An Absurd Scenario for Artists
Modern Fable24 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I may be really off but I see this post an idea for a story, sort of notes for the story and not the story.
The notes are very good and I can see a great story coming from them. I am so sorry. I could just be having a bad day.
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I may be really off but I see this post an idea for a story, sort of notes for the story and not the story.
The notes are very good and I can see a great story coming from them. I am so sorry. I could just be having a bad day.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2012
Comment from James crofoot
Good one, excelent comentary on the micro-chip taking over in even the areas of our thought. And most people don't even think it's abnormal to have these chips think for us. Sooner or later these chips are gonna realize that humans are obsolete.
Excelent job of editing. I didn't see any grammar or punctuation errors. Good job and thanks for paying me to read this, always a pleasure to read your stuff.
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Good one, excelent comentary on the micro-chip taking over in even the areas of our thought. And most people don't even think it's abnormal to have these chips think for us. Sooner or later these chips are gonna realize that humans are obsolete.
Excelent job of editing. I didn't see any grammar or punctuation errors. Good job and thanks for paying me to read this, always a pleasure to read your stuff.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2012
Comment from Shanev29
Well written good job on this story I enjoyed it
Good form and very imaginative I love to see peoples
brains working overtime.
Good job
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Well written good job on this story I enjoyed it
Good form and very imaginative I love to see peoples
brains working overtime.
Good job
Comment Written 13-Mar-2012
Comment from Spitfire
Another awesome write that will make me your fan on the site. Both science fiction and satire. Great imagination to come up with those ideas. A project to eliminate criticism and negative feedback. Think that's already in place on Fan Site.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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Another awesome write that will make me your fan on the site. Both science fiction and satire. Great imagination to come up with those ideas. A project to eliminate criticism and negative feedback. Think that's already in place on Fan Site.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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Thanks for your support and wonderful comment
Adina
Comment from Cindy Warren
Hmmm, wonder what would happen if someone got the wrong chip. I want that writing chip but what if I got the cop chip instead? I loved your story. It's absurdity almost makes it seem possible.
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Hmmm, wonder what would happen if someone got the wrong chip. I want that writing chip but what if I got the cop chip instead? I loved your story. It's absurdity almost makes it seem possible.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2012
Comment from c_lucas
"life goes own. It grows frustration faster than acceptance. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. Good luck in your contest.
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"life goes own. It grows frustration faster than acceptance. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2012
Comment from Kingsland
I am so glad that talent is natural and not bought. This was a very original and cleverly written short story. I enjoyed reading the cleverness and very modern thought process here... John
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I am so glad that talent is natural and not bought. This was a very original and cleverly written short story. I enjoyed reading the cleverness and very modern thought process here... John
Comment Written 12-Mar-2012
Comment from Chris Tee
As usual this is another absolutely breath taking piece that you have written here for us old sport. Well done indeed with this splendid work here and good luck in the contest.
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As usual this is another absolutely breath taking piece that you have written here for us old sport. Well done indeed with this splendid work here and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
Comment from boberto
I like the theme. However, it is not a fable. It is a parable.
Fables use animals to illustrate/teach morals.
Good luck in the contest.
boberto
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I like the theme. However, it is not a fable. It is a parable.
Fables use animals to illustrate/teach morals.
Good luck in the contest.
boberto
Comment Written 10-Mar-2012
Comment from WLHall
I'm not sure if I followed this story very well. I'm also confused as to what these "chips" are. Are they good reviews? Is this about artist not creating their own work, but depending on these institutions to roll them off the conveyor belt? The first sentence sounds awkward to me. Are you trying to say "The story starts with the writers, composers, painters, and all other artist waiting "excitedly" by the conveyor..." I think making excited an adverb flows better.
Also, conveyor is spelled with an "o" It's misspelled in one place, but not the other.
Maybe I'm just being stupid here not understanding. LOL
I hope you don't take me as being rude, I really want to understand. I haven't seen any other reviews, so I don't know if others are having the same problem, or if it's just me.
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I'm not sure if I followed this story very well. I'm also confused as to what these "chips" are. Are they good reviews? Is this about artist not creating their own work, but depending on these institutions to roll them off the conveyor belt? The first sentence sounds awkward to me. Are you trying to say "The story starts with the writers, composers, painters, and all other artist waiting "excitedly" by the conveyor..." I think making excited an adverb flows better.
Also, conveyor is spelled with an "o" It's misspelled in one place, but not the other.
Maybe I'm just being stupid here not understanding. LOL
I hope you don't take me as being rude, I really want to understand. I haven't seen any other reviews, so I don't know if others are having the same problem, or if it's just me.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2012
