Money, Money, Who's Got the Money?
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "MONEY: Frieda's Plan "Two bank robbers hide in a women's boarding house.
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Comment from adewpearl
I love the attempts of the girls to keep him from opening that case, which would reveal their pilfering :-)
Love the ruse of putting laxative in the water LOL
Love the discussion over keeping the money or turning it in :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
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I love the attempts of the girls to keep him from opening that case, which would reveal their pilfering :-)
Love the ruse of putting laxative in the water LOL
Love the discussion over keeping the money or turning it in :-) Brooke
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
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Thanks, Brooke. I love your parallel structure review. LOL.
Comment from Adam J Santos
Shari, i think I missed a chapter in my abscence. I'll have to go back and read it. It looks like Mickey's going to be on the toilet for awhile due to the Megalax... LOL. I like the idea of accompanying the love story between Kandy and Mack. It gives the rest of your stage play and story realistic depth... I enjoyed this chapter. i have to go back and see if I missed a chapter. I think i did. Well done and i can't wait to see what unravels next. Take care Adam:)
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2012
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Shari, i think I missed a chapter in my abscence. I'll have to go back and read it. It looks like Mickey's going to be on the toilet for awhile due to the Megalax... LOL. I like the idea of accompanying the love story between Kandy and Mack. It gives the rest of your stage play and story realistic depth... I enjoyed this chapter. i have to go back and see if I missed a chapter. I think i did. Well done and i can't wait to see what unravels next. Take care Adam:)
Comment Written 03-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2012
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Okay, I just posted the next installment. Mickey has a worse problem than megalax coming up.
Comment from Eleanor Buron
Fast dialog and fast action keeps this scene jumping; each line of conversation and every movement by the characters builds up the humor. Fun, visual and very clever.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2012
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Fast dialog and fast action keeps this scene jumping; each line of conversation and every movement by the characters builds up the humor. Fun, visual and very clever.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2012
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Thanks, Elly for critiquing all the right things. Told you that you're brilliant.
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I glow at night! LOL I don'dt know about brilliant - but reasonably intelligent I'll accept.
Comment from barkingdog
I guess the old gals only weapons are prune juice and Megalax. They are lax in their self-defense skills. LOL
They tried to hide the money but had to run back. That was funny.
Great Keystone Cops action and arguing amongst themselves foiled their chance to keep the money.
Keep it rollin' as in toilet paper.
:)
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2012
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I guess the old gals only weapons are prune juice and Megalax. They are lax in their self-defense skills. LOL
They tried to hide the money but had to run back. That was funny.
Great Keystone Cops action and arguing amongst themselves foiled their chance to keep the money.
Keep it rollin' as in toilet paper.
:)
Comment Written 02-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2012
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LOL at your last remark. As for self-defense, I think Loony could do serious damage with that teddy bear of hers.
Comment from Tonulak
What is a good farce without laxetives, I ask you?:)
Very funny stuff and totally mad and devious! I wonder what's going to happen next?:)
Great job, Love!
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2012
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What is a good farce without laxetives, I ask you?:)
Very funny stuff and totally mad and devious! I wonder what's going to happen next?:)
Great job, Love!
Comment Written 02-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2012
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Thanks, darling. Potty humor for sure.
Comment from God's Writer
They should have given him more of it and his friend. I enjoy reading these little stories. They make me smile inside and I feel better. I am tired of going elsewhere to work. I will be glad when this mission is over and I can again work out of the house. Thank you for helping to keep my spirits up and for this excellently written story.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2012
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They should have given him more of it and his friend. I enjoy reading these little stories. They make me smile inside and I feel better. I am tired of going elsewhere to work. I will be glad when this mission is over and I can again work out of the house. Thank you for helping to keep my spirits up and for this excellently written story.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2012
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Thanks, HP, More comedy to come.Glad my work keeps your spirits up.
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It does and you don't know how much I need that right now. ILUMPW
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You need to rent some funny t.v. series like Carol Burnett and I love Lucy. Think of me naked. That'll make you laugh!
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No, that will make Willie druel.
Comment from Shirley B
Dear Shari, This is so funny. I loved the water trick. I really want to find out how the ladies get out of this one. Great dialogue! I enjoyed reading this, Shirley
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012
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Dear Shari, This is so funny. I loved the water trick. I really want to find out how the ladies get out of this one. Great dialogue! I enjoyed reading this, Shirley
Comment Written 31-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012
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Thanks for the review, Shirley. You'll find out next week.
Comment from joann r romei
very good, i love the actions with gulping water and pointing the gun in the face, it brought the scene to visual life, and where no gangster will look grammer books, genious!
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012
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very good, i love the actions with gulping water and pointing the gun in the face, it brought the scene to visual life, and where no gangster will look grammer books, genious!
Comment Written 31-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012
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THanks, joann. I love your specific remarks.
Comment from ameen786
Oh my, you are hilarious lady, a pro at it; what a superb comedy stage show this would be to watch. "Megalax"--that's very brilliant, hats off to you.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012
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Oh my, you are hilarious lady, a pro at it; what a superb comedy stage show this would be to watch. "Megalax"--that's very brilliant, hats off to you.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012
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Thanks, ameen. I hope to find some theater willing to give this a shot.
Comment from InterestingRon
Hi Shari
A fun chapter with the girls trying all manner of tricks to stop Mickey opening his money case.
I had a laugh out moment with The Sound of Music comment. If you ever want to get rid of me I head for the hills as soon as that bloody Julie Andrews starts screeching!
Be interesting to see how you are going to resolve this problem for the woman.
Ron xox
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012
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Hi Shari
A fun chapter with the girls trying all manner of tricks to stop Mickey opening his money case.
I had a laugh out moment with The Sound of Music comment. If you ever want to get rid of me I head for the hills as soon as that bloody Julie Andrews starts screeching!
Be interesting to see how you are going to resolve this problem for the woman.
Ron xox
Comment Written 31-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012
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Thanks, Sweetie. Did you know that Christopher Plummer called it The Sound of Mucus!
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I didn't know that. It's been on British TV about 3 million times but I've always managed to avoid it. xox
