Comment from NaughtieScribe

Excellent

Oh goodness, please don't let the knife stab Anna in the fall. I'm too happy Bobby got his, but mercy don't let Anna be dead or seriously wounded, any more than she is.

 Comment Written 04-Aug-2012

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2012

Thank you.

Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen

Excellent

Bobby's arm around her throat caused Anna to struggle for each breat[].

Good job building the suspense and great cliffhanger. Did they finally shoot the bastard? When they fell, did his knife go into Anna.

Roberta

 Comment Written 31-May-2012

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2012

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from WLHall

Excellent

Very suspensful the way you ended it. I guess the SWAT team got in. Excellent writing, tight. You are very good at writing domestic violent scenes, I can see why you have taken up the cause by posting the hotline number.
Wanda

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from kjeffries

Exceptional

I really enjoyed reading your story. The suspense kept me going. I like the introduction best. Also, the picture adds a certain vividness about the story. The story is very well written. I really enjoyed it!

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from bookishfabler

Excellent

"Where the knives at?"
You probaly intended to leave out the "are" but I thought I'd point it out just in case.


This is just the editing, but you need to move, "Bitch," down a line.

Anna kicked backward up his leg until she connected with his knee cap.
"Bitch!"


Very well done. Abit short, but a great chapter. Can't wait for the next one.
hugs Heidi

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012

Sorry for the late answer to your review. I wanted to wait until I had time to make the adjustments. Thank you for the eagle eye.

Comment from G.B. Smith

Excellent

Hey there Barbara,
The story is progressing along very nicely. I am so glad the mean bastard is dead. Just as it seems that it goes for so many abused women. I am enjoying this book very much
Bear

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from fairy77

Excellent

That was great action maybe jerk or asshole.I liked slut and whore.This was some action and great dialogue.Good relationship build and suspense.Beth fairy77.

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Readywriter52

Excellent

Bobby has gone crazy. He is keeping Anna against her will. He's talking about killing her with a knife. He's mean and blames all his problems on Anna. I don't think the police have any other choice but to kill him. I hope they stop him before he kills Anna.

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2012

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from October21

Excellent

I DON'T UNDERSTAND! I THOUGHT ANNA WAS GOING TO MEET TROY? I COULDN'T FIND THAT PART. VERY VIVID AND IMAGINATIVE, THOUGH. I ENJOYED IT.

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2012

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Herb

Excellent

I missed the last post, so the story has jumped a little for me and I lost my self a bit. Like when it jumps from inside the house to out, is quite confusing, but a situation like this would be. I must say I wasn't expecting such a dramatic turn, but you've built up your charters well, so why not.

Peter

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2012

Thank you for the kind review.