Comment from peggles

Excellent

I thought this was another fine interesting chapter and a good follow on from the previous
You have compose a compelling and engrossing adventure story
I felt sad when the dog was hurt
and thought you covered this well
Its good to know that they are well cared for
Your characters are realistic and believable
And natural in their dialogue and actions
I found this interesting and easy to follow

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012

Thanks you for such compliments. I sure do appreciate the time and interest you gave to reading and reviewing this chapter.

Comment from Allezw2

Excellent

Lady Alaskastory,

Having grown up in the high country of the Rockies of Wyoming, I can appreciate, to a degree, the winters of your state.

When the snow falls in the Sierras here in California, we see the daily sled dog races put on by the various resorts. It is so strange to come from the warm basin into the San Gabriels for a day of the competition and drive back to the warm valley.

You have crafted the true experience of a boy growing into the responsibilities of a man and learning the meaning of survival in a harsh land.

Nicely done,

Fantasist

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012

I grew up in Truckee, CA so know of snow falls in the Sierras too. Good to hear from a FS reader who knows a bit about sled dog races. Thanks for reviewing this chapter. Marie

reply by Allezw2 on 06-Apr-2012

One of the funniest was one team owner, unique for the way he dressed: well-worn, sweat-stained long johns without a shirt, black britches, tall black boots, and a tall-crowned, wide-brimmed black hat. There was a short competition after the races, promoted by an association that sponsored the races. Young women from the entertainment industry were enlisted to ride and guide them over a course laid out on the snow-covered, frozen lake.

This man's team was first off. He released the lead dog and stood back. The sled flew off the mark, spraying snow from the brake. The man ran after the sled screaming for her to release the brake. Even with it on, the dogs far outrun him before he could grab the trailing safety line. She finally realized what people were screaming for her to do and stepped off the brake. After they completed the circuit, he was there to welcome his team. For some reason, when he walked back to the sled, the young woman stepped off and the dogs took off, hardly more than warmed up by their previous run. He tried to intercept them, racing through the snow a couple of feet deep on the ice as the dogs ran in a random pattern across the lake. They seemed to be playing with him as he ran shouting his commands, while the dogs easily evaded him.

It was hands down the best show of the day, even as we sympathized with his obvious frustration.

Comment from acvguard11

Excellent

absolutely LOVE the picture..husky's are my FAVORITE...anyway great piece of work you have written here...it deserves the recognition it has received...very well written..great job and keep it up .. don't let others discourage you

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012

Your compliments are encouraging. Thanks so much to taking time to read and review this chapter. Marie

Comment from dezyne1966

Excellent

This is a very sentimental chapter that have me hoping how the story progresses. I hope the dogs get back to work. also, I hope there is a love relationship about to get started between James and Brook Anne.

God Bless
dezyne1966

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012

Thanks so much for taking time to read and review this chapter. I appreciate your comments. Marie

Comment from Jen Gentry

Excellent

Interesting and original storyline. I did not see any mistakes but I am not the best at hunting for spag. My husband and I used to raise and show malamutes and have attended a few sled races, but never raced ourselves. Great chapter.
Jenny

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012

Great to hear about your experience with malamutes, Jenny. Thanks for taking time to read and review this chapter. Marie

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

The great story with depth of emotion and some realistic action. The Alaskan theme is a winner in itself. My brother and sister went to Alaska in the 70's and never wanted to return.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012

Your comments are inspiring, Bill. Thanks for taking time to review this chapter. Marie

Comment from Janie King

Excellent

This is very interesting. I', at a little disadvantage as I haven't read any of the other chapters. I'm a dog lover so getting one hurt is a touchy topic..I have always wanted to visit Alaska, must be an awesome place. Good piece. God bless.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012

Thanks for comments and for reviewing this chapter, Janie. I hope ou can come visit Alaska sometime soon. Marie

Comment from Carrie Carson

Excellent

I like this, hooked right away with the injured dogs. Vivid sense of scene, too. Great photo that goes with it.

I didn't see any spag issues.

Thanks for a good read.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012

It is inspiring to learn you were hooked early in this chapter and that the scene was effective, Carrie. Thanks so much for doing a review. Marie

reply by Carrie Carson on 05-Apr-2012

Glad to assist, especially someone with my real name. I'll look for more of the story as it goes along.

Comment from Manrai Chore

Exceptional

A tour to dog's world was pleasant.A generous topic on injury to dogs and its care and world acclaimed too.A race dog injured is but a sensitive topic for some.-manrai chore

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012

I am very pleased with your comments on this chapter, Manrai. Many thanks for so many stars and fine review. Marie

Comment from Shirley McLain

Excellent

I love this story and can't wait to read more. In your last sentence you wrote "but don't tell". I think it would read better if you used didn't tell. Great job.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012

Sticking absolutely with the present tense does sound awkward in spots, Shirley. But I sure do appreciate your interest and doing a review. Marie