Stagecoach
Poem29 total reviews
Comment from deb552
Hi Debbie, this definitely has a dark tone to it. But it's very well written, and you create some vivid images with your words. I think using the 'blackened stagecoach' as a way of freeing you from the dark place your emotions have taken you, is a unique idea; a dark ride to save you and take you to a brighter place. There is a bit of hope in it as well, when you mention the sun entering your day. It's great that you're able to write about your rough times, because I think it helps to remind you, that those times won't last forever. It's got a good flow, and your couplets work well together. Hope you are in a better place. deb
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Hi Debbie, this definitely has a dark tone to it. But it's very well written, and you create some vivid images with your words. I think using the 'blackened stagecoach' as a way of freeing you from the dark place your emotions have taken you, is a unique idea; a dark ride to save you and take you to a brighter place. There is a bit of hope in it as well, when you mention the sun entering your day. It's great that you're able to write about your rough times, because I think it helps to remind you, that those times won't last forever. It's got a good flow, and your couplets work well together. Hope you are in a better place. deb
Comment Written 29-Mar-2012
Comment from tinams
This is a very powerful, dark poem. Your words really hit home. But you keep mentioning 'light' and 'sun' so there is a glimmer of hope :)
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2012
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This is a very powerful, dark poem. Your words really hit home. But you keep mentioning 'light' and 'sun' so there is a glimmer of hope :)
Comment Written 28-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2012
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I used to get sucked into long periods of very dark depression , feeling no hope. Now I now if I take care of myself and write or talk about it, they only last a few days. Thank you so much for the thoughtful review!!! Debbie
Comment from pharp
Excellent, very well written poem. I like the picture and color scheme as it went great with the excellent wording of this poem. Bottom line this is a great poem and I enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2012
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Excellent, very well written poem. I like the picture and color scheme as it went great with the excellent wording of this poem. Bottom line this is a great poem and I enjoyed it.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2012
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Thank you so much. I was a bit down when I wrote this, but am back on track now. I appreciate your thoughtful review and stars!!! Debbie
Comment from Robert Lee Brown
Depression begging for expression and to be taken away for treatment today. The doom and gloom is expressed against a dark background, giving further tension to the words expressed. Hope this was written from memory of the past and not a current condition.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2012
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Depression begging for expression and to be taken away for treatment today. The doom and gloom is expressed against a dark background, giving further tension to the words expressed. Hope this was written from memory of the past and not a current condition.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2012
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I was down for a couple of days but back on track now. Thank you so much for your kind words and review!!! Debbie
Comment from Rama Rao
Don't fret as we all go through such dark phases when thoughts desert us and we keep staring at the blank paper. Have courage, and don't let negativity creep in.
However, even in your depressed mood you produced a fine poem. The blackened stagecoach carrying you away to some place other than where you are has created an excellent imagery.
A great job.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2012
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Don't fret as we all go through such dark phases when thoughts desert us and we keep staring at the blank paper. Have courage, and don't let negativity creep in.
However, even in your depressed mood you produced a fine poem. The blackened stagecoach carrying you away to some place other than where you are has created an excellent imagery.
A great job.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2012
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I was down for a couple of days but back on track now. Writing helps. Thank you so much for your kind words and review!!! Debbie
Comment from jtconcessions
good days, bad days. I think we all have them. Nice use of poetry to express what you feel on a depressed day. Even though you have no definite meter it still seems to have a cadence to it as I read it through. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2012
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good days, bad days. I think we all have them. Nice use of poetry to express what you feel on a depressed day. Even though you have no definite meter it still seems to have a cadence to it as I read it through. Nicely done.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2012
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I was down for a couple of days but back on track now. Thank you so much for your kind words and review!!! Debbie
Comment from ennahanid
I don't apologize for having given out all my 6 stars, just such good writing in here but I am definitely sorry I don't have one left to give you.
This is a deep and pain-filled write you have written here. Quite intense but once started I was compelled to read to the end.
Thank you
Dinah
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2012
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I don't apologize for having given out all my 6 stars, just such good writing in here but I am definitely sorry I don't have one left to give you.
This is a deep and pain-filled write you have written here. Quite intense but once started I was compelled to read to the end.
Thank you
Dinah
Comment Written 24-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2012
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Thank you so much and I like the 'virtual' 6 stars as much as the real ones~Debbie
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This poem is heartfelt and emotional. Gloomy does exist and it hits all of us. Your poem flowed smoothly and the rhyming scheme was very good.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2012
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This poem is heartfelt and emotional. Gloomy does exist and it hits all of us. Your poem flowed smoothly and the rhyming scheme was very good.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2012
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Yes, I've been ill and feel a bit down. That is why the 'pep-talk' was needed. Thanks so much~Debbie
Comment from Gungalo
As the darkness encroaches
A blackened stagecoach approaches
I beg you to take me away
Anywhere other than where I am today
Sigh .......... I am touched by this write.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
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As the darkness encroaches
A blackened stagecoach approaches
I beg you to take me away
Anywhere other than where I am today
Sigh .......... I am touched by this write.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
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Thank you. Today has been somewhat better. Guess I just needed to get it done on paper~Debbie
Comment from Bellringer
Debbie, well composed rhyming poem with some dark but effective imagery. Very good use of red font and black background to enhance the depressed mood. I've been there--feeling that life is meaningless. But like passing clouds, these feelings fade into the distance and life goes on in the knowledge that I, you, we all have a purpose. Blessings, Hector
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
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Debbie, well composed rhyming poem with some dark but effective imagery. Very good use of red font and black background to enhance the depressed mood. I've been there--feeling that life is meaningless. But like passing clouds, these feelings fade into the distance and life goes on in the knowledge that I, you, we all have a purpose. Blessings, Hector
Comment Written 23-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
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Feeling somewhat better today. Someday, it just helps to write it out! Thanks so much. I always appreciate your words of wisdom!!! Debbie
