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Day Closes Up Her Shop

quatrains in 8/7/8/7

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Comment from Spitfire
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I like the personification and metaphor here: shop, inventory, shelf, consigned. "Crimson ink" and blaze- perfect word choices for a sunset.

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2012

reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
    Thank you, Spitfire, for your most thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from rama devi
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Most original personification of Sun and Day. Nicely composed with fine rhythmic grove and great rhyming-good slant rhyming in closing stanza. Nice artwork presentation.
Enjoyed reading aloud.

Whimsical!

Love,
rd

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2012

reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
    So glad you enjoyed the whimsy, rama devi :-) Thank you for your review :-) Brooke
Comment from Janice Canerdy
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Your beautiful poem--in ballad stanza, which I love--reminds the reader of the God-given roles of day and night. You have used personification very effectively.

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2012

reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
    Janice, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review : -) Brooke
Comment from ennahanid
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This is just a magnificent piece. Sunrises and sunsets are two of my favorite things. They always amaze me, the beauty of them and I wish everyone could see them as you portray here.

Thank you...Dinah

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2012

reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
    Dinah, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from squid152
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Nice alliteration and imagery in, Day closes her shop each night to take inventory. Gave me the image of God looking down on Earth to see what good work has been done. I like how you give God the credit for the beautiful sunsets. Who else could you credit? If I were God, I would give you much good credit for your inspiring prose.

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2012

reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
    squid, thank you so very much for your wonderfully supportive and gracious comments :-) Brooke
Comment from amahra
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Oh what a beautiful picture of the sun setting. And the words of the poem is so appropriate for the photo art. You spoke of your subject so beautifully.

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2012

reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
    amahra, thank you so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from fairy77
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This is lovely.A shopkeeper and his daily routine.Just one thing I have no idea what style this is.This is a great descriptive piece.Well done Adew!beth fairy ps finally got a descent nights sleep:)beth hugs.

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2012

reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
    This is just quatrain poetry using an 8/7/8/7 syllable count - no special style, though it is sometimes used in hymns. Thank you for your thoughtful review, Beth :-) Brooke
Comment from Sharrum
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This is a wonderful poem. I enjoyed it very much. You did an excellent job. I loved they rhyme, rhythm, and flow. Keep on writing.

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2012

reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
    Sharrum, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from BLACKDYKE
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How bloody good is this you pearl you.
Sooooo, so cleverly though up and
Executed. Lovely ideas you seem to
Develop. This is particularly good.
What a fantastic brainwave in this gem.
Eric

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2012

reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
    Eric, I truly appreciate your positive and encouraging comments : -) Brooke
Comment from Crackerberries
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This was a very nice read ... I really enjoyed it...the sun and the day and closing up shop for the night and it was just so cool. Loved this: He signs his name in crimson ink
until the skies are burning ...how creative. Nice job.

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2012

reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
    Crackerberries, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke