Stagecoach
Poem29 total reviews
Comment from jaded831
I can truly relate. For the past two years I've been where you are. Only this week do I feel my life turning around. The one thing that has always been constant through good and bad times is my faith in God and the universe. Just keep the faith and things will begin to improve.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
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I can truly relate. For the past two years I've been where you are. Only this week do I feel my life turning around. The one thing that has always been constant through good and bad times is my faith in God and the universe. Just keep the faith and things will begin to improve.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
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Very true. And today does seem better than yesterday~Debbie
Comment from oNray
Well writen and presented. Good rhythem and rhyme that help with the flow. It is a little gloomy but then gloomy does exist. Thank you for posting
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
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Well writen and presented. Good rhythem and rhyme that help with the flow. It is a little gloomy but then gloomy does exist. Thank you for posting
Comment Written 23-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
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I've been feeling down and decided to write about it. I feel a bit better today. Thanks so much!!! Debbie
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, debbie, you did a great job writing this heartfelt and emotional write about the way depression and pain puts you in the dark at times...
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
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this is very well written, debbie, you did a great job writing this heartfelt and emotional write about the way depression and pain puts you in the dark at times...
Comment Written 23-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
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I have been having too many physical problems lately and it is getting me down. Thanks so much!!! Debbie
Comment from ameen786
Hello dejohnsrld, my friend I hope these are just poetic reflections; very poignant verses with excellent rhyming and great flow, the artwork adds to the theme, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
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Hello dejohnsrld, my friend I hope these are just poetic reflections; very poignant verses with excellent rhyming and great flow, the artwork adds to the theme, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
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I have been having too many physical problems lately and it is getting me down. Thanks so much!!! Debbie
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Keep the faith my friend, I shall pray for you, God bless.
Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed your rhyming couplets and admired your "stagecoach" metaphor. I am sorry your poem depicts depression--MinoYasue's painting the darkness. I hope life reveals its meaning. Best wishes- Joan
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
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I enjoyed your rhyming couplets and admired your "stagecoach" metaphor. I am sorry your poem depicts depression--MinoYasue's painting the darkness. I hope life reveals its meaning. Best wishes- Joan
Comment Written 23-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
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Thank you-today is better~Debbie
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I am glad today is better--one day at a time, with hope for the next to bring more satisfaction. Happy weekend- Joan
Comment from LucidDreem
I've had days like this... when it just seems easier to leave it all behind. Fortunately, nothing is forever unless you allow it to be.... for better or worse.
Good poem. Strong emotion.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
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I've had days like this... when it just seems easier to leave it all behind. Fortunately, nothing is forever unless you allow it to be.... for better or worse.
Good poem. Strong emotion.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
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Thank you. Today is better!!! Debbie
Comment from Peter Mansson
I really appreciated the intensity of this,not filled with self pity, just telling it like it is. You captured me with the way you expressed your plight, a beautiful evocation of feelings. The stagecoach metaphor was brilliant.
PS One small rhyming flaw could be easily be corrected ie. replace "will rot" with for example "is fraught" or "is taut"
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
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I really appreciated the intensity of this,not filled with self pity, just telling it like it is. You captured me with the way you expressed your plight, a beautiful evocation of feelings. The stagecoach metaphor was brilliant.
PS One small rhyming flaw could be easily be corrected ie. replace "will rot" with for example "is fraught" or "is taut"
Comment Written 22-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
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Thank you so much. I appreciate those ideas. I didn't like that line either~Debbie
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thanks Deb
Comment from Anisa-
Well done.
Your rhyming started off really basic, and I almost stopped reading because of it. However, it was interesting enough that it kept me going.
As the poem progressed, so did you rhymes. By the end you were doing much better.
I thought this was a good poem. Interesting read.
Anisa
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
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Well done.
Your rhyming started off really basic, and I almost stopped reading because of it. However, it was interesting enough that it kept me going.
As the poem progressed, so did you rhymes. By the end you were doing much better.
I thought this was a good poem. Interesting read.
Anisa
Comment Written 22-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
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Thank you!!! Debbie
Comment from JW
Interesting. In reading this well written, yet dark poem, one cannot not but wonder if you are trying to qualify for the "Dead Poets Society." :-)
Thanks for sharing this. JW
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
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Interesting. In reading this well written, yet dark poem, one cannot not but wonder if you are trying to qualify for the "Dead Poets Society." :-)
Thanks for sharing this. JW
Comment Written 22-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
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The way I felt yesterday, I thought maybe I was there. Today is a bit better. Thanks Jonathon~Take care!!! Debbie
Comment from Hareem.S
Oh my this is a very sad and hopless poem, and I hope it is fictional, and if otherwise I hope you feel better soon. The raw pain is evident and I have often felt this way, so know the feelings. Great poem.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
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Oh my this is a very sad and hopless poem, and I hope it is fictional, and if otherwise I hope you feel better soon. The raw pain is evident and I have often felt this way, so know the feelings. Great poem.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
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Today is somewhat better. Just really felt done yesterday. Thanks so much for your review and kind wishes!!! Debbie
