Day Closes Up Her Shop
quatrains in 8/7/8/7209 total reviews
Comment from Laurie Clayton
Lovely rhythmic quatrains, Brooke
that contain a sense of fun and
frivolity surrounding the Sun's
daily rising and setting times.
Brought a welcome smile to my dial
on a day such as this.
Thank you for sharing.
Laurie
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Lovely rhythmic quatrains, Brooke
that contain a sense of fun and
frivolity surrounding the Sun's
daily rising and setting times.
Brought a welcome smile to my dial
on a day such as this.
Thank you for sharing.
Laurie
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Laurie, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Joy Graham
This is beautiful, Brooke! I love the competition going on with Day and Sun.
My favorite line is: "He signs his name in crimson ink"
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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This is beautiful, Brooke! I love the competition going on with Day and Sun.
My favorite line is: "He signs his name in crimson ink"
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Joy, thank you so very much for your lovely review :-) Brooke
Comment from percival86jack
"Day closes up her shop each night "
"He signs his name in crimson ink"
Love these phrases... very clever my dear Brooke! Great pic... hugs, Jack xxxxxxx
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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"Day closes up her shop each night "
"He signs his name in crimson ink"
Love these phrases... very clever my dear Brooke! Great pic... hugs, Jack xxxxxxx
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Jack, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Gungalo
Awesome it is Brooke. It is a great write in quatrains that tells of the sun and where she goes at night. Wonderful it is and the best part was this:
He signs his name in crimson ink
until the skies are burning,
a proclamation to us all
his light is soon returning.
Wonderful.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Awesome it is Brooke. It is a great write in quatrains that tells of the sun and where she goes at night. Wonderful it is and the best part was this:
He signs his name in crimson ink
until the skies are burning,
a proclamation to us all
his light is soon returning.
Wonderful.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Gungalo, thanks so much for your thoughtful review : -) Brooke
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It was my pleasure Brooke!!
Comment from asheagold
I love this personification of day and the sun. It's very cute to portray the sun as being somewhat vain and day as being very practical in closing up shop.Nice rhyme pattern. Good rhythm. Good job!
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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I love this personification of day and the sun. It's very cute to portray the sun as being somewhat vain and day as being very practical in closing up shop.Nice rhyme pattern. Good rhythm. Good job!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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asheagold, thank you so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Carole Rosa
Brooke, Your imagination creates deep thoughts to inspire you to write such a brilliant piece. I have never thought of the Sun in that way, but now that you have penned it, I can see that it is true. Very clever. Carole
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Brooke, Your imagination creates deep thoughts to inspire you to write such a brilliant piece. I have never thought of the Sun in that way, but now that you have penned it, I can see that it is true. Very clever. Carole
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Carole, thank you so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Bina1
How incredibly lovely! Very visual with the phrases you wove! Lovely art selection. Thank you so much for sharing your talent!
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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How incredibly lovely! Very visual with the phrases you wove! Lovely art selection. Thank you so much for sharing your talent!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Bina, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from MumEsGirl
This is a very original approach to the days ending. It is so full of promise and the hopes for the future.
the artwork is magnificant,it brings such a sense of warmth to the poem.
Hugs
kate
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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This is a very original approach to the days ending. It is so full of promise and the hopes for the future.
the artwork is magnificant,it brings such a sense of warmth to the poem.
Hugs
kate
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Kate, thank you so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from poetbear
My current favorite of your work.
The personification is great.
Great feeling and flow.
Makes sense and touched me.
A gem!
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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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My current favorite of your work.
The personification is great.
Great feeling and flow.
Makes sense and touched me.
A gem!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Maddy, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
