Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 54 "part 1 Chapter 17"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
83 total reviews
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Oh we finally get to see the identity of the muffler dude.
Well this one is really pulling the parts together and well penned as always.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
  |
Oh we finally get to see the identity of the muffler dude.
Well this one is really pulling the parts together and well penned as always.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
-
Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Karen Payton Holt
Hi Barbara,
I love the way you build the tension in our scenes.
The dialogue between Troy and Anna is very natural and endearing.
At east we know now the identity of the mystery man...I hope Anna and Michael will be safe!
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
|
Hi Barbara,
I love the way you build the tension in our scenes.
The dialogue between Troy and Anna is very natural and endearing.
At east we know now the identity of the mystery man...I hope Anna and Michael will be safe!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
-
Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from WLHall
An excellent writing of suspense and mystery. I'm not up to speed on the story, but I'll be getting the rest of them through notifications. When I have a few moments here and there I will go back and try to get up to speed on what is going on. It sounds very intriguing. Didn't see any grammar or punctuation errors, and I'm a stickler for those. Great job, keep it up. Thanks for sharing.
God Bless
Wanda
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
|
An excellent writing of suspense and mystery. I'm not up to speed on the story, but I'll be getting the rest of them through notifications. When I have a few moments here and there I will go back and try to get up to speed on what is going on. It sounds very intriguing. Didn't see any grammar or punctuation errors, and I'm a stickler for those. Great job, keep it up. Thanks for sharing.
God Bless
Wanda
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
-
Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from RazberryBullet
I really like the dialog in your stories. It's not only natural, but gives the reader a sense of the environment as well as as helping the story progress :)
Well done as always!
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
 |
I really like the dialog in your stories. It's not only natural, but gives the reader a sense of the environment as well as as helping the story progress :)
Well done as always!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
-
Thank you for the kind review and your support.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Barbara,
So now the mystery man has been identified and hopefully they can put a stop to him harassing Anna. But then Bobby is sly and if they stop Slim he will find another to take his place. I wonder how Slim got out of jail? I hope Bobby can't do the same. Al of your chapters are so interesting and well written with your skillful pen....well done....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
|
Hi Barbara,
So now the mystery man has been identified and hopefully they can put a stop to him harassing Anna. But then Bobby is sly and if they stop Slim he will find another to take his place. I wonder how Slim got out of jail? I hope Bobby can't do the same. Al of your chapters are so interesting and well written with your skillful pen....well done....blessings, chey
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
-
Thank you for the kind review and your encourageing words.
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
noticed the homeless vet stumble[] and almost f[a]ll.
Finally! Things are starting to break. I feel the climax coming. Is Michael safe?
Roberta
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
|
noticed the homeless vet stumble[] and almost f[a]ll.
Finally! Things are starting to break. I feel the climax coming. Is Michael safe?
Roberta
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
-
Michael is at day care, right now. I appreciate your eagle eye and kind review.
Comment from LAFraser
This is well written and touches base on the dangers of domestic violence. I'm pleased to see that you included the Safe link and National Domestic Violence Hotline number in your notes. Well done. I will be going back to read the preceding chapters. Blessings
~Eilish
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
|
This is well written and touches base on the dangers of domestic violence. I'm pleased to see that you included the Safe link and National Domestic Violence Hotline number in your notes. Well done. I will be going back to read the preceding chapters. Blessings
~Eilish
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
-
Thank you for your kind review and encouraging words.
-
You're welcome, Barbara. :)
~EIlish
Comment from axelbeariter
You've written a much needed transition chapter that you still managed to make interesting in spite of it's benign purpose. Your dialogue was believable and the internal dialogue was appropriate. Another well written chapter. You've set up nicely the action to come.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
|
You've written a much needed transition chapter that you still managed to make interesting in spite of it's benign purpose. Your dialogue was believable and the internal dialogue was appropriate. Another well written chapter. You've set up nicely the action to come.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
-
Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from mumsyone
Glad to come across this chapter. Some of the stuff I've been reading/reviewing today is not so great!
Anna quickly stopped at a small (caf©).
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
|
Glad to come across this chapter. Some of the stuff I've been reading/reviewing today is not so great!
Anna quickly stopped at a small (caf©).
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
-
I will fix the cafe. I forgot to change it. My computer automatically puts in the ' and EE hates it. I appreciate your kind review. I know what you mean. I often struggle to find things I WANT to read.
Comment from Mara del Mar
Good chapter , great idea the disguise of Sam. I like that not recognized and seems a true beggar. I wait that all out well.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
|
Good chapter , great idea the disguise of Sam. I like that not recognized and seems a true beggar. I wait that all out well.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
Thank you for your kind review.
