you don't know how
a contest entry80 total reviews
Comment from Frankeddy
Lovely free verse poem.
Capturing the true and unspoken thoughts of man.
I guess it is human nature that we are never able to be totally satisfied within our
own minds. You were very descriptive of that in a very nice verse.
Well done. Good luck. Frankeddy.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2012
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Lovely free verse poem.
Capturing the true and unspoken thoughts of man.
I guess it is human nature that we are never able to be totally satisfied within our
own minds. You were very descriptive of that in a very nice verse.
Well done. Good luck. Frankeddy.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2012
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Thanks for an excellent review. I am quite honored.
Comment from peggles
This is a really powerful writing
It shows a lot of emotion and frustration
and self doubt
The all seeing eye is a perfect match to this this post
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2012
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This is a really powerful writing
It shows a lot of emotion and frustration
and self doubt
The all seeing eye is a perfect match to this this post
Comment Written 23-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2012
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Thanks for an excellent review. I am quite appreciative.
Comment from randomzed
Well, this is most interesting.
To the best of my knowledge, I have not come across your work before now.
And the first offering, I deduce, is a feeling of obligation to explain.
Bottom line: I enjoyed your poem very much.
It is well composed and flows smoothly.
The thought expressed is intriguing.
I get it (and agree) but am forced to ask:
Why wear a Brooke Brothers suit to church?
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2012
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Well, this is most interesting.
To the best of my knowledge, I have not come across your work before now.
And the first offering, I deduce, is a feeling of obligation to explain.
Bottom line: I enjoyed your poem very much.
It is well composed and flows smoothly.
The thought expressed is intriguing.
I get it (and agree) but am forced to ask:
Why wear a Brooke Brothers suit to church?
Comment Written 23-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2012
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To honor God with my best clothes. Thanks for an excellent review.
Comment from livelylinda
Alvin TEthington, what a good poem. You described me quite acurately as well as many other people just like us. I live within my box with shields usually full up to protect me. I have been told by strangers that I have an aura which loudly says, "Back off. I don't want you near me". This I heard in a bar one time where I was trying to pick up some quick fun. We have to live as we are, those of us feeling the need to protect ourselves. . .
livelylinda
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2012
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Alvin TEthington, what a good poem. You described me quite acurately as well as many other people just like us. I live within my box with shields usually full up to protect me. I have been told by strangers that I have an aura which loudly says, "Back off. I don't want you near me". This I heard in a bar one time where I was trying to pick up some quick fun. We have to live as we are, those of us feeling the need to protect ourselves. . .
livelylinda
Comment Written 23-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2012
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Thanks for an excellent review. I am quite honored.
Comment from Merajul
The repeatition of lines at the end with different idea taken everytime is what I liked most(I ,too,have written in this style -My poem -An Apparition).The idea in individual para is good with beautiful pic to complement.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2012
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The repeatition of lines at the end with different idea taken everytime is what I liked most(I ,too,have written in this style -My poem -An Apparition).The idea in individual para is good with beautiful pic to complement.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2012
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Thanks for an excellent review. I reciprocated and reviewed your poem.
Comment from mommerry
This really pulled me in. The writer's intents and attitudes poorly judged - his acceptance and silent rebuttal - his humility. Superior. I am not schooled in reading poetry but I know what I like and I liked this.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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This really pulled me in. The writer's intents and attitudes poorly judged - his acceptance and silent rebuttal - his humility. Superior. I am not schooled in reading poetry but I know what I like and I liked this.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Thanks for an excellent review. I am ever so grateful. Don't worry about not being schooled in poetry. All professional writers need a wide audience and need to write what people enjoy. Thank you again.
Comment from Matoshka
This is so honest and tender. Your heart speaks of don't judge a book by it's cover. Your message touched my heart as I have been guilty of that at times. Thank you and good luck in the contest. God Bless you
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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This is so honest and tender. Your heart speaks of don't judge a book by it's cover. Your message touched my heart as I have been guilty of that at times. Thank you and good luck in the contest. God Bless you
Comment Written 21-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Thanks for an excellent review. I am honored.
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You are so welcome, I enjoyed your wisdom so much. Blessings
Comment from writer c
Alvin, I really resonate with the honest, heartfelt message in this wonderful free verse poem. I love the repeat of the "you don't know how"..very effective. I think this will resonate with so many readers, because we all connect with vulnerability even as we work to cover up our pain, past and present. Thank you for sharing this soft and tender piece.
Carol
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
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Alvin, I really resonate with the honest, heartfelt message in this wonderful free verse poem. I love the repeat of the "you don't know how"..very effective. I think this will resonate with so many readers, because we all connect with vulnerability even as we work to cover up our pain, past and present. Thank you for sharing this soft and tender piece.
Carol
Comment Written 20-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
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Thansk for an exceptional review. I am extremely grateful.
Comment from Kate Walker
Hi Alvin,
Me again. I had a quick look at other pieces you've posted in case there was another thigh-slapper up there. And I came across this poem.
It's very simple, very honest, from the hard-working head and most vulnerable corner of the heart.
Loved it.
Kate
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
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Hi Alvin,
Me again. I had a quick look at other pieces you've posted in case there was another thigh-slapper up there. And I came across this poem.
It's very simple, very honest, from the hard-working head and most vulnerable corner of the heart.
Loved it.
Kate
Comment Written 19-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
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Thanks for a great review; the other thigh-slapper in my portfolio right now is "Jasmine."
Comment from sugardog
Wow...love your honesty in free verse. Perfect form for these words. We all have worries and fears and doubt-I love that you can voice it so well here. It's raw and honest and touching. I really like your title and repeating line. You're a great writer, a great teacher, and a great person. Nice work and good luck!!!! Dana
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
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Wow...love your honesty in free verse. Perfect form for these words. We all have worries and fears and doubt-I love that you can voice it so well here. It's raw and honest and touching. I really like your title and repeating line. You're a great writer, a great teacher, and a great person. Nice work and good luck!!!! Dana
Comment Written 19-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
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Thanks for this exceptional review. I am quite grateful.
