Angels in the Sky
A colorful poem7 total reviews
Comment from Bayberry
This is a very uplifting poem with wonderful imagery. It was a delight to read. I enjoyed your author notes also...love the phrase: sheer joy of the day. Super job!
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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This is a very uplifting poem with wonderful imagery. It was a delight to read. I enjoyed your author notes also...love the phrase: sheer joy of the day. Super job!
Comment Written 16-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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Thank you Josie for reading and commenting so nicely on my poem. I am glad you liked it. It was one of those very special days for me. I love having them. :o)
Comment from elliejean
I love the picture,. I love the poem. The lighter colors for the holy things, and the bolder colors for life. That is what it is all about.. Try to keep a right mixture of colors in our life and we will be happy. Great work.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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I love the picture,. I love the poem. The lighter colors for the holy things, and the bolder colors for life. That is what it is all about.. Try to keep a right mixture of colors in our life and we will be happy. Great work.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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Wow! Elliejean you gave me a whole new prespective on my "own" poem. How cool is that? :o) Thank you.
Comment from Charsie
I like the imagery and the use of colours to describe your emotions. Add a few grammatical pauses such as commas and punctuation marks to help the reader. Overall a calming poem to read.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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I like the imagery and the use of colours to describe your emotions. Add a few grammatical pauses such as commas and punctuation marks to help the reader. Overall a calming poem to read.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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Thank you Charsie for reading my poem. I am glad that you preceived the poem as a calming one. It was a very special joyful day for me.
Comment from HuntersMoon
Nicely done! Perfect picture to illustrate the emotive words you've captured in this beautiful write. Love the "silver spirit" which, by the way, is a Hindu concept that our souls are attached to our bodies by a silver cord. Just a fun fact :)
I think this will do well (but since I've never figured out why great writes lose and mediocre ones win - what do I know?)
Best of luck ...
Ken
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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Nicely done! Perfect picture to illustrate the emotive words you've captured in this beautiful write. Love the "silver spirit" which, by the way, is a Hindu concept that our souls are attached to our bodies by a silver cord. Just a fun fact :)
I think this will do well (but since I've never figured out why great writes lose and mediocre ones win - what do I know?)
Best of luck ...
Ken
Comment Written 16-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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Thank you Ken for reading my poem and adding your very interesting comments. I did not know that it was also a Hindu concept that our souls are attached to our bodies by a silver cord. I have believed it for years...something, I read in the Bible. :o) I am glad you liked my little joy filled poem. It was one of those very special days when "joy just happens."
Comment from angel123
Your poem is well written and I enjoyed reading it. I like your use of colors and your message of nature and sheer joy of the day.
Angel123
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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Your poem is well written and I enjoyed reading it. I like your use of colors and your message of nature and sheer joy of the day.
Angel123
Comment Written 16-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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Thank you angel for your kind comments. Yes, I just love it when "those" days of joy "just happen." :o)
Comment from Adri7enne
Your use of colours might not be too profound but you did fit in some good ones. "If I could close my blue eyes". That sounded pretty forced though. When is the last time you had someone describe the color of his/her eyes in a statement? It doesn't feel right.
Try to capture the feeling of the colors and describe how you see them. Go deeper.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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Your use of colours might not be too profound but you did fit in some good ones. "If I could close my blue eyes". That sounded pretty forced though. When is the last time you had someone describe the color of his/her eyes in a statement? It doesn't feel right.
Try to capture the feeling of the colors and describe how you see them. Go deeper.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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Thank you for reviewing my poem. It wasn't meant to be a profound/deep statement poem. Just for fun. Sorry, but my eyes are VERY blue.:o) In fact most people say unusually blue. It originally read "close my eyes". I added the "blue" since I was trying to have fun with adding color to every line. :O)
Comment from bowls
Very colourful, indeed. I enjoyed reading about the lovely experience which was enhanced by the use of colour. A very good entry for the contest. It'll make people feel happy as they read it. Good luck.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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Very colourful, indeed. I enjoyed reading about the lovely experience which was enhanced by the use of colour. A very good entry for the contest. It'll make people feel happy as they read it. Good luck.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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Thank you for reviewing my poem. Your comments are very kind.
