joy sometimes when I write and get emotional grammar goes out the window.
Comment from Cobalt Blue
This is an interesting story but it is absolutely full of spag. In the 2nd paragraph: Fourth should not be capitalized; "elementary" is spelled incorrectly; there should not be aperiod after Miss; The line that starts "Only after the class..." is not a full sentence merely a dangling phrase; "Knew" should replace "new". You should do a lot more proofreading and at a minumum use spellcheck before you post. The spag is very distracting for the reader.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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This is an interesting story but it is absolutely full of spag. In the 2nd paragraph: Fourth should not be capitalized; "elementary" is spelled incorrectly; there should not be aperiod after Miss; The line that starts "Only after the class..." is not a full sentence merely a dangling phrase; "Knew" should replace "new". You should do a lot more proofreading and at a minumum use spellcheck before you post. The spag is very distracting for the reader.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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thank you cobalt when i write i just try to get the words and thoughts out as quickly as I can an forget about punctuation. But it's the end result that counts.
