Lonely Hearts Meet
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Comment from lindafoldy
I've read other parts of your story. This chapter flows well with the other chapters. I like the story a lot. The interaction between Anna and Troy feels very real...They are trying to help each other
I look forward to reading more.
The dialogue works well here
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I've read other parts of your story. This chapter flows well with the other chapters. I like the story a lot. The interaction between Anna and Troy feels very real...They are trying to help each other
I look forward to reading more.
The dialogue works well here
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Connie P
The tension in this chapter is thick. Anna is almost to the breaking point and feeling very helpless, which she would be if not for Troy and his family. What a shame the police can't better protect someone in her situation.
I spotted no errors and found the chapter exceptional.
Connie
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The tension in this chapter is thick. Anna is almost to the breaking point and feeling very helpless, which she would be if not for Troy and his family. What a shame the police can't better protect someone in her situation.
I spotted no errors and found the chapter exceptional.
Connie
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Val Crisson
Very I teresting and suspenseful read. I am glad to see in your notes an abuse hot line number. Any attention brought to this subject is a good thing.
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Very I teresting and suspenseful read. I am glad to see in your notes an abuse hot line number. Any attention brought to this subject is a good thing.
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Comment from Writingfundimension
Very clean writing in this chapter, barbara. It's fascinating to see the way the men are all angling to take care of Anna - what a difference from her scummy husband. The suspense certainly went up a notch in this chapter. Take care, Bev
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Very clean writing in this chapter, barbara. It's fascinating to see the way the men are all angling to take care of Anna - what a difference from her scummy husband. The suspense certainly went up a notch in this chapter. Take care, Bev
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Comment from Cumbrianlass
Well, Anna's got some pretty solid protection now. I'm interested to see what shows up with the plate check. I get so annoyed when I hear the cops saying they need more. Often, the 'more' is after it's too darn late. Good work, Barbara.
Hugs, Av.
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Well, Anna's got some pretty solid protection now. I'm interested to see what shows up with the plate check. I get so annoyed when I hear the cops saying they need more. Often, the 'more' is after it's too darn late. Good work, Barbara.
Hugs, Av.
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Comment from Auroraboreal800
Hi Barbara!
Thanks! This is another great chapter, that I enjoyed, since things are turning much better for Ann. I'm so glad she's being well watched.
What you're doing with this written is WONDERFUL!!
Many blessing for you and your family!
:)
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Hi Barbara!
Thanks! This is another great chapter, that I enjoyed, since things are turning much better for Ann. I'm so glad she's being well watched.
What you're doing with this written is WONDERFUL!!
Many blessing for you and your family!
:)
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Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
I expected the response the police gave, so its good to see that Troy is hiring some guards.
Good pace to the story, and I begin to see a light at the end of the tunnel for this pair./trio ...
Patrick
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Hi Barbara,
I expected the response the police gave, so its good to see that Troy is hiring some guards.
Good pace to the story, and I begin to see a light at the end of the tunnel for this pair./trio ...
Patrick
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Comment from robina1978
It gets more and more scary again. Anna and Michael nearly hit. The police is not much use here. But Troy makes sure she is guarded around the clock.
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It gets more and more scary again. Anna and Michael nearly hit. The police is not much use here. But Troy makes sure she is guarded around the clock.
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Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Barbara:)
This chapter is all too realistic for some policemen who don't want to take action until someone is injured or dead.
Thank goodneess for Paul and Troy who will spare no expense to protect AnnA.
Just a few specific comments:
1. "A man who accidently runs into a mother and child always [run ==> runs] off." {A typo?}
2. The police officer took their statements but said, "There's really nothing I can do at this time. The man could have accidently bumped you." {This sounds like some policemen I have encountered, who simply want to avoid work. He is the type who always knows where he nearest donut shop is located. I do believe some reference should have been made to the license plate number.}
3. She turned toward him with tears streaming down her cheeks. "Does your dad do wills? Bobbie isn't going to stop until I'm dead and the police won't do anything until he kills me. I'm worried about Michael. Would your parents raise him?" {Poor Anna! The policeman's attitude has set her back in her recovery from abuse.}
Love and Irish hugs,
Roger
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Hi Barbara:)
This chapter is all too realistic for some policemen who don't want to take action until someone is injured or dead.
Thank goodneess for Paul and Troy who will spare no expense to protect AnnA.
Just a few specific comments:
1. "A man who accidently runs into a mother and child always [run ==> runs] off." {A typo?}
2. The police officer took their statements but said, "There's really nothing I can do at this time. The man could have accidently bumped you." {This sounds like some policemen I have encountered, who simply want to avoid work. He is the type who always knows where he nearest donut shop is located. I do believe some reference should have been made to the license plate number.}
3. She turned toward him with tears streaming down her cheeks. "Does your dad do wills? Bobbie isn't going to stop until I'm dead and the police won't do anything until he kills me. I'm worried about Michael. Would your parents raise him?" {Poor Anna! The policeman's attitude has set her back in her recovery from abuse.}
Love and Irish hugs,
Roger
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Thank you for your eagle eye. I have made the corrections.
Comment from Janie King
In many of these cases the police just act dumb. after she or the baby is hurt their help is too late. Gppd chapter with much of the tension of being stalked so to say// Gpd bless.
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In many of these cases the police just act dumb. after she or the baby is hurt their help is too late. Gppd chapter with much of the tension of being stalked so to say// Gpd bless.
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Thank you for your kind review.
