The English Assignment
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "The family reunion"The author tells a tale how he tried to better him
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Comment from ennahanid
First off let me state I am not good with punctuation and grammar so I certainly do not critique. I could be considered a bad reviewer because if I can't give a 4 or a 5 I normally skip. What I can do is say if I like it...and I did although I came in on Chapter 4 I will try to do a backtrack, time permitting. I am sure it could possibly use a little bit of an edit but it held my interest and makes me want to read more.
Thank you, it was a pleasure to read you today.
Dinah
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2012
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First off let me state I am not good with punctuation and grammar so I certainly do not critique. I could be considered a bad reviewer because if I can't give a 4 or a 5 I normally skip. What I can do is say if I like it...and I did although I came in on Chapter 4 I will try to do a backtrack, time permitting. I am sure it could possibly use a little bit of an edit but it held my interest and makes me want to read more.
Thank you, it was a pleasure to read you today.
Dinah
Comment Written 17-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2012
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thank you for the kind review
Comment from MumEsGirl
Great work on this chapter. It is difficult to fin answers whey they are shrouded in secrecy. I have seen this happen too.
Looking forward to reading more very soon
kate
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2012
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Great work on this chapter. It is difficult to fin answers whey they are shrouded in secrecy. I have seen this happen too.
Looking forward to reading more very soon
kate
Comment Written 16-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2012
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thanks kate
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
The English Assignement. <--- Titles do not end with periods. You misspelled Assignment also.
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Before you write more, review the rules for plurals and possessives and use of apostrophes. Do a web search. Such things are all over. Here are a few errors to show you what I mean.
"You lie to your friend's and not your family."
Should be friends, with no apostrophe. It's not a possessive, just a plural word.
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brought to stand before my fathers sworn enemy.
To risk my fathers anger was a dangerous thing.
You see my grandfather, my fathers dad, had died
In all 3 lines above you DO need an apostrophe, since father's is a possessive... it's HIS sworn enemy, HIS anger, HIS dad.
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It was further than he had said.
The correct word above is farther. Further is abstract, such as going further in a thought. Farther is used for physical distance.
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That out of the way, I rather liked the little story.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2012
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The English Assignement. <--- Titles do not end with periods. You misspelled Assignment also.
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Before you write more, review the rules for plurals and possessives and use of apostrophes. Do a web search. Such things are all over. Here are a few errors to show you what I mean.
"You lie to your friend's and not your family."
Should be friends, with no apostrophe. It's not a possessive, just a plural word.
_________
brought to stand before my fathers sworn enemy.
To risk my fathers anger was a dangerous thing.
You see my grandfather, my fathers dad, had died
In all 3 lines above you DO need an apostrophe, since father's is a possessive... it's HIS sworn enemy, HIS anger, HIS dad.
_________
It was further than he had said.
The correct word above is farther. Further is abstract, such as going further in a thought. Farther is used for physical distance.
_________
That out of the way, I rather liked the little story.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2012
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I made some corrections and i will work on that plural possesive thing. I'm affraid i'm retarded when it comes to grammar and spelling. this book means a lot to me and I would appriciate any help you could give.
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Next time you post, click the "Spell Check" button here. It won't catch everything, but it's a start!
Comment from joann r romei
This is a great story you tell it quickly and the reader really wants to get a feel of these people and you, you may want to describe the house when you entered. well done
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2012
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This is a great story you tell it quickly and the reader really wants to get a feel of these people and you, you may want to describe the house when you entered. well done
Comment Written 16-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2012
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thank you i took your advice an added a description
Comment from Asyraf N. Jamsari
A nicely written piece of writing. I love the whole idea. Interesting characters and amusing flow to. And I'm so impressed with your choice of words
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2012
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A nicely written piece of writing. I love the whole idea. Interesting characters and amusing flow to. And I'm so impressed with your choice of words
Comment Written 16-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2012
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thank you
Comment from LilHippie
This is a very engrossing story! Very powerful! I will catch up with your prior chapters. So much information for you to deal with on the day this happened. So many unanswered questions for a child to worry about. Your father, I believe, was not angry at you, so much as he was angry at them and afraid for you, what could have happened to you. There is a lot of pain here. I will not guess any further, until I read your prior chapters. Do me one favor, for the good of your book. Please do spellcheck on it. You have a lot of spelling errors. I would never give you less stars for a rating based on spelling errors, but some reviewers are strict, and they might reduce your rating. This is very well written and I want to know more. I am sorry you had to deal with this.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2012
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This is a very engrossing story! Very powerful! I will catch up with your prior chapters. So much information for you to deal with on the day this happened. So many unanswered questions for a child to worry about. Your father, I believe, was not angry at you, so much as he was angry at them and afraid for you, what could have happened to you. There is a lot of pain here. I will not guess any further, until I read your prior chapters. Do me one favor, for the good of your book. Please do spellcheck on it. You have a lot of spelling errors. I would never give you less stars for a rating based on spelling errors, but some reviewers are strict, and they might reduce your rating. This is very well written and I want to know more. I am sorry you had to deal with this.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2012
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I will check the spelling and I will paste it onto word to check grammer and spelling when I get a chance. It's on my wifes computer. thanks for all the encouragement.
Comment from TammyGail
Great work on this chapter it was very well written and expressed
you pulled me and kept my intrest throughout the read
seems when were younger the answers to our problems are never seen until we've aged a bit....thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
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Great work on this chapter it was very well written and expressed
you pulled me and kept my intrest throughout the read
seems when were younger the answers to our problems are never seen until we've aged a bit....thanks for sharing
Comment Written 15-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
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Thanks Tammy
