Whispers in the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "SAVE THE DOGS by JAMES"Brook's best lead dog is struck deaf
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Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Alaskastory,
Another good chapter to your story, and I see a romance developing here - at least in the young man's mind, though the young lady doesn't seem too disinterested either!
The dialogues are good and the descriptions provide an excellent mental picture for the reader.
Well done.
Patrick
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Hi Alaskastory,
Another good chapter to your story, and I see a romance developing here - at least in the young man's mind, though the young lady doesn't seem too disinterested either!
The dialogues are good and the descriptions provide an excellent mental picture for the reader.
Well done.
Patrick
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Your comments are encouraging, Patrick. Thanks so much for taking time to read and review this chapter.
Comment from Cobalt Blue
Well, being from Alaska this story caught my eye. As I'm rather new this is the first chapter of your book I've seen. I'll definitely look for more. A very good story. I didn't notice any spag at all which is a sure sign of a writer who cares about her work. Well done!
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Well, being from Alaska this story caught my eye. As I'm rather new this is the first chapter of your book I've seen. I'll definitely look for more. A very good story. I didn't notice any spag at all which is a sure sign of a writer who cares about her work. Well done!
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Thanks for the compliments. I admit it is very rare when spags in my posts do not show up to FS readers. I appreciate the time you gave to reading and reviewing this chapter. Marie
Comment from forestport12
Another solid read. I love the short crisp sentence that clearly tell a compelling and adventurous story. I almost had a run in with a moose once. I was in Maine from Canada and ran out at night to spot it. I love the characters and the animals. Stan
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Another solid read. I love the short crisp sentence that clearly tell a compelling and adventurous story. I almost had a run in with a moose once. I was in Maine from Canada and ran out at night to spot it. I love the characters and the animals. Stan
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Many thanks, Stan. I really appreciate the time you gave to this chapter and a review. Marie
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Alaskastory:
I'm really sorry I did not know about this story to be
following it before now. I have always been intrigued
with dog sledding and have held great admiration for
both the dogs and sledders willing to do those grueling
races. I like your writing style and hope to be able
to keep up with this story.
love,
jan
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Alaskastory:
I'm really sorry I did not know about this story to be
following it before now. I have always been intrigued
with dog sledding and have held great admiration for
both the dogs and sledders willing to do those grueling
races. I like your writing style and hope to be able
to keep up with this story.
love,
jan
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Thank you for reviewing this chapter, Jan. I'm very slow about posting to FS, but I hope you do catch the next one. Marie
Comment from Anisa-
Great job with this next chapter. I like the character PoV swith. It always adds more depth to a story when you get to experience from multiple view points.
Well done. I think you are progressing at a nice rate, hinting at some things to come in the future and your descriptions are fantastic. You really paint a grim picture of the state of the dogs and how much their owners care for them.
Anisa
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
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Great job with this next chapter. I like the character PoV swith. It always adds more depth to a story when you get to experience from multiple view points.
Well done. I think you are progressing at a nice rate, hinting at some things to come in the future and your descriptions are fantastic. You really paint a grim picture of the state of the dogs and how much their owners care for them.
Anisa
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
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Thanks so much for your comments, Anisa. It is good to hear that changing POV is acceptable in this present tense story. Marie
Comment from Haley231333
I really enjoy the key focus of your story. I kind of got bored with all of the descriptions of the people, but it was still a good story.
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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
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I really enjoy the key focus of your story. I kind of got bored with all of the descriptions of the people, but it was still a good story.
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Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
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Thanks for taking time to read this chapter and reviewing.
Comment from MumEsGirl
This is only the second of these stories that I have had the pleasure of reading.
It is well written and draws the readers attention, especially the animal lovers like me, It is always hard to see a wounded animal but good to know that they are so well cared for
hugs
kate
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
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This is only the second of these stories that I have had the pleasure of reading.
It is well written and draws the readers attention, especially the animal lovers like me, It is always hard to see a wounded animal but good to know that they are so well cared for
hugs
kate
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
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Thanks for giving your time and interest to this chapter, Kate. I appreciate your review. Marie
Comment from tinams
I was really surprised at this story. I really didn't think it would be my thing but I can't wait to read more. We in the UK have nothing to compare to this vivid imagery. Well done :) Tina
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
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I was really surprised at this story. I really didn't think it would be my thing but I can't wait to read more. We in the UK have nothing to compare to this vivid imagery. Well done :) Tina
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
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Thanks so much for reading this chapter and reviewing, Tina.
Comment from RazberryBullet
Liked these lines: They answer in stressful dog breath scented with hours-old fish scraps. Their pleading eyes look weary under drooping lids. Blackie lets out a whine that makes me almost feel his pain. :(
He puts arms around my shoulders, squeezes, and the tears of a little kid fill my eyes. :)
Well done!
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
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Liked these lines: They answer in stressful dog breath scented with hours-old fish scraps. Their pleading eyes look weary under drooping lids. Blackie lets out a whine that makes me almost feel his pain. :(
He puts arms around my shoulders, squeezes, and the tears of a little kid fill my eyes. :)
Well done!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
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Your praise is inspiring. Thanks for reviewing this chapter.
Comment from Deejharrington
A fascinating look into the lives of the mushers. I know how close they are to their dogs. So glad they are going to be all right. It sounds like James and Brook are becoming more than good friends.
deb
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
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A fascinating look into the lives of the mushers. I know how close they are to their dogs. So glad they are going to be all right. It sounds like James and Brook are becoming more than good friends.
deb
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
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Thanks for taking time to review this chapter, Deb.
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my pleasure
deb
