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Lonely Hearts Meet

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Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.

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Comment from JW
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This is another well written chapter that literally keeps the reader on the edge of there seat. No doubt, a great addition to your story. I cannot help but wonder what happens next.

Good job. JW

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2012


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Comment from ulster3
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Hello, barbara.
A good edge of seat read. I think calling the SWAT team out must be kinda like a code blue in the ER. Poor Anna must hurt so bad, and be so scared.
Warmly, Rebecca

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2012


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Comment from me_tudor
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Wow, this story is really moving along. I'm so afraid for Anna. I've feeling this story will have a happy ending but it sounds like things could get bad real quick. Great job!

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2012


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Comment from RazberryBullet
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What a horrible setup :( Bobby sounds both neurotic and dangerous. At least he doesn't know his pals are in jail.

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Well done!

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2012


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Comment from Aarondodd1989
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I haven't read any unfanned prose in a while but I'm glad I did, this is a really well written piece, there are strong characters with clear motives and there are signs they have been well developed, of course I have no idea what happened up to this point so it's a little redundant me commenting on the story.

The writing is tight and exciting, which is a good combination. Good work.

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2012


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Comment from peggles
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I have enjoyed reading this chapter
womens domestic violence is still looked on in some countries as the norm which is discusting in this day and age
you have conveyed the action so vividely and your dialouge is spot on Barbara
I thought this was an outstanding continuation in this chapter
I hope Anna recovers, but she has such severe injuries
Bobby is a dangerious person I hope Troy can keep him away and Micheal will be safe
I have enjoyed reading this explosive chapter

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2012


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Comment from tinams
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I have enjoyed reading this chapter. The action moves along well, and your vivid dialogue conveys the intense emotions of the characters. :) Tina

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2012


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Comment from The Stranger
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well I have just done my bit for the likes of Anna by donating nearly 200 easter eggs to my local womens domestic violence unit, well done in continuing to highlight this

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2012


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Comment from Rama Rao
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Excellent.
You have described the scene so vividly that I could see it like a movie scene.
However, the opening sentence looks a bit untidy. Could you have a second look at it?

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2012


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Comment from Deejharrington
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What a cliff hanger! I can just imagine how crazy with worry Troy must be going through. Thank goodness Michael is safe. The police have to act fast but careful. That maniac will do anything. I can't wait to see how it all works out.
deb

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2012


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reply by Deejharrington on 09-Apr-2012
    my pleasure
    deb