Comment from gazzagodbod

Excellent

ooh great little story your few words share a whole story in the mind great work my friend thanks and all the best in the contest gazza

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2012

Thank yo. Your review is appreciated.

Comment from elliejean

Excellent

I love the picture. I love the story. Mess with a man but don't mess with his family. She went too far and it made him go to far. Now he is never going to get rid of her. Great work.

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012

You kind words and review are appreciated.

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is very well written, mystery writer, you did a great job writing this flash fiction story about the man who killed his brother's fiance. i enjoyed reading it and wish you the best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012

thanks so much.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

You've used the required words well and have stayed within the contest's strict word limits, and you have, more impressively, done this while telling a compelling story :-) I guess she crossed the wrong brother! Brooke

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012

Thanks for your review. Not all brides are sweet.

Comment from PoesyPoet

Exceptional

That little, bi##%! Sounds like she got what she deserved, too bad with all the forsenic dodas, he'll get caught. Maybe, that'll be the next prompt. Well done, sounds like a winner to me. PP

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012

You are very kind and very generous stars. Yes the bi##%! was something else....even though she came from my keyboard.

Comment from humpwhistle

Excellent

Very complex story, Author---especially given the tight restrictions of this prompt. Very well done.
The 'words' blended in seamlessly,
and you managed to tell a complete story.
Very well done.

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012

With an honored curtsy and appreciation for your review.

reply by humpwhistle on 13-Feb-2012

Curstey, nothing. I way hoping for a little leg. Lee

reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012

My dear friend, the dialect in the stoy gave you away...man, if I lose to some ass, I can always PM you my personal list, it would be tragic. Taking 2nd place to your talent is still an honour...leg...sure why not, lately they've just been good for stumbling around on, but then again a guy who hasn't had a bath in three months...hmm...let me think about it....it's been a while since I assumed a yoga position.

reply by humpwhistle on 13-Feb-2012

I don't know much about yoga. But I know what I like. I spotted your story, too. You have a style.
Cheer up, Spring will be here soon.

Lee

Comment from highlander104

Excellent

Well-packaged murder story in 146 words. I'm afraid the good brother will pay for her absence after all. Good write and sould do well in the contest. Good luck.

Jean K.

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012

Thanks for reading and your kind words.

Comment from Cheryl Baker

Excellent

What a great story. He silenced her for good. I enjoyed reading your short story using all of the required words. It would make a great longer story. Well done.

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012

Thanks, the flash genre is a great discipline for cutting adjectives and slicing through sentences.

Comment from Adri7enne

Excellent

Great job, author. Got all the words in seamlessly and told a good story besides. I enjoyed the read. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012

Thanks, quite the challenge when the word list is ten percent of the story.

Comment from azwildrosa

Excellent

a great story. wow, guess he didn't want her in his life at all. you done a great job creating a story using all words requested. your story flows nicely from beginning to end creating the image of this woman making this man crazy enough for murder. thank you for sharing and best wishes to you in the booths.

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012

Thank you for your kind words.