senryu (dope addict scored well)
Something to Mull Over ...26 total reviews
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this si very well written, mystery writer, you did a great job writing this senryu with a brilliant satori line, you made me smile. i wish you the best of luck in the contest
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012
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this si very well written, mystery writer, you did a great job writing this senryu with a brilliant satori line, you made me smile. i wish you the best of luck in the contest
Comment Written 17-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012
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Thanks so much jax...I appreciate your thoughtful review.
Closet xoxo
Comment from Kingsland
That look like quite a potent strain of Mary Jane. This short piece of poetry has a bit of humor in its few words. Picture and thoughts reflect off of each other perfectly here. I enjoyed reading it... John
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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That look like quite a potent strain of Mary Jane. This short piece of poetry has a bit of humor in its few words. Picture and thoughts reflect off of each other perfectly here. I enjoyed reading it... John
Comment Written 17-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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Haha thanks for your thoughtful review John.
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Comment from gazzagodbod
yeahhh love these senryu contests and your entry is fab love the presentation great job my friend and all the best in the contest gazza
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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yeahhh love these senryu contests and your entry is fab love the presentation great job my friend and all the best in the contest gazza
Comment Written 17-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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thanks for the fab review gazza
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Comment from Charlene0513
A great way to suggest the best way to celebrate a housewarming is to adorn their home with trees, shrubs and any thing green this St. Patrick's Day.
Charlene
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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A great way to suggest the best way to celebrate a housewarming is to adorn their home with trees, shrubs and any thing green this St. Patrick's Day.
Charlene
Comment Written 17-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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Thanks Charlene, glad you enjoyed.
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Comment from Trybuck
The dope addict
had some dopey friends
gave him some pot
and now he depends
on his dopey friends
A humorous play on words. Well done, Buck
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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The dope addict
had some dopey friends
gave him some pot
and now he depends
on his dopey friends
A humorous play on words. Well done, Buck
Comment Written 17-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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Haha indeed he does. Thanks Buck.
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Comment from manicblue
I gave this five stars because it fit the criteria and was about human foibles.
But dope addicts are more about heroin, cocaine or the harder stuff that's addictive. I don't see marijuana as addictive, so it read a tad disconnected.
I can't offer any suggestion except maybe in the first line "cannabis lover". I wish you well with this entry.
mb xx
p.s. I wish they would legalize it, for 18 and up of course. I miss it!
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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I gave this five stars because it fit the criteria and was about human foibles.
But dope addicts are more about heroin, cocaine or the harder stuff that's addictive. I don't see marijuana as addictive, so it read a tad disconnected.
I can't offer any suggestion except maybe in the first line "cannabis lover". I wish you well with this entry.
mb xx
p.s. I wish they would legalize it, for 18 and up of course. I miss it!
Comment Written 17-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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Thankyou and yes I agree but I haven't taken a Senryu class. I might do one next month. I enjoyed your review and thanks for the thoughtful comments. I made mention of it in my notes, I was only referring to "dope addicts".
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Comment from Spiritual Echo
Very creative approach to this contest.
Like that you added the green theme to our St.Pat's celebration.
Witty and playful, an easy enjoyable poem.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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Very creative approach to this contest.
Like that you added the green theme to our St.Pat's celebration.
Witty and playful, an easy enjoyable poem.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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Yes...Go Green! Haha
Thanks Linda...glad people appreciate my twisted sense of humour.
LOL
Closet xoxo
Comment from Natureschild
This senryu made me smile because of its clever wording. The 3 line structure has the correct syllable count. Great piece, good luck for the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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This senryu made me smile because of its clever wording. The 3 line structure has the correct syllable count. Great piece, good luck for the contest.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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Thanks so much and I appreciate your review.
Glad you enjoyed.
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Comment from Louise Michelle
This is a fine example of a senryu, written with clever preciseness about a topic discussed by many here in the United States. Notice I didn't give any indication as to whether I'm for or against the usage of Margiejawanna, lol.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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This is a fine example of a senryu, written with clever preciseness about a topic discussed by many here in the United States. Notice I didn't give any indication as to whether I'm for or against the usage of Margiejawanna, lol.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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Awww thanks LL...I appreciate the terrific sixer and thoughtful review. I DID notice you didnt give preference. I'm chuffed! LMAO
Cheers and thanks
CPSQ
xoxo
Comment from peggles
good play on words here
your short verse
is clear and easy to understand
I wish you all the best in the contest
I liked your entry very much
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2012
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good play on words here
your short verse
is clear and easy to understand
I wish you all the best in the contest
I liked your entry very much
Comment Written 17-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2012
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Thanks peggles. I appreciate your review.
