Darkest Night
Forbidden love locked away in Pandora's Box.3 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 count
I like the alliteration in dreams dearest
and the assonance in sweet dearest
good consonance of D sounds in bathed in stardust
Lovely descriptive detail and a tender romantic tone :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 count
I like the alliteration in dreams dearest
and the assonance in sweet dearest
good consonance of D sounds in bathed in stardust
Lovely descriptive detail and a tender romantic tone :-) Brooke
Comment Written 21-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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I'm very flattered! Thank you very much : )
Comment from Anisa-
I actually really liked this. I thought it was quite neat for such a short saying ... the problem? Your syllable count is off. That's really important in a 5-7-5.
Anisa
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2012
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I actually really liked this. I thought it was quite neat for such a short saying ... the problem? Your syllable count is off. That's really important in a 5-7-5.
Anisa
Comment Written 21-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2012
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Yes- just caught that to and I just did some editing. Thanks for the positive feedback!
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You're welcome.
Comment from Chris Tee
A potential excellent poem you have just spoiled here with wrong syllable counts in line 3 old sport
Bathed =1 ab =1 out=1 in =1 star =1 dust =1 Total 6 syllables should be 5syllables
Syllable counting is really easy
When counting syllables in English you are counting the sound that each or more of the vowels in the word make. Then you count the number of times you hear the vowel sound. Vowels are A, E, I, O, U, and Y is also a syllable sound. She sound is important when you say taxed you do not hear the ed.
Sleeping = 2 sleep=1 ing =1 total =2 syllables
If you edit this I shall re-review it for a better rating
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2012
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A potential excellent poem you have just spoiled here with wrong syllable counts in line 3 old sport
Bathed =1 ab =1 out=1 in =1 star =1 dust =1 Total 6 syllables should be 5syllables
Syllable counting is really easy
When counting syllables in English you are counting the sound that each or more of the vowels in the word make. Then you count the number of times you hear the vowel sound. Vowels are A, E, I, O, U, and Y is also a syllable sound. She sound is important when you say taxed you do not hear the ed.
Sleeping = 2 sleep=1 ing =1 total =2 syllables
If you edit this I shall re-review it for a better rating
Comment Written 21-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2012
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How silly of me! Thanks and will do
