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My muse contest entry16 total reviews
Comment from HeartsDesire2012
It is so refreshing to hear that you, at the tender age of 12, learn the art of written expression. The artwork you have selected to accompany your poem, is absolutely beautiful. When you put your thoughts on paper and share, trust that it motivates, encourages and inspires others. That would be your payment and worth more than gold. We may never understand all that we bear witness to. Enjoy the good, learn from the bad and continue on your journey. Thank you so much for sharing. Be encouraged.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2012
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It is so refreshing to hear that you, at the tender age of 12, learn the art of written expression. The artwork you have selected to accompany your poem, is absolutely beautiful. When you put your thoughts on paper and share, trust that it motivates, encourages and inspires others. That would be your payment and worth more than gold. We may never understand all that we bear witness to. Enjoy the good, learn from the bad and continue on your journey. Thank you so much for sharing. Be encouraged.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2012
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Thank you so much for your kind review of my work. I am glad that you liked it.
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My pleasure.
Comment from justchillin
What a perfect poem, it's really inspirational. This resonates with me so much. Such truth, it's the giving and the receiving, that means the most. Thank you for sharing this lovely work
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2012
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What a perfect poem, it's really inspirational. This resonates with me so much. Such truth, it's the giving and the receiving, that means the most. Thank you for sharing this lovely work
Comment Written 12-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2012
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I am glad that my poem inspired you. Thank you so much for your review.
Comment from tinams
I enjoyed reading your My Muse Competition entry and the picture you chose to accompany your rich words fits perfectly. Good luck :)
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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I enjoyed reading your My Muse Competition entry and the picture you chose to accompany your rich words fits perfectly. Good luck :)
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Thank you for your kind review. I am glad you enjoyed my poem.
Comment from jclark
Perfect contest entry. Your poem was concise and flowed nicely. I especially liked the last stanza as I relate clearly to writing about my own life and the people in it. Best of luck!
Kindly,
Judy
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Perfect contest entry. Your poem was concise and flowed nicely. I especially liked the last stanza as I relate clearly to writing about my own life and the people in it. Best of luck!
Kindly,
Judy
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Thank you Judy for your kind review. I am glad you could relate
to my poem.
Comment from Spitfire
A couple of neat things that I connect to: thoughts waking me in the night, and also "words on fire in my belly" which is a good image. A cliched thoughts: life inspires me. Line seven is awkward to read. Good end rhyme in both stanzas.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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A couple of neat things that I connect to: thoughts waking me in the night, and also "words on fire in my belly" which is a good image. A cliched thoughts: life inspires me. Line seven is awkward to read. Good end rhyme in both stanzas.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Thank you for reviewing my poem. Yes, I felt line seven a tad long. Perhaps, leave off the "Attempting" would shorten it and make the flow better.
Comment from missy98writer
Poet,
Your poem is extremely well written with rich imagery painting a picture in the readers head.. The art work of the flame is priceless you used. Your poem is meaningful with great rhyme and very good meter. You also used excellent allitetation and effective metaphor usage. I enjoyed your first stanza the best: "Thoughts wake me in the night swirling around in a haze. Words on fire in my belly are my plight. Must be put to paper no matter if it pays." Your poem is a contender for a possible win in the My Muse writing prompt. I wish you good luck in the contest with your poem. I'd recommend this thought pondering poem to other readers. Thanks for sharing your poem. Please have a nice day.
Missy.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
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Poet,
Your poem is extremely well written with rich imagery painting a picture in the readers head.. The art work of the flame is priceless you used. Your poem is meaningful with great rhyme and very good meter. You also used excellent allitetation and effective metaphor usage. I enjoyed your first stanza the best: "Thoughts wake me in the night swirling around in a haze. Words on fire in my belly are my plight. Must be put to paper no matter if it pays." Your poem is a contender for a possible win in the My Muse writing prompt. I wish you good luck in the contest with your poem. I'd recommend this thought pondering poem to other readers. Thanks for sharing your poem. Please have a nice day.
Missy.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
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Thank you Missy for taking the time to write such a nice review. I am glad you liked my poem.
Comment from robyn corum
I liked your poem about your muse. It is thought-provoking and well-written. I liked the rhyme scheme. Good job. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
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I liked your poem about your muse. It is thought-provoking and well-written. I liked the rhyme scheme. Good job. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
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Thank you so much for your kind review and well wishes for the contest. I am glad you liked my poem.
Comment from gramalot8
Mystery Poet, I think we can all claim that our daily lifes routine is a great muse. We can definitely be inspired by what is occurring around us. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
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Mystery Poet, I think we can all claim that our daily lifes routine is a great muse. We can definitely be inspired by what is occurring around us. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
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Thank you for reviewing my poem. Thank you for the good luck
wishes.
Comment from asheagold
I love the premise of this poem and I do agree. The line that says "joy, sadness and all the inbetween" should perhaps say "all that's inbetween."
Your rhythm starts off well but then goes off. Perhaps the third line could be cut to"words on fire are my plight." and the next line "Put to paper no matter if it pays" Maybe, just my opinion.
Second verse, third line, perhaps yous should remove attempting "To have others understand what I see." this would fix the off balance rhythm. Just some thoughts. Hope this helps.
Lots of potential. Just needs some polish.
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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
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I love the premise of this poem and I do agree. The line that says "joy, sadness and all the inbetween" should perhaps say "all that's inbetween."
Your rhythm starts off well but then goes off. Perhaps the third line could be cut to"words on fire are my plight." and the next line "Put to paper no matter if it pays" Maybe, just my opinion.
Second verse, third line, perhaps yous should remove attempting "To have others understand what I see." this would fix the off balance rhythm. Just some thoughts. Hope this helps.
Lots of potential. Just needs some polish.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
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Thank you for reviewing my poem and for the suggestions. I will consider making some changes. I appreciate your help.
Comment from JennieClare
Words spoken from a true passionate writer. Thank you for sharing this with us here on fanstory - my history only goes back a short while since I joined - I've never known such pleasure in words before. All the best in the contest. Good meter and rhyme. Jennie
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
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Words spoken from a true passionate writer. Thank you for sharing this with us here on fanstory - my history only goes back a short while since I joined - I've never known such pleasure in words before. All the best in the contest. Good meter and rhyme. Jennie
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
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Thank you Jennie for your kind review. I am glad you liked my poem.
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my pleasure. Jennie
