Firecracker
A Naughty, Naughty Modified Rondeau Redouble ...33 total reviews
Comment from l.raven
Ouch!!Where have you been? You sure came back with a hot number. And a polished up tallywacker. Your such a naughty girl. Very well written ya nut. love ya Linda
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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Ouch!!Where have you been? You sure came back with a hot number. And a polished up tallywacker. Your such a naughty girl. Very well written ya nut. love ya Linda
Comment Written 27-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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Haha...cute review Linda...and yes I am a naughty girl. Glad you enjoyed my twisted sense of humour. I thought of the word tallywhacker, then firecracker and then the poem just wrote itself.
Cheers and thanks for your delightful review.
Phillippa xo
Comment from Hitcher
There is a time and place to polish and plunge the tallywacker and if this ain't one of those times, it never will be. This was a sizzling slice of naughty with some kick-ass rhyme friend, definitely put a smile on my face, I like your style... Consider her sorted :)
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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There is a time and place to polish and plunge the tallywacker and if this ain't one of those times, it never will be. This was a sizzling slice of naughty with some kick-ass rhyme friend, definitely put a smile on my face, I like your style... Consider her sorted :)
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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Haha thanks Hitch...glad I could give you a smile. Yes, she's sorted. Great review...
Cheers P
Comment from Gypsymooncat
Now you look here madam, I do not need to google tallywacker - I have, after all, seen Goldmember, so I am thus informed :) And thus entertained, and um, well you say this ain't a bio, but I reckon it'd have ta be ... c'mon, fess up ... No? Okay then, I believe you :)
JOLLY GOOD SHOW THEN. I enjoyed this immensely. Loved how you went - in your rhyme scheme - from icker to acker and back(er) again to ick(er) *snickers a little bit*. Seriously though, it's clever work, well done and definitely worth more than a six for both structure as a poem and entertainment value. I'll be giggling about this for a while, I can tell ya! Cheers!! xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxo
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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Now you look here madam, I do not need to google tallywacker - I have, after all, seen Goldmember, so I am thus informed :) And thus entertained, and um, well you say this ain't a bio, but I reckon it'd have ta be ... c'mon, fess up ... No? Okay then, I believe you :)
JOLLY GOOD SHOW THEN. I enjoyed this immensely. Loved how you went - in your rhyme scheme - from icker to acker and back(er) again to ick(er) *snickers a little bit*. Seriously though, it's clever work, well done and definitely worth more than a six for both structure as a poem and entertainment value. I'll be giggling about this for a while, I can tell ya! Cheers!! xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxo
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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Haha, why thanks very much for the sterling review and the sixer rating. Your review was da bomb! Hmmm... a pun? LOL
Glad I could give you a giggle and that you enjoyed my poem. Your rating has made my day...not sure about the tallywackers though! That needs a whole lot more work!! LOL
Cheers Closet xo
Comment from Warren Rodgers
CPJ!
Sizzling poem you naughty girl! Great to see you back, I've missed your poetry of all type!! You can certainly do sizzle better than anyone else. Wow what can I say about this smokin' hot read that just explodes on my screen lol. Now wait, that's now what you think it is lol. I'll take your word on the structure of the rondeau redouble as I don't have that one in memory but who's thinking format with content like this LOL. Did not have to lookup tallywacker either, I've heard the term used before though not on a personal level :-{ Many great lines here very suggestive and downright in your face bare- it-all language. A great adult read as your first verse really sets up the entire piece and with no uncertainty tells the reader just where this is going to take them.
The journey is fun. It's so great to see you back! I always look forward to your postings no matter what the subject matter, your skills polish off another sixer lol.
:-)
Cheers!
Waaaazzzaa
xoxo
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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CPJ!
Sizzling poem you naughty girl! Great to see you back, I've missed your poetry of all type!! You can certainly do sizzle better than anyone else. Wow what can I say about this smokin' hot read that just explodes on my screen lol. Now wait, that's now what you think it is lol. I'll take your word on the structure of the rondeau redouble as I don't have that one in memory but who's thinking format with content like this LOL. Did not have to lookup tallywacker either, I've heard the term used before though not on a personal level :-{ Many great lines here very suggestive and downright in your face bare- it-all language. A great adult read as your first verse really sets up the entire piece and with no uncertainty tells the reader just where this is going to take them.
The journey is fun. It's so great to see you back! I always look forward to your postings no matter what the subject matter, your skills polish off another sixer lol.
:-)
Cheers!
Waaaazzzaa
xoxo
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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Ooh Wazza, thankyou so much for your sixer review. The tallywacker was the word that started this...followed by firecracker and the rest is history. Haha. Its nice to be back but I am nowhere near full capacity. I am glad you have heard of the word...it just kind of popped up in my mind (hmmm a pun? LOL) and well I just had to run with it...I know, I AM a naughty girl but so very glad you enjoyed my post. I am not sure the people who invented the Rondeau Redouble may appreciate my tallywacking write. LOL I just wanted a little originality you know? *smirk*
Cheers and thanks again for the dynamite review...it blew me away...hmm...more pu..ahhh never mind. LOL
CPJ xoxoxo
Comment from amada
Great and enticing lines, for sure it lights the page. I feel a sense of joy while reading some of the crazy lines. All in good fun.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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Great and enticing lines, for sure it lights the page. I feel a sense of joy while reading some of the crazy lines. All in good fun.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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Haha thanks amada and yes this was positively crazy and about to completely explode. ALWAYS in fun. LOL
Cheers and thanks again.
Closet
Comment from sgalletti
Well...My naughty girlfriend. Of course I loved this poem! It is very difficult to write a Rondeau, let alone a Rondeau Redouble :). And to be able to choose and carry through such naughty phrases throughout and have it all make sense....well, kudos to you! Hugs, Sue
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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Well...My naughty girlfriend. Of course I loved this poem! It is very difficult to write a Rondeau, let alone a Rondeau Redouble :). And to be able to choose and carry through such naughty phrases throughout and have it all make sense....well, kudos to you! Hugs, Sue
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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Haha thanks Sue...yes the repeats can prove probs and I did play switcheroo with that first line but I really wanted to end with "Sort her out..." LOL but this literally wrote itself after "tallywacker" popped up in my mind. Hmmm, a pun? LOL
Thanks again
Cheers Phillippa xoxo
Comment from the blue pixel
OMG. This one certainly needed both warnings but the subject matter also gave the opportunity for some excellent rhymes that otherwise would never have been used. I had to look up "tally wacker" though I took an educated guess at it but once confirmed, my eye-brows really went up. I doubt that when the RR was created, its creator ever imagined his form would end up in something like this. lol stick her/bicker, lacquer/knacker, and of course, knicker went perfectly with ticker - may it continue to tick. I actually don't see the modification here and your RR appears to be written correctly to form but perhaps I have been blinded by the scenario. Even your Refrain is quite correct as is the use of all your lines in stanza one. Terrific title too for such a piece Closet. xxx Pix
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
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OMG. This one certainly needed both warnings but the subject matter also gave the opportunity for some excellent rhymes that otherwise would never have been used. I had to look up "tally wacker" though I took an educated guess at it but once confirmed, my eye-brows really went up. I doubt that when the RR was created, its creator ever imagined his form would end up in something like this. lol stick her/bicker, lacquer/knacker, and of course, knicker went perfectly with ticker - may it continue to tick. I actually don't see the modification here and your RR appears to be written correctly to form but perhaps I have been blinded by the scenario. Even your Refrain is quite correct as is the use of all your lines in stanza one. Terrific title too for such a piece Closet. xxx Pix
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
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Hahaha...not modified huh? Apparently miss GUNGA told me it WASN'T really a Rondeau Redouble. LOL Like I said to her, as long as someone gets a laugh does it really matter? NOPE. As far as I am concerned its 9/10's...anyhow...THANKYOU pixel for your delightful review and indeed I don't think the designers of the RR would appreciate my tallywacking jamboree!! Thankyou for the sterling review you have provided and the assurance that this is close enough to an RR to call it Modified. Re the title...I nearly called it Tallywacker!! LOL That could raised a few eyebrows. LOL
Cheers and thanks again. Your a little pixie gem.
Closet xoxoxo
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I think it is more than close enough. I didn't see anything out of place at all Closet but that doesn't mean I didn't miss something. It's good to see you posting twice so close together too. Many of your fans will have missed your style very much. I must check on your reviews for the cut and paste one too. xxx Pix
Comment from angel123
I can tell you had fun writing this poem. I enjoyed reading it and it flows and rhymes well. Good alliteration of the s and p words. Great artwork choice.
Angel123
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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I can tell you had fun writing this poem. I enjoyed reading it and it flows and rhymes well. Good alliteration of the s and p words. Great artwork choice.
Angel123
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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LOL Thanks Angel, I appreciate your thoughtful review and glad you enjoyed.
Cheers Closet xo
Comment from AlexAX
Haha You had me laughing all the way :) No need for me to google, as soon as I read I knew what it was. Definitely sounds like the firecracker needs a good tallywacker LOL Ending was brilliant. Color scheme had to be red :) Alex :)
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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Haha You had me laughing all the way :) No need for me to google, as soon as I read I knew what it was. Definitely sounds like the firecracker needs a good tallywacker LOL Ending was brilliant. Color scheme had to be red :) Alex :)
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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Haha, glad you liked my blood pumping red B/G along with my tallywacker/firecracker scenario. Yes I think the firecracker needs a good seeing to. But this was NOT a bio. Seriously! *smirk* ... well, there may have been a teency bit of fact but mostly grossly exaggerated for entertainment value.
I always like to amp it up a little.
Cheers and thanks for your great review.
Closet
Comment from Earl of Oxford
Phillippa being 'naughty' - nah, it can't be. LOL.
I'm too lazy to 'google' but guess a 'tallywacker' is a penis - a 'prick' as us Brits call it in slang, so if the poor object of your derision here is 'pricking her', then what's the problem? haha.
Apart from the shortage of 'er' rhymes, this had me sniggering all the way through with its bawdy silliness in fluent witty-style meter.
If the 'firecracker' is you, then I wish you much more effective 'tallywacking'. LOL.
Anyway, I'm off for a 'polishing'
a sixer for the fun!
Best wishes, earl
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
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Phillippa being 'naughty' - nah, it can't be. LOL.
I'm too lazy to 'google' but guess a 'tallywacker' is a penis - a 'prick' as us Brits call it in slang, so if the poor object of your derision here is 'pricking her', then what's the problem? haha.
Apart from the shortage of 'er' rhymes, this had me sniggering all the way through with its bawdy silliness in fluent witty-style meter.
If the 'firecracker' is you, then I wish you much more effective 'tallywacking'. LOL.
Anyway, I'm off for a 'polishing'
a sixer for the fun!
Best wishes, earl
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
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Haha...thankyou My Lord and you were close...Actually tallywacker it seems is the whole package...nuts included! LOL I myself only believed it was the lengthy part of the appendage however it appears the gonads complete the tallywacker deal! LOL This is BARELY a bio and NO I am not quite that much of a firecracker...*smirk*...this is a gross exaggeration of the frustrations of home fires and the difference between Mars and Venus. Often, Mars just wants the fire. Venus of course wants the emotion...coupled up with the fire. A delicate balance YES and one that macho Aussie males can't seem to understand.
Careful where you rub! haha
You crack me up and thanks for the sixer. I really appreciate your review and stearling comments.
Cheers P
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I'll meat you on neutral territory - how about the moon, P? LOL
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Ooooh...simply stearling.
Grrrr.
Of course My Lord...as you wish!
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Tssssssss...
BTW I look forward to our meating.
Bahaha
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