Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 60 "part three, Chapter 18"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Gungalo
Don't be sorry for anything you write, girl. It is imperative that we understand what is going on in every aspect so we may fully understand the abuse. Sigh, I hope she makes it through all this.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2012
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Don't be sorry for anything you write, girl. It is imperative that we understand what is going on in every aspect so we may fully understand the abuse. Sigh, I hope she makes it through all this.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and encouragement.
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My pleasure girl.
Comment from cce29
Again, another great part of your book!! I look forward to reading more of it. I plan to go to your site, and rereading from beginning to what ever you have finished. you have great dialog, and i could see and feel the situation. you definitely deserve 6 stars for this part of your book. As I can tell so far, you book overall deserves 6 stars. great job.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2012
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Again, another great part of your book!! I look forward to reading more of it. I plan to go to your site, and rereading from beginning to what ever you have finished. you have great dialog, and i could see and feel the situation. you definitely deserve 6 stars for this part of your book. As I can tell so far, you book overall deserves 6 stars. great job.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2012
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from peggles
Oh! my such a lot of aggression in this piece
Still she has the courage to answer him back
This is shown in such amazingly visually detail I could see him lashing out and wanted to give him a good kicking
Will anyone rescue her or can she escape maybe she will find a way to kill him (I'd help her)
waiting now to find out
don't take too long
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2012
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Oh! my such a lot of aggression in this piece
Still she has the courage to answer him back
This is shown in such amazingly visually detail I could see him lashing out and wanted to give him a good kicking
Will anyone rescue her or can she escape maybe she will find a way to kill him (I'd help her)
waiting now to find out
don't take too long
Comment Written 01-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2012
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I found this chapter so upsetting, Barbara... your writing drove it home just how wicked this man is (And having been through so much myself, it brought it to the surface) which shows you made a good job of this brutal attack.
A couple of suggestions, but if not in agreement, just ignore them, my friend.
and time[d] served - time
Anna used the chair to crawl to her feet - might I suggest.
Anna used the chair to heave herself up onto her feet
She sat against the wall. Might you sonsider...
She prompt herself up against the wall
glass sliding door
sliding glass door
Margaret
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2012
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I found this chapter so upsetting, Barbara... your writing drove it home just how wicked this man is (And having been through so much myself, it brought it to the surface) which shows you made a good job of this brutal attack.
A couple of suggestions, but if not in agreement, just ignore them, my friend.
and time[d] served - time
Anna used the chair to crawl to her feet - might I suggest.
Anna used the chair to heave herself up onto her feet
She sat against the wall. Might you sonsider...
She prompt herself up against the wall
glass sliding door
sliding glass door
Margaret
Comment Written 01-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2012
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Thank you for your eagle eye. I struggled writing this myself. I appreciate your insight.
Comment from c_lucas
You did a real good job with this chapter showing Anna growing courage to talk back to Bobby. This is very well written with very good imagery.
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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2012
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You did a real good job with this chapter showing Anna growing courage to talk back to Bobby. This is very well written with very good imagery.
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Comment Written 01-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2012
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Thank you for your review and continued support.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie
