you don't know how
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Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I wrote a poem similar to this and I think it happens to all of us. We get caught up and think someone has it all but in reality they don't have anything. Stay strong friend and keep writing
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I wrote a poem similar to this and I think it happens to all of us. We get caught up and think someone has it all but in reality they don't have anything. Stay strong friend and keep writing
Comment Written 19-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
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Thanks for a great review. What was the name of the poem you wrote?
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I have a couple:
Just fine was written on June 4, 2008
Nobody knows written on April 5, 2008
Comment from Glasstruth
What we see on the outside is not the pages of the book, just the cover. Looking into the eye of the soul is what I see; the soul is aloof in its vulnerability keeps repeating, "you don't know how" and cleverly ends by saying, "I am a child" Superb!
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What we see on the outside is not the pages of the book, just the cover. Looking into the eye of the soul is what I see; the soul is aloof in its vulnerability keeps repeating, "you don't know how" and cleverly ends by saying, "I am a child" Superb!
Comment Written 19-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
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Yes, I like the metaphor of a book. Thanks you for an excellent review.
Comment from MAMONIA
Wow! I really like the "voice" you use
in this poem. It is so real!
Just like saying "don't judge a book by
its cover."
Many people have had their different ideas
about me when they saw me out or in Church, but
never even got to speak with me to find out
who I really was.
This is a quirk of human nature and you say
it exquisitely. Great write. Lots of luck.
Marie
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
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Wow! I really like the "voice" you use
in this poem. It is so real!
Just like saying "don't judge a book by
its cover."
Many people have had their different ideas
about me when they saw me out or in Church, but
never even got to speak with me to find out
who I really was.
This is a quirk of human nature and you say
it exquisitely. Great write. Lots of luck.
Marie
Comment Written 19-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
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Thanks for a great review.
Comment from rtoddwatts22
Alvin, I have to admit some of the words you use in your poem,
(i.e. pompous, smug and arrogance) have come to mind while
reading your harsh, albeit honest reviews. This poem changed
my opinion of how I perceive others and myself. You allow a
glimpse of your soul to the reader. A task few people have
the skill and courage to truly accomplish. This is an
outstanding free verse poem on every level. Regards, Todd
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
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Alvin, I have to admit some of the words you use in your poem,
(i.e. pompous, smug and arrogance) have come to mind while
reading your harsh, albeit honest reviews. This poem changed
my opinion of how I perceive others and myself. You allow a
glimpse of your soul to the reader. A task few people have
the skill and courage to truly accomplish. This is an
outstanding free verse poem on every level. Regards, Todd
Comment Written 19-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
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Yes, I often wonder when people think I am hard on them if they know how hard I am on myself. My private persona is much different from my public one. Thanks for an exceptional review.
Comment from Bri97
This is a very well written poem that I, and others, can relate to; only we know our own minds and everyone has doubts about themselves and their lives. I really enjoyed reading this poem as it seems so personal, well done.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
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This is a very well written poem that I, and others, can relate to; only we know our own minds and everyone has doubts about themselves and their lives. I really enjoyed reading this poem as it seems so personal, well done.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
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Thanks for an exceptional review; this is, indeed, one of the most personal works I have ever written.
Comment from Connie C
This really touched me, Alvin. Having entered a few of the recent senryu contests, I've read some of the dialogue in the thread that you started in at least one of those contests, and I wonder if perhaps some of this poem was inspired by that dialogue. I do not think you are pompous at all; you are trying to be helpful, and that is why we are all here on this site. Through this poem, you convey that you are human with vulnerabilities just like the rest of us. I really like this kind of honesty. Connie
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
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This really touched me, Alvin. Having entered a few of the recent senryu contests, I've read some of the dialogue in the thread that you started in at least one of those contests, and I wonder if perhaps some of this poem was inspired by that dialogue. I do not think you are pompous at all; you are trying to be helpful, and that is why we are all here on this site. Through this poem, you convey that you are human with vulnerabilities just like the rest of us. I really like this kind of honesty. Connie
Comment Written 19-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
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It was inspired by several events in my work life, including but not limited to that thread. Thank you for your extremely kind review and the extraordinary rating. I am quite grateful.
Comment from Spitfire
Great use of parallel structure to convey the message that outward appearances don't tell the whole story. Good specific images to get across an abstract concept. Deep down, most if not all of us, can't get away from insecurities.
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Great use of parallel structure to convey the message that outward appearances don't tell the whole story. Good specific images to get across an abstract concept. Deep down, most if not all of us, can't get away from insecurities.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2012
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Thanks for noting the structure; it was hard to get that right. Thanks also for an excellent review.
Comment from Vladilynn
Well Said!
How truth people judge others first without knowing what kind of person he/she is. I'm not surprise, because I might done the same thing, without knowing it.
I don't think we are bad people because we may prejudge people, I believe we become bad people when we are unwilling or unable to overcome those prejudices.I read one time that; human mind likes to categorize people and fit them into these neat little cubby holes so it is easy to deal with them. Because they think of their selves they're greater than other else. I can even see here(FS)in some reviews, even thought we don't really all meet in person. People still find a way, to manipulate other people's feelings.
The best I can say is; we should screen ourselves more, before saying a word, because it may not the way we want to apply it, but on that person we've said enough that can hurt them.
Thank you for sharing an interesting poem. It's worthy honest thought. And I do cherishes every moral values.
Love much,
Lynn:0)
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
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Well Said!
How truth people judge others first without knowing what kind of person he/she is. I'm not surprise, because I might done the same thing, without knowing it.
I don't think we are bad people because we may prejudge people, I believe we become bad people when we are unwilling or unable to overcome those prejudices.I read one time that; human mind likes to categorize people and fit them into these neat little cubby holes so it is easy to deal with them. Because they think of their selves they're greater than other else. I can even see here(FS)in some reviews, even thought we don't really all meet in person. People still find a way, to manipulate other people's feelings.
The best I can say is; we should screen ourselves more, before saying a word, because it may not the way we want to apply it, but on that person we've said enough that can hurt them.
Thank you for sharing an interesting poem. It's worthy honest thought. And I do cherishes every moral values.
Love much,
Lynn:0)
Comment Written 19-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
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Thanks for a great review. Where have you been?
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
The honest admission of vulnerability here touches me, Alvin. I think at heart each of us is still a child, feeling poor and homeless regardless of what image we may project, or that others may project onto us. My best regards, Jeanie
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
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The honest admission of vulnerability here touches me, Alvin. I think at heart each of us is still a child, feeling poor and homeless regardless of what image we may project, or that others may project onto us. My best regards, Jeanie
Comment Written 19-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
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Thanks for understanding this poem so well and for an excellent review. (Oh, and thanks for your support in the thread in the senryu contest. I never knew offering help could cause such controversy.)
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You're welcome for the review. Yes, it's interesting that offering help could cause such a stir, and you're not charging one thin dime for the advice offered in the threads.
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And when I just mention my classes, I'm criticized for trying to make a living! I don't get that AT ALL.
Comment from rightforyou
Sweet
I loved this poem and the words that you have included making this a wonderful poem to read and review..I would also recommend this poem for others to read and review as well ...Wonderful job and a pleasure to read...Ron
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Sweet
I loved this poem and the words that you have included making this a wonderful poem to read and review..I would also recommend this poem for others to read and review as well ...Wonderful job and a pleasure to read...Ron
Comment Written 19-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
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Thanks for an excellent review. I am quite grateful.
