Deirdre
All kinds of crazy36 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I figured somehow the dog was going to kill him. I have read numerous entries for this contest and yours is very creative and a very good write. Good luck.
I figured somehow the dog was going to kill him. I have read numerous entries for this contest and yours is very creative and a very good write. Good luck.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2012
Comment from Trybuck
Another one bites the dust
Deirdre lives a little longer
and those pets just get stronger
controlling her mind
Poor Ron, should have read the signs
Well done, Buck
Another one bites the dust
Deirdre lives a little longer
and those pets just get stronger
controlling her mind
Poor Ron, should have read the signs
Well done, Buck
Comment Written 17-Mar-2012
Comment from adewpearl
Just yesterday I was checking your portfolio for something new :-)
I just love the premise of your story - a stuffed dead dog
The room was empty - past tense, but I walk by the thing is present tense
regret hit my conscious - conscience
Good dialogue when he gives her his ultimatum
What an eerie ending :-) A fun response to this prompt :-) Brooke
Just yesterday I was checking your portfolio for something new :-)
I just love the premise of your story - a stuffed dead dog
The room was empty - past tense, but I walk by the thing is present tense
regret hit my conscious - conscience
Good dialogue when he gives her his ultimatum
What an eerie ending :-) A fun response to this prompt :-) Brooke
Comment Written 17-Mar-2012
Comment from pattipac
Terrific tale. You sucked me in with Percival's glass eyed stare. You set the scene for the upcoming murder well. Finite description of the stuffed animals and dialogue between the characters made your tale realistic. The small clues hidden within your narrative built up to the lover's getting his throat slit. Great ending.
Terrific tale. You sucked me in with Percival's glass eyed stare. You set the scene for the upcoming murder well. Finite description of the stuffed animals and dialogue between the characters made your tale realistic. The small clues hidden within your narrative built up to the lover's getting his throat slit. Great ending.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2012
Comment from Spiritual Echo
I loved that the dog's name was Percival. It's such a silly name but leads to a lot of thought about a woman who would name her pet that way.
You took a really weird, but refreshing path for this prompt and it worked really well. Read the firsst couple of paragraphs over, not sure if I'm right, but you may have slipped out of tense.
I loved that the dog's name was Percival. It's such a silly name but leads to a lot of thought about a woman who would name her pet that way.
You took a really weird, but refreshing path for this prompt and it worked really well. Read the firsst couple of paragraphs over, not sure if I'm right, but you may have slipped out of tense.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2012
Comment from robina1978
Yes Susan I felt your story was great. Eerie and with thrilling bits. Made you go one way and then the other again. Then he wants to get together and patch up. It turns out the stuffed dog was left to tear him to bits.
Yes Susan I felt your story was great. Eerie and with thrilling bits. Made you go one way and then the other again. Then he wants to get together and patch up. It turns out the stuffed dog was left to tear him to bits.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2012
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Wow, Suse. The stuffed dog walked out the door? Deirdre killed the protagonist - or did Percival do it? An intriguing story. :) Nancy
Wow, Suse. The stuffed dog walked out the door? Deirdre killed the protagonist - or did Percival do it? An intriguing story. :) Nancy
Comment Written 17-Mar-2012
Comment from Gungalo
Yikes, this is good. No, it's great girl. Goes to show ya that you shouldn't make fun of someone's possessions, eh? Especially if they are alive (heheh).
Yikes, this is good. No, it's great girl. Goes to show ya that you shouldn't make fun of someone's possessions, eh? Especially if they are alive (heheh).
Comment Written 17-Mar-2012
Comment from misscookie
Guess what?
I didn't find it to bad to read.
I even found some humor in parts of your story.
I found your story had mty attention from the first word to the last.
And there was never a dull moments.
Guess what?
I didn't find it to bad to read.
I even found some humor in parts of your story.
I found your story had mty attention from the first word to the last.
And there was never a dull moments.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2012
Comment from Sherry Asbury
This is great. Your ending is Twilight Zone and perfect. You keep an aura of suspense going. Though I am an avid animal lover, I could see his point. He did seem a bit heartless and cruel and one could say he got his due reward. Very enjoyable read.
This is great. Your ending is Twilight Zone and perfect. You keep an aura of suspense going. Though I am an avid animal lover, I could see his point. He did seem a bit heartless and cruel and one could say he got his due reward. Very enjoyable read.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2012