Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 52 "part 3, Chapter 16"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from sweetwoodjax
thisi s very well written, barbara, yo udid a great job writing this chapter where anna was attacked and troy was able to discover the license tag of the truck. i enjoyed reading it. only saw one spag, answered ringing door bell instead of door ell
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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thisi s very well written, barbara, yo udid a great job writing this chapter where anna was attacked and troy was able to discover the license tag of the truck. i enjoyed reading it. only saw one spag, answered ringing door bell instead of door ell
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from jadapenn
Some good action at the end of this chapter. Anna seems well placed with Troy's family now and I bet Michael will believe Betty and Paul are his grandparents.
Loved the progress. Now at least they have something on this lout with the muffler. Well written.
Two little gremlins.
the ringing door [b] ell
Ann[a] pulled into her parking
Luv jada
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Some good action at the end of this chapter. Anna seems well placed with Troy's family now and I bet Michael will believe Betty and Paul are his grandparents.
Loved the progress. Now at least they have something on this lout with the muffler. Well written.
Two little gremlins.
the ringing door [b] ell
Ann[a] pulled into her parking
Luv jada
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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I made some changes in those areas and made everything worse. Thank you for your eagle eye.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
So Anna's pursuer is finally showing his hand, I hope the police catch up with him and his helpers soon. One correction for you -
Paul answered the ringing door ell. bell?
Patrick
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Hi Barbara,
So Anna's pursuer is finally showing his hand, I hope the police catch up with him and his helpers soon. One correction for you -
Paul answered the ringing door ell. bell?
Patrick
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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I just fixed that. I had doorbell and one word and when I put in the space, I knocked off the b. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
Betty entered and[,] after prayer[,] they passed the food.
Ann[a] pulled into her parking space and Troy pulled into the slot beside her.
She stepped up the curb and stood on the sidewalk[] before turning toward Troy.
Once inside[,] she slammed the door closed and locked it.
Finally. Some evidence that might at last identify the creep.
Roberta
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Betty entered and[,] after prayer[,] they passed the food.
Ann[a] pulled into her parking space and Troy pulled into the slot beside her.
She stepped up the curb and stood on the sidewalk[] before turning toward Troy.
Once inside[,] she slammed the door closed and locked it.
Finally. Some evidence that might at last identify the creep.
Roberta
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Thank you for your kind review and your support.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb
I never know what to expect when I read another chapter of your book
I pray Troy finds out who causing all the turmoil in Anna's life. I know one thing poor Michel soon will be traumatized.
Gert
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Hello Barb
I never know what to expect when I read another chapter of your book
I pray Troy finds out who causing all the turmoil in Anna's life. I know one thing poor Michel soon will be traumatized.
Gert
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Thank you for your kind review and the continued support you give me.
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You are welcome
Love
Gert
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Oh boy, that was a close call. Another well penned work and your ending was a heart thumping one. Safe inside for now, but I'm sure safety is but an illusion.
Well penned Barbara.
Thanks for sharing,
Maureen
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Oh boy, that was a close call. Another well penned work and your ending was a heart thumping one. Safe inside for now, but I'm sure safety is but an illusion.
Well penned Barbara.
Thanks for sharing,
Maureen
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from c_lucas
It looks Paul is bringing in the big guns. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. Good job.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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It looks Paul is bringing in the big guns. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. Good job.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Thank you for your review and encouraging words.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie
Comment from judiverse
This is great work. You keep the suspense going and you keep your focus, too. Although Anna is gaining strength and beginning to feel more secure, threats are always occurring. A bad one this time, as Michael was also in harm's way. At least Troy got a license plate number, so they may be able to track who's behind the threats to Anna. The threats are becoming sicker and sicker, and it seems that her ex and his family are the logical suspects. Or are there other entities at work? Good job of keeping the reader guessing. judi
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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This is great work. You keep the suspense going and you keep your focus, too. Although Anna is gaining strength and beginning to feel more secure, threats are always occurring. A bad one this time, as Michael was also in harm's way. At least Troy got a license plate number, so they may be able to track who's behind the threats to Anna. The threats are becoming sicker and sicker, and it seems that her ex and his family are the logical suspects. Or are there other entities at work? Good job of keeping the reader guessing. judi
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Poor Anna... will she ever
have peace of mind... I hope
Troy traces the chap and
reports him.
"It's seems my
"It seems
the door an(d) opened it.
Margaret
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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Poor Anna... will she ever
have peace of mind... I hope
Troy traces the chap and
reports him.
"It's seems my
"It seems
the door an(d) opened it.
Margaret
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Thank you for your eagle eye. I have made the corrections.
