Leslie T. Banks
A writer and the Triad28 total reviews
Comment from Fluffyhead
Good story on a writer going crazy while trying finish his book. Kept my attention throughout the whole thing. Lots of good descriptions.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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Good story on a writer going crazy while trying finish his book. Kept my attention throughout the whole thing. Lots of good descriptions.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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Thank you, Fluffyhead for your fine review. I appreciate your time reading and reviewing this for me.:) barking dog
Comment from babylonia
bd,
roflmao that's probably what our spouses think is going to happen to us. which came first ... the insanity or the writing??? LOL possible spaggies.
Lenny, aren't you being a bit trite ?(drop the extra space between trite and the question mark)
Okay, okay(,) Peaches
caio(ciao)
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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bd,
roflmao that's probably what our spouses think is going to happen to us. which came first ... the insanity or the writing??? LOL possible spaggies.
Lenny, aren't you being a bit trite ?(drop the extra space between trite and the question mark)
Okay, okay(,) Peaches
caio(ciao)
love,
barbara
Comment Written 27-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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Hi, barbara. Thank you for checking this out and catching those spags. Did you find that evil eddie adds spaces? It seems I can take it back to 'Word' and find new one. LOL The other errors are me being dumb. Again thank you for reading and awarding a generous five. :) ellen xxx
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ellen,
evil eddie loves to do that. the things he does ... sigh. LOL yeah, real pain.
love,
barbara
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I have been in and out of this piece re-doing spaces that I know weren't there in 'Word.' Maddening. :)
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ellen,
i had to figure it out myself. i can tell you this ... if you write anything in italics, when you transfer you will want to add extra spaces around the italicized area. also, be careful with foreign words. even words like cafe sometimes upsets evil eddie.
love,
barbara
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It's hard enough finding a picture. :) Thank you for the heads up on ee's quirks, barbara.:) ellen
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ellen,
i used to know them all. when i came back after time away i did notice many of the nasty quirks weren't as bad BUT they hadn't instantly went away. that's why i thought i would give you the heads up.
love,
barbara
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Thank you. Sweet!:) ellen
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ellen,
you are welcome~
love,
barbara
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:) ciao, ellen LOL
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ciao...
:P
love,
barbara
Comment from Janie King
I've had a long day and I just may be too tired to grasp this one..but is this a nut that's escaped from a funny farm? Wow, girl..you do have some wide range of imaginations. God bless.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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I've had a long day and I just may be too tired to grasp this one..but is this a nut that's escaped from a funny farm? Wow, girl..you do have some wide range of imaginations. God bless.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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It is a writer whose obsession with the voices(muses) in his head has caused him to loose everything through his neglecting life itself. That is the deeper meaning. The surface meaning is a writer goes insane after trying to regain former fame. The muses which have haunted him for years leave his host-body and take up new residence in an ambitious reporter.
Thank you for your review, Janie. I hope that you can grasp it now.:) ellen
Comment from Spitfire
This is superb! I can so connect. Writing taking over my life. Husbands fall, I don't hear a thing. Hours fly. Who's hungry. I'm in the grip of my characters. They're holding me hostage. No time to get dressed. And damn that phone, that doorbell.
Great dialogue,great plot. This is a fast paced piece. Length doesn't matter. Best of luck, my friend.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
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This is superb! I can so connect. Writing taking over my life. Husbands fall, I don't hear a thing. Hours fly. Who's hungry. I'm in the grip of my characters. They're holding me hostage. No time to get dressed. And damn that phone, that doorbell.
Great dialogue,great plot. This is a fast paced piece. Length doesn't matter. Best of luck, my friend.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
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Thank you, Spitfire for your lovely review and sixer. Constant interruptions are a pain ... LOL. I'm thrilled with your comments. :) ellen
Comment from purrfect tale
Gee, thanks for scaring the crap out of me. Life isn't hard enough, now I have to worry about the three musketeer muses showing up and driving me nuts. The twist at the end when they jumped into the report was really good too. Just an all around spooky psychological story.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
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Gee, thanks for scaring the crap out of me. Life isn't hard enough, now I have to worry about the three musketeer muses showing up and driving me nuts. The twist at the end when they jumped into the report was really good too. Just an all around spooky psychological story.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
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Thank you, PT. Scaring the crap out of you, did I? I think your inner house is already inhabited by some nice muses. No worry about these guys showing up. LOL Thank you again for your lovely response to this story and the sweet six. :) ellen
Comment from carolenaleigh
This was fun reading, and a linguistic challenge, so many unique phrases. I'm glad you included a mini-dictionary. Clever ending!
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
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This was fun reading, and a linguistic challenge, so many unique phrases. I'm glad you included a mini-dictionary. Clever ending!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
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Thank you, carolenleigh for commenting on the author notes. I never know whether or not to add a 'mini-dictionary.' I'm pleased to hear that you liked the ending. I hoped it would be a surprise. Thank you again for the generous review. The six is lovely.:)barking dog
Comment from BethShelby
Wow! That was quite a ride you took us on. I enjoyed every paragraph of it but I feel a little dizzy. I might be able to use one of those muses if they're out of a job but I think all three would be too much. LOL Great story. Very creative. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
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Wow! That was quite a ride you took us on. I enjoyed every paragraph of it but I feel a little dizzy. I might be able to use one of those muses if they're out of a job but I think all three would be too much. LOL Great story. Very creative. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
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Thank you, Beth for your marvelous comments and five lovely stars.
One of the Triad would be enough for any of us. LOL Have a great week and thank you for your good luck wishes. :) barking dog
Comment from Spiritual Echo
Get rid of the author's notes. If you need to explain it you have failed.
I suspect, though do not know, that this is a break from your usual writing and one that I surmise shook you into concious awareness of your own talent.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
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Get rid of the author's notes. If you need to explain it you have failed.
I suspect, though do not know, that this is a break from your usual writing and one that I surmise shook you into concious awareness of your own talent.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
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Thank you, Echo for your words of wisdom. I'm honored that you think, I have talent. This is my first try at using so many different vanage points for one character and was quite a fun puzzle to sort. Did say something to delete in the author notes? People always cry for definitions, so I give them now rather than have them yell at me. I know the readers are big boys and girls and should look them up, but I think their Googles are broken.
Comment from Gungalo
Whew, What a story you tell. The imagination that came up with this one is amazing. It has the reader guessing at all sorts of scenarios. Man and what an ending. You rock, BD!!
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
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Whew, What a story you tell. The imagination that came up with this one is amazing. It has the reader guessing at all sorts of scenarios. Man and what an ending. You rock, BD!!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
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Thank you, I kiss your feet, hands, ears, canary and cat/dog, for you outstanding words in review. I think the Triad is pretty neat, too. LOL I just don't want them to get a hold of any of my friends. They are really slave drivers and go through writers like writers used to go through ribbons. I hoped that the ending would be a surprise. Thank you again, G.
"Hey guys, I rock. G, said so!" hee hee
:) BD
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Hey you rock whether I say so or not. LOL.
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:)BD
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Smiling at you.
Comment from adewpearl
It actually requires a minimum of 700 but recommends a minimum of 2000, but yes, I get your point. I've recently had someone criticize my short lines in the monometer contest when those short lines were a contest requirement. It IS frustrating, isn't it? :-)
I love the effect of the repeated line in your opening.
You get into the narrator's inner thoughts most effectively
Love the conversation with the "muses" in the narrator's head
A most dramatic turn of events as the police turn up and we discover the tragedy that has occurred
Brooke
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
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It actually requires a minimum of 700 but recommends a minimum of 2000, but yes, I get your point. I've recently had someone criticize my short lines in the monometer contest when those short lines were a contest requirement. It IS frustrating, isn't it? :-)
I love the effect of the repeated line in your opening.
You get into the narrator's inner thoughts most effectively
Love the conversation with the "muses" in the narrator's head
A most dramatic turn of events as the police turn up and we discover the tragedy that has occurred
Brooke
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
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I didn't remember seeing the 700 minimum. Oh, well I didn't go over. I have been trying to pare it back a bit. Thank you for liking the opening. It was very complicated writing so from so many positions. In his head out of his head. The muses and then omniscent in the final section with the reporter. And I did it in past tense. Goody for me. I never did that before. I kept wanting to use present tense. Past tense gave me a third point from which Banks was able to talk to the reader. Luckly no one is complaining that they are having any problems with any of that. Not even the Brookster. LOL I have two sixes, but they aren't showing. I got one four that said it was too long.
I now wonder what havoc the Triad will pull on the young reporter. I just added two adjectives to the reporter section -- Ambitious eyes glazed over, and resolute fingers arched to type. The Triad would never pick just any writer. Banks had been an award winner. Well, the Triad has been an award winner. LOL
One six messaged me to write more. To continue the Triad.
Thank you again, Brooke for your kind and generous review(this is my memorized review response,but it is very sincere.) ellen xx
