Money, Money, Who's Got the Money?
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "MONEY: Conclusion"Two bank robbers hide in a women's boarding house.
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Comment from LilHippie
Hi! Giving you a standing ovation in my living room. Good thing the cats are in Heaven, they would have jumped and stared at me very strangely. That was priceless. I love that you did not make it some huge dramatic unbelievable thing. Given the limited intelligence of both men, it was just awesome that Mickey was convinced marriage to Frieda was the right thing. How he wanted to show his sister he is worth something. I can just picture them all on a cruise. Too funny. That could be a Part II!!! LOL Well, I am really sorry to see this story end. I kind of said "UH OH" when I saw "new writing from Spitfire." Seriously, thank you so much for this story/script, which I will never forget. Filled with humor, fun, crime, and sisterhood, in a very disjointed, but lovable way. I loved the end. It is amazing when a writer finds the perfect end that satisfies readers and makes sense, in a comical way in this instance. BRAVO Lady!!!! BRAVO!!!!
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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Hi! Giving you a standing ovation in my living room. Good thing the cats are in Heaven, they would have jumped and stared at me very strangely. That was priceless. I love that you did not make it some huge dramatic unbelievable thing. Given the limited intelligence of both men, it was just awesome that Mickey was convinced marriage to Frieda was the right thing. How he wanted to show his sister he is worth something. I can just picture them all on a cruise. Too funny. That could be a Part II!!! LOL Well, I am really sorry to see this story end. I kind of said "UH OH" when I saw "new writing from Spitfire." Seriously, thank you so much for this story/script, which I will never forget. Filled with humor, fun, crime, and sisterhood, in a very disjointed, but lovable way. I loved the end. It is amazing when a writer finds the perfect end that satisfies readers and makes sense, in a comical way in this instance. BRAVO Lady!!!! BRAVO!!!!
Comment Written 19-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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Wow! Thanks, Lil for the standing ovation. Yes, it does leave room for a sequel. Mickey and Frieda married. LOL. And what would happen if Trixie shows up and tries to outdo him somehow.
Now, if I can only find a theater willing to take a chance.
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That would be amazing!!! I can really easily visualize them all! It would be a hit, I KNOW it. I really do. I consider myself a movie/stories buff, grew up watching all the greats and shows like Alfred Hitchcock with my parents, especially my Mom (that was our time together, movies) and I think I am a pretty good judge of what is different and amazing and what is the same old tired romantic comedy, etc. This is a HIT for sure. Fresh, different, great characters, a bit of mystery and laughs throughout, but still a bit of worrying about their outcome. Have you noticed that they cannot even get good screenwriters anymore, no creativity, they just remake 70s movies! What's up with that? Saturday Night Live is unbearable to watch now, just unbearable and sad. Sitcoms suck! Seinfeld was probably the most innovative in a long time. And Bernie Mac's Show (poor Bernie, gone too soon) Anyway, this was so much fun to read. I hope you find that theater.
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Thanks. I agree about the sitcoms not being funny.Don't watch SNL but will take your word for it. There are some occasional good movies, but most are three stars LOL. I'll let you know if I have any luck. Have some projects to finish up first. Thanks so much for being my faithful reviewer on this.
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Oh, I definitely am a faithful followers of these ladies I now love, and even the crooks too. LOL
Comment from TammyGail
Lol.. I loved this girlie, Mickey sure changed his mind about FRIEDA after she let down her hair and showed her girlie side a bit more.. Guess turning his self in will have to wait for another day as making Trixie green eyed sounds better..lol great work and thanks for the note as well that makes sense about not adding "too much parenthetic actions and emotions" :) one of these days I'm going to venture out and try and write a screenplay, thanks for the read always a pleasure to read your fine writing..Hope your having a wonderful day
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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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Lol.. I loved this girlie, Mickey sure changed his mind about FRIEDA after she let down her hair and showed her girlie side a bit more.. Guess turning his self in will have to wait for another day as making Trixie green eyed sounds better..lol great work and thanks for the note as well that makes sense about not adding "too much parenthetic actions and emotions" :) one of these days I'm going to venture out and try and write a screenplay, thanks for the read always a pleasure to read your fine writing..Hope your having a wonderful day
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Comment Written 19-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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Thanks, Tammy. Yes, Trixie's the key to his turnabout. Not writing a screenplay is a different format. You'd have to see Ron about that. I find it fun not to have to put in so much description and work with dialogue to show almost everything.
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:) fun and you do a damn good job with it. .hope you and your nephew is doing well
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Yes, he is. Just called to say he got his new van that can be driven with voice commands! His arms get weaker every day.
Comment from Overthehill
This is the first screen play I have read or reviewed and I had to realize that it needs to be read differently. I tried to imagine the voices in my head and before long I think I did a pretty good job. I couldn't have done that if you hadn't brought the characters to life. I liked the thought of Frieda letting her hair down.
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This is the first screen play I have read or reviewed and I had to realize that it needs to be read differently. I tried to imagine the voices in my head and before long I think I did a pretty good job. I couldn't have done that if you hadn't brought the characters to life. I liked the thought of Frieda letting her hair down.
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Comment Written 19-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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Thanks,Overthehill. (love the name). Sorry you didn't have a chance to read more. The scene prior is paying through until Friday, if you want to try your luck again.
