Money, Money, Who's Got the Money?
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "MONEY: Home Invasion "Two bank robbers hide in a women's boarding house.
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Comment from ajdevore
I like the humor and you're very good and consistent with the accents. Some of the comments are not logical in the situation. I think Mack would say 'Trixie says you always screw up' and Mickey would say "forget Trixie." And Mack would point out Trixie hides Mickeys picture, and then needle him about all the stuff he's going to do to impress her. Really good start.
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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2012
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I like the humor and you're very good and consistent with the accents. Some of the comments are not logical in the situation. I think Mack would say 'Trixie says you always screw up' and Mickey would say "forget Trixie." And Mack would point out Trixie hides Mickeys picture, and then needle him about all the stuff he's going to do to impress her. Really good start.
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Comment Written 01-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2012
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It wouldn't be in Mack's character to needle Mickey who is his superior. Do you have any credentials in writing to back up your critique? Ever been published? Since you rate this a three I'll be interested to see how how you rate others.
