Day Closes Up Her Shop
quatrains in 8/7/8/7209 total reviews
Comment from AprilShower
Hi, Brooke. As usual, this is a very beautiful poem. I enjoyed reading it, and I liked the way it rhymed. It also goes very well with the picture. :o) April
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
Hi, Brooke. As usual, this is a very beautiful poem. I enjoyed reading it, and I liked the way it rhymed. It also goes very well with the picture. :o) April
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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April, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Natureschild
Your chosen words just paint a beautiful sunset.
I like the flow of the 8/7/8/7 syllable count.
Nice use of alliteration with 'won't waste' and 'before a blaze'.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
Your chosen words just paint a beautiful sunset.
I like the flow of the 8/7/8/7 syllable count.
Nice use of alliteration with 'won't waste' and 'before a blaze'.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
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Natureschild, thank you so very much for your gracious review :-) Brooke
Comment from skye
I adore this. The idea of shelving the sun, even for a brief time, is fresh, lively, and works.
Your art, your word choice, and the cadence of the words makes this easy to remember, easy to enjoy.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
I adore this. The idea of shelving the sun, even for a brief time, is fresh, lively, and works.
Your art, your word choice, and the cadence of the words makes this easy to remember, easy to enjoy.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
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Thank you, Skye, for your gracious review :-) Brooke
Comment from words
Bravo!!!!
Love it, Brooke, you are the master of the repeating form. You so skillfully build for emphasis.
Also your content is superb, you always bring fresh insight to a subject.
All of this great stuff and evil eddy won't let me light you up with six. Hugs, d
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
Bravo!!!!
Love it, Brooke, you are the master of the repeating form. You so skillfully build for emphasis.
Also your content is superb, you always bring fresh insight to a subject.
All of this great stuff and evil eddy won't let me light you up with six. Hugs, d
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
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Yay for you, boo to Eddie :-) Thanks so very much, Diane :-) Brooke
Comment from Janie King
I really like this..I never thought of the days ending as closing up shop..or the sunset being a signature...really neat. God bless.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
I really like this..I never thought of the days ending as closing up shop..or the sunset being a signature...really neat. God bless.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
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Janie, I'm so pleased you enjoyed my imagery - thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from fairydancer
Where do you get your ideas from, Brooke? You ahve such a clever way of looking at things! And then converting that simple idea into a well structured poem with good continuity of theme. Beautiful cadence as always. Very uplifting. Thanks - Cally :)))
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
Where do you get your ideas from, Brooke? You ahve such a clever way of looking at things! And then converting that simple idea into a well structured poem with good continuity of theme. Beautiful cadence as always. Very uplifting. Thanks - Cally :)))
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Cally, thanks so much for your thoughtful review - I just work on thinking up ideas LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from Tonulak
Dear Brooke,
I thought the concept of the day closing up her shop was very fresh and putting the sun on a shelf, but having it refuse to stay till was also different. I thought this was a unique approach to a very well-worn theme. Great job!
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
Dear Brooke,
I thought the concept of the day closing up her shop was very fresh and putting the sun on a shelf, but having it refuse to stay till was also different. I thought this was a unique approach to a very well-worn theme. Great job!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Ted, thank you so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, brooke, you did a great job writing this beautiful quatrain poem about the daytime shutting her dooors but coming back with a vengeance.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
this is very well written, brooke, you did a great job writing this beautiful quatrain poem about the daytime shutting her dooors but coming back with a vengeance.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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sweetwoodjax, thanks so very much for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Rob Caudle
Thanks, Brooke, this was a wonderful piece once again loved the art and the idea of day closing up her shop.
love this line
for Sun cannot be long consigned
to shelves designed for storing.
Rob
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
Thanks, Brooke, this was a wonderful piece once again loved the art and the idea of day closing up her shop.
love this line
for Sun cannot be long consigned
to shelves designed for storing.
Rob
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Rob, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from RYME4U
So original is the idea of this poem. Very well written. The rhyme is great and it is delightful to read. The picture is well chosen, too
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
So original is the idea of this poem. Very well written. The rhyme is great and it is delightful to read. The picture is well chosen, too
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
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RYME4U, thanks so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke