Money, Money, Who's Got the Money?
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "MONEY: Frieda's Plan "Two bank robbers hide in a women's boarding house.
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Comment from Maustin
Amazing and believable dialogue. Your work flows very well. Your characters are colorful and realistic. You have a good dramatic script on your hands. Do you plan to ever plan to submit? You should so consider. Good flow. Well done.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012
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Amazing and believable dialogue. Your work flows very well. Your characters are colorful and realistic. You have a good dramatic script on your hands. Do you plan to ever plan to submit? You should so consider. Good flow. Well done.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012
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Thanks, Maustin for you vote of confidence. Great to get a sixer on Saturday! The first fifteen pages and a synopsis of this play did win second place in one contest. I need to get it out there again.
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So welcome Spitfire. Great!! Do it!!
Comment from gramalot8
Spitfire. Good script. I like the action you get from your words. Good interaction from one character to the next. Good storyline with a lot of wit thrown in. Good visual of what's happening, where they are exiting, their phyical actions, etc. Thanks for sharing with us.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012
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Spitfire. Good script. I like the action you get from your words. Good interaction from one character to the next. Good storyline with a lot of wit thrown in. Good visual of what's happening, where they are exiting, their phyical actions, etc. Thanks for sharing with us.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012
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I'm glad you enjoyed it and could see the action. Thanks for tuning it and the lovely review.
Comment from Earl of Oxford
The nuttieness continues, Shari, and I sure admire you ability to keep the dialogue going originally and with fun.
Wonderful ruses to delay Mickey opening the case - even a double-bluff to encourage him to.
One of these nutters even wears a turban...figures. ;-)
I think, as amusing as the dialogue has been, maybe it's time to move onto Mack's return or the boss's.
Thoroughly entertaing read.
Best wishes, earl
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012
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The nuttieness continues, Shari, and I sure admire you ability to keep the dialogue going originally and with fun.
Wonderful ruses to delay Mickey opening the case - even a double-bluff to encourage him to.
One of these nutters even wears a turban...figures. ;-)
I think, as amusing as the dialogue has been, maybe it's time to move onto Mack's return or the boss's.
Thoroughly entertaing read.
Best wishes, earl
Comment Written 31-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012
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It's coming. Be patient, my friend. Mack comes back next scene.
Comment from purrfect tale
Well, I can't give you another 6 for a couple weeks, but this one was really funny. Mickey might prefer the police to spending much more time with these women.
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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012
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Well, I can't give you another 6 for a couple weeks, but this one was really funny. Mickey might prefer the police to spending much more time with these women.
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Comment Written 31-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012
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I suspect he's reaching the boiling point. Thanks for the virtual six.
Comment from judiverse
This is so full of crazy characters, Spitfire. It's lots of fun. The bit with the prune juice and Megalax is funny. Kandy's admission that she loves Mack is also great. I loved Frieda's line "He aimed but he didn't shoot." "He called you Frigid Face. That's really cold" is funny, and I also enjoyed the bit about putting the bundles of money where the men would never think to look--behind the grammar books. Mickey is somewhat incapacitated at the end of the scene, so he should be easy to fool. Rollicking fun and the dialogue should play great on stage. judi
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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012
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This is so full of crazy characters, Spitfire. It's lots of fun. The bit with the prune juice and Megalax is funny. Kandy's admission that she loves Mack is also great. I loved Frieda's line "He aimed but he didn't shoot." "He called you Frigid Face. That's really cold" is funny, and I also enjoyed the bit about putting the bundles of money where the men would never think to look--behind the grammar books. Mickey is somewhat incapacitated at the end of the scene, so he should be easy to fool. Rollicking fun and the dialogue should play great on stage. judi
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Comment Written 31-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012
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Thanks, judi. Appreciate your noting specific lines that tickled you-- and got the word play on "cold."
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You're welcome. I think it should play really well. judi
