Still, Bobby Cheered
A deserving teen gets passed over.69 total reviews
Comment from wordsfromsue
I love this story on a lot of levels. Bobby has probably still got fond memories of that night. His mother was given a gift that night. The kids who gave Bobby the vote that got him the jacket gave a gift but I think they received a gift too, by recognizing Bobby's worth and his heart.
You've given the reader the gift of this story.
Thank you! And please tell Bobby hello:-)
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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I love this story on a lot of levels. Bobby has probably still got fond memories of that night. His mother was given a gift that night. The kids who gave Bobby the vote that got him the jacket gave a gift but I think they received a gift too, by recognizing Bobby's worth and his heart.
You've given the reader the gift of this story.
Thank you! And please tell Bobby hello:-)
Comment Written 25-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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What a wonderful thing to say. And I will tell Bobby hello. I've had so many responses to this, that I 'll have to update to the present more stories that illustrate his stamina. Thanks so much for the very high rating.
Comment from joann r romei
What can i say, because i cried myself, 6 stars for Bobby, all the way, every day, medal trophies and honor without words because he sounds like an angel, bless him
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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What can i say, because i cried myself, 6 stars for Bobby, all the way, every day, medal trophies and honor without words because he sounds like an angel, bless him
Comment Written 25-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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He is an angel. Thank you so much for the exceptional rating. I know his mother is looking down and smiling. She did a wonderful job of raising him up by herself and a lot of help from my parents too.
Comment from Spiritual Echo
This is a beautifully written acccount of love, courage and also never underestimating the kindness of people when only negative attitudes are expected.
Beautifuly penned full of heartfelt emotion that wanted to stand and cheer, not only for the event, but also how you wove all the elements together.
Please look at an April 'contest' calledd The book of Pain and Healing" meant as a place to gether all our stories to give inspiration and a voice to those still struggling. It is a multi author book with chapters written by different authors.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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This is a beautifully written acccount of love, courage and also never underestimating the kindness of people when only negative attitudes are expected.
Beautifuly penned full of heartfelt emotion that wanted to stand and cheer, not only for the event, but also how you wove all the elements together.
Please look at an April 'contest' calledd The book of Pain and Healing" meant as a place to gether all our stories to give inspiration and a voice to those still struggling. It is a multi author book with chapters written by different authors.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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I've been following your book, SP. I think it's an awesome plan. I didn't know it was a contest? If I write more on Bobby, I could add that to it.
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The only way I could get it out there, as far as I know, was to make it a I have rec'd do many PMs from people coping with pain in all forms, trying to gett out of their stink hole, that I thought we'd try this. Put it all in one place...but it's not about winning the prize pool, I don't think anybody I've asked feels that way. Bobby's story is magnificent, how to love unconditionally, a father who walks away from it all...and here he is in his 40's which is as you know a very long life expectancy. I think you have a lot to say. In the back of my head I'd like to put this together as a real book for FS members. If you read my ratings for my story "Childhood Abuse" I think you'll understand what I'm trying to do for some who are hurting here. ingrid
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I went to your contest site. Can't enter this one though. If I write something earth shattering in the next week or so, I'll the cast and crew. Right now, I'm back to reviewing to get more money to post. I know how a hamster must feel.
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understood....poetry seems to work faster fo review $
Comment from God's Writer
I shall walk the heavens picking the precious stars for your crown. Only the sparkiest blue ones will do. With Betelgeuse, pried from Orion's right shoulder, as the fitting crowning red one for my queen. Thank you.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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I shall walk the heavens picking the precious stars for your crown. Only the sparkiest blue ones will do. With Betelgeuse, pried from Orion's right shoulder, as the fitting crowning red one for my queen. Thank you.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Well, I guess that means my story impressed you. What a lovely image this is. You need to write it as a poem.
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I have thought about that but
Comment from Writingfundimension
Hi, Spitfire. First of all, I admire that you didn't 'polish' this up just to win a contest. It's a tribute to your sister that you let her words speak for themselves.
I found it interesting that your nephew had obvious physical handicaps (that's probably not politically correct) but your sister struggled with one also - her bitterness. Bobby was able to put his aside, I hope that your sister was able to before she passed. This is not meant as a judgement, just an observation.
Good luck in the contest with this excellent piece.
Bev
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Hi, Spitfire. First of all, I admire that you didn't 'polish' this up just to win a contest. It's a tribute to your sister that you let her words speak for themselves.
I found it interesting that your nephew had obvious physical handicaps (that's probably not politically correct) but your sister struggled with one also - her bitterness. Bobby was able to put his aside, I hope that your sister was able to before she passed. This is not meant as a judgement, just an observation.
Good luck in the contest with this excellent piece.
Bev
Comment Written 25-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Very astute reading, Bev. Yes, her bitterness did affect her. Not only toward John, but toward God, and eventally our mother and me. But upon learning she would die, she called to amend and make right any bad feelings that lingered. I was able to set her mind at rest on some issues. But she never lost her bitterness about John. Such sad stories she told of his refusal to take their son out in public!
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I'm sorry to hear that. It's a common, and I think understandable, situation where a disabled child is involved. Makes me admire your nephew all the more. He's a real inspiration, and I'm glad I know a little of the story. Take care, Bev
Comment from Alanah J
This is really good! I honestly believe that you could make a novel of this. Really, you have great writing skills. After the suspense of waiting for Bobby's recognition, I almost yelled at the computer when the coach shouted "cheerleaders", and I was absolutely fuming until Bobby was awarded with a jacket, and that made me very, very happy. Once again, you have excellent writing skills.
~Alanah
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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This is really good! I honestly believe that you could make a novel of this. Really, you have great writing skills. After the suspense of waiting for Bobby's recognition, I almost yelled at the computer when the coach shouted "cheerleaders", and I was absolutely fuming until Bobby was awarded with a jacket, and that made me very, very happy. Once again, you have excellent writing skills.
~Alanah
Comment Written 25-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Thank you so much, my friend. Barbara was planning to get together with her son and write a book about their struggles, but then the cancer hit her quite unexpectedly. Had been growing silently for thirteen years. No change for survival. But I gave her a great surprise 65th birthday party--just family. I tell about it in my portfolio under the title "The Reunion".
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Will a book still be written about Bobby and Barbara? It sounds like they had a lot of novel-worthy experiences.
I'm sorry to hear about Barbara. At least you were able to give her a special party, so you have even more happy memories of her.
~Alanah
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Not a book, but some more vignettes.
Yes, I was always proud of Barb's accomplishments and happy I could do this for her.
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I really like vignettes. I wrote some for a school assignment last year. Each student had to write five, and put them together into a little book with front and back cover and a table of contents. I wrote twelve, because I couldn't decide what to write about, and was worried that none of them met all the criteria for the assignment. one of my vignettes was about my grandmother.
I would have very happy too if I could have given my Gramma a last birthday party. She was in a hospital in Nevada, though, so I couldn't visit her. She died of breast cancer the day after she turned sixty.
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Thank you so much for sharing your story. I had my senior class do a similar thing and they loved doing it--They added photos, designed a cover and wrote a dedication. They wrote about twenty over a period of eight weeks.
Wow. Your grandmother was young. I'll bet you brought her a lot of joy. And she still's with you every time you think of her.
Hugs,
Shari
Comment from judiverse
I had tears in my eyes when I read this, Spitfire. Bobby's mother's feelings are presented so well in this, and she has a right to be proud of her son. I like that her thoughts are directly expressed, as if she were speaking them aloud. It's wonderful that Bobby made the effort to be team manager and it must have made him feel a real part of the teams. The story is well presented, with going through the various awards and building up to Bobby's. Showing him hugging the jacket he received makes a great ending. Excellent story! Three cheers for Bobby and six stars! judi
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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I had tears in my eyes when I read this, Spitfire. Bobby's mother's feelings are presented so well in this, and she has a right to be proud of her son. I like that her thoughts are directly expressed, as if she were speaking them aloud. It's wonderful that Bobby made the effort to be team manager and it must have made him feel a real part of the teams. The story is well presented, with going through the various awards and building up to Bobby's. Showing him hugging the jacket he received makes a great ending. Excellent story! Three cheers for Bobby and six stars! judi
Comment Written 25-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Thanks, judi for the exceptional rating. It's all true as recorded by his mother. I just read it to my husband and now, he's in tears. We make it a point to call Bobby every week and visit at least once every two months. He's upbeat and had many friend.
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You're so welcome. He looked like a really sweet teen. judi
Comment from robina1978
Such a well deserved reward for your courageous cousin. You did well to honour him and your sister by this story. So sorry for your loss as she died of cancer. Found this very well written about an emotional subject.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Such a well deserved reward for your courageous cousin. You did well to honour him and your sister by this story. So sorry for your loss as she died of cancer. Found this very well written about an emotional subject.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Thanks so much for the six. Bobby is still brave and never complains. His father does visit him once every three months. We call him every week. He and my husband have long chats about politics!
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It deserved the six. It is nice you two keep such regular contact. Unlike his father.
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It's a promise I made to my sister. But Bobby's father is keeping more in contact after Bobby called and told him it was his turn now. Fortunately, they do get along quite well.
Comment from ennahanid
Alrighty then! I have this rule never, but never cry on any day that ends with a 'Y' but this beautiful, touching write broke my rule and made me cry.
Thank you for posting this very loving tribute, that honors not only your nephew, but his mother as well.
Dinah
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Alrighty then! I have this rule never, but never cry on any day that ends with a 'Y' but this beautiful, touching write broke my rule and made me cry.
Thank you for posting this very loving tribute, that honors not only your nephew, but his mother as well.
Dinah
Comment Written 25-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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I just read it to my husband and he cried too! Me, almost, even though I wrote it. Bobby, who now is a more adult Robert, is the most amazing person I know.
Comment from Gungalo
It's a wonderful story with such human emotions. Gosh he must have been so proud that night to have received his jacket. A wonderful story.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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It's a wonderful story with such human emotions. Gosh he must have been so proud that night to have received his jacket. A wonderful story.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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I need to find out if he still has that jacket. Thanks for reading. He's a courageous and inspiring person.
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I hope so.
