Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 59 "part two, Chapter 18"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from jadapenn
Nice chapter with plenty of action. Here if you point a gun at someone you could be charged for attempted murder in any case. Good thing the cops arrested Ted.
luv jada
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2012
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Nice chapter with plenty of action. Here if you point a gun at someone you could be charged for attempted murder in any case. Good thing the cops arrested Ted.
luv jada
Comment Written 26-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Exciting, dramatic, and very well written, Barbara. Troy handled the attempted kidnapping exactly as he should have. An excellent post. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2012
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Exciting, dramatic, and very well written, Barbara. Troy handled the attempted kidnapping exactly as he should have. An excellent post. :) Nancy
Comment Written 26-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Allezw2
Lady barbara wilkey,
It can be so frustrating when outlaws can run ahead of authority and cause the grief they do.
A countering response is so often tardy and situations develop that could have been resolved earlier, if anyone had known.
Trust. but verify, and keep your powder dry.
Nicely done,
Fantasist
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2012
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Lady barbara wilkey,
It can be so frustrating when outlaws can run ahead of authority and cause the grief they do.
A countering response is so often tardy and situations develop that could have been resolved earlier, if anyone had known.
Trust. but verify, and keep your powder dry.
Nicely done,
Fantasist
Comment Written 26-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You are quite welcome.
Comment from Chris Tee
Wow!! Barbara you have me in suspense here with this magnificent write here old sport.Well done, it was a pleasure to read and review this work ma'am..
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2012
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Wow!! Barbara you have me in suspense here with this magnificent write here old sport.Well done, it was a pleasure to read and review this work ma'am..
Comment Written 26-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from WLHall
Barbara, great job again in continuing to build suspense and danger. Your characters have been well developed and I don't see any spags anywhere. Keep up the great work, and I look forward to the next posting.
Wanda
P.S. I like that you put the phone number to the Violence Hotline on your post.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2012
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Barbara, great job again in continuing to build suspense and danger. Your characters have been well developed and I don't see any spags anywhere. Keep up the great work, and I look forward to the next posting.
Wanda
P.S. I like that you put the phone number to the Violence Hotline on your post.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from xxjsfuncxxxity
Good writing, good story! I think the dialogue could use a little work...
"Now to get to Anna without getting myself injured." would read better, i think, if it read, "Now to get to Anna without getting myself killed."
i'd change "Joel, get that shotgun and check the barrel's length. It looked like it was sawed shorter than the legal eighteen inches." to "Joel, get that shotgun and check the barrel's length. It looked like it was sawed "... too obvious it's there for the reader. A real cop wouldn't say this... The other cop knows what the legal length is. That's his job.
All in all a compelling and entertaining read. good work. keep going...
cheers
js
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2012
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Good writing, good story! I think the dialogue could use a little work...
"Now to get to Anna without getting myself injured." would read better, i think, if it read, "Now to get to Anna without getting myself killed."
i'd change "Joel, get that shotgun and check the barrel's length. It looked like it was sawed shorter than the legal eighteen inches." to "Joel, get that shotgun and check the barrel's length. It looked like it was sawed "... too obvious it's there for the reader. A real cop wouldn't say this... The other cop knows what the legal length is. That's his job.
All in all a compelling and entertaining read. good work. keep going...
cheers
js
Comment Written 25-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2012
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Sorry for the late reply. I wanted time to make the changes. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Well, I tell ya, that Troy is one cool customer. I'd have had to go home and change my underwear after that. My estimation of him just jumped several more notches. So glad the cops showed when they did.
Well done. Lots of tension in this one.
And now what? A hostage situation. You leave me hanging again, Barbara. *sigh*
Hugs, Av
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2012
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Well, I tell ya, that Troy is one cool customer. I'd have had to go home and change my underwear after that. My estimation of him just jumped several more notches. So glad the cops showed when they did.
Well done. Lots of tension in this one.
And now what? A hostage situation. You leave me hanging again, Barbara. *sigh*
Hugs, Av
Comment Written 25-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review,
Comment from Rama Rao
Excellent chapter with lot of action. I am glad Troy didn't come to any harm. The law of the land prevailed. I hope Ted gets behind bars and Troy's troubles would be over soon.
Can't wait till Monday as I want to know what happens next?
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2012
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Excellent chapter with lot of action. I am glad Troy didn't come to any harm. The law of the land prevailed. I hope Ted gets behind bars and Troy's troubles would be over soon.
Can't wait till Monday as I want to know what happens next?
Comment Written 25-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Dave M
Barbara,
Another excellent chapter and another accomplice nailed. Looks like long prison sentences for all of them since it's a conspiracy. I enjoyed this chapter and couldn't find anything to criticize.
Dave
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Barbara,
Another excellent chapter and another accomplice nailed. Looks like long prison sentences for all of them since it's a conspiracy. I enjoyed this chapter and couldn't find anything to criticize.
Dave
Comment Written 25-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Thank you for your kind review,
Comment from Anisa-
Only complaint ... Too short! Lol. It just seems like we've been waiting to find something out for a long time now.
Great job. I enjoyed this chapter. Looking forward to the next.
Anisa
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Only complaint ... Too short! Lol. It just seems like we've been waiting to find something out for a long time now.
Great job. I enjoyed this chapter. Looking forward to the next.
Anisa
Comment Written 25-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Thank you for your kind review.
