Rain drops on sand
About the aroma Rain brings about3 total reviews
Comment from Cobalt Blue
I'm sorry but you are entering a 5-7-5 contest so the poem must be a 575. The numbers refer to the number of syllables in each line. tinge(1) of(2) drops(3) from(4) hea(5) ven(6)
Likewise your second line has 11 and your 3rd, 9. It needs to be completely redone to be a 575. Sorry.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2012
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I'm sorry but you are entering a 5-7-5 contest so the poem must be a 575. The numbers refer to the number of syllables in each line. tinge(1) of(2) drops(3) from(4) hea(5) ven(6)
Likewise your second line has 11 and your 3rd, 9. It needs to be completely redone to be a 575. Sorry.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2012
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ok sure :) ill redo it :D
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Could you review it again please ?
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Corrected it :)
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
It's good now!
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The form must be in THREE lines, like this:
Tinge of pure rain drops
on sand ignites fresh fragrance
brings forth bliss immense
Just fix that and you have a very good senyru now!
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I like what you've said here... second line is great! Problem is that it is NOT a 5-7-5 poem. Count syllables, not words. See the directions again. Then try redoing it correctly. Second line could be just 'a/wa/ken/ing fresh/ fra/grance'... already 7 syllables.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2012
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It's good now!
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The form must be in THREE lines, like this:
Tinge of pure rain drops
on sand ignites fresh fragrance
brings forth bliss immense
Just fix that and you have a very good senyru now!
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I like what you've said here... second line is great! Problem is that it is NOT a 5-7-5 poem. Count syllables, not words. See the directions again. Then try redoing it correctly. Second line could be just 'a/wa/ken/ing fresh/ fra/grance'... already 7 syllables.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2012
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thanx sure ill redo it :)
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Let me know so I can go back and redo the rating too, okay?
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I can re-enter right ???..I'm totally new..no membership..no money..nothing
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Sure :)
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Do not delete the poem, just click EDIT and retype and then save the new version.
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Alright
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Could you review it again please ?
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Could you please review it again ?? Thankyou
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It's really a good one now! Just needs to be put into THREE lines.
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I've done it..finally..perfectly...:P..Thanks a lot..:)
Whens this competition going to be judged ??
Comment from Chris Tee
Sorry but your syllable counts are all out the first line has 6 instead of 5 syllables. The second line has 10 instead of 7 syllables. The third line has 8 instead of 5 syllables.
I paste you the rules of syllable counting below:
Syllable counting is really easy
When counting syllables in English you are counting the sound that each or more of the vowels in the word make. Then you count the number of times you hear the vowel sound. Vowels are A, E, I, O, U, and Y is also a syllable sound. She sound is important when you say taxed you do not hear the ed.
Sleeping = 2 sleep=1 ing =1 total =2 syllables
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2012
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Sorry but your syllable counts are all out the first line has 6 instead of 5 syllables. The second line has 10 instead of 7 syllables. The third line has 8 instead of 5 syllables.
I paste you the rules of syllable counting below:
Syllable counting is really easy
When counting syllables in English you are counting the sound that each or more of the vowels in the word make. Then you count the number of times you hear the vowel sound. Vowels are A, E, I, O, U, and Y is also a syllable sound. She sound is important when you say taxed you do not hear the ed.
Sleeping = 2 sleep=1 ing =1 total =2 syllables
Comment Written 17-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2012
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Thanks a lot I'll redo it...:)
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Could you review it again please ?
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Now it is perfect
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Thanks a lot..:)
Whens this competition going to be judged ??
