Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 52 "part 3, Chapter 16"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from missy98writer
Barbara,
How are you doing? I've been a bad friend as of late. You latest chapter, fifty two, is exciting and fabulously written. I was on the edge of my seat from the drama at the end. Who was the guy Troy chased. Maybe this fellow in the truck is after Troy and not Anna like most readers assume. Are you throwing in a read herring? You are a crafty writer and your pen is on fire. You actions scene is excellent. Whew, my heart is pounding. I look forward to reading future chapters and to see where you take your story. You are doing a flawless job writing this chapter. Keep on writing professionally. Please have a blessed day, my friend. Peace out..Melissa.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Barbara,
How are you doing? I've been a bad friend as of late. You latest chapter, fifty two, is exciting and fabulously written. I was on the edge of my seat from the drama at the end. Who was the guy Troy chased. Maybe this fellow in the truck is after Troy and not Anna like most readers assume. Are you throwing in a read herring? You are a crafty writer and your pen is on fire. You actions scene is excellent. Whew, my heart is pounding. I look forward to reading future chapters and to see where you take your story. You are doing a flawless job writing this chapter. Keep on writing professionally. Please have a blessed day, my friend. Peace out..Melissa.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Thank you for your kind review. Hey, you're in my prayers.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Barbara,
I thought things were going too smooth and then this chapter says NO IT IS NOT! Poor little Michael, he could have been hurt badly. I keep thinking Bobby got out of jail but if he did Paul would know about it. So I think he must have paid someone to harass Anna. But it seems whoever it is made a big mistake and hopefully he will be caught and put away with Bobby. This is an exciting and upsetting chapter! Good writing here....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Hi Barbara,
I thought things were going too smooth and then this chapter says NO IT IS NOT! Poor little Michael, he could have been hurt badly. I keep thinking Bobby got out of jail but if he did Paul would know about it. So I think he must have paid someone to harass Anna. But it seems whoever it is made a big mistake and hopefully he will be caught and put away with Bobby. This is an exciting and upsetting chapter! Good writing here....blessings, chey
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and your insight.
Comment from Janie King
The one thing for sure your book should really open the eyes of the reader that hasn't been around the affects of this kind of abuse and harrassment. Good chapter. God bless.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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The one thing for sure your book should really open the eyes of the reader that hasn't been around the affects of this kind of abuse and harrassment. Good chapter. God bless.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Thgank you for your kind review. I have had a few readers tell me they are living it.
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Barbara:)
Now maybe the stalking will finally end. As usual, I have some specific comments:
1. As dinner ended, Paul answered the ringing door [ell ==> bell. {A typo?}
2. Anna leaned in and securely fastened in her son and then opened the driver's door. [I suggest: Anna leaned in and secured Michael, then opened the driver's door. I think this is more natural construction, but it's just a suggestion.}
3. She stepped [up ==> over] the curb and stood on the sidewalk, before turning toward Troy. "Would you like to come in for a few minutes?" {Just a slight change for visual effect.}
4. As Troy runs after the attacker, I suggest that Anna calls after him,"Be careful! He may have a gun." {I think that would be a natural warning.}
I really like this short chapter. I also liked the fact that Anna finally invited Troy to come inside. It's time for more romance.
Love and Irish hugs for a great story.
Roger
5. When Troy comes back to the door I suggest that she will be holding the phone and will tell Troy, Thank God you're safe. I already called 911 and the police are on the way.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Hi Barbara:)
Now maybe the stalking will finally end. As usual, I have some specific comments:
1. As dinner ended, Paul answered the ringing door [ell ==> bell. {A typo?}
2. Anna leaned in and securely fastened in her son and then opened the driver's door. [I suggest: Anna leaned in and secured Michael, then opened the driver's door. I think this is more natural construction, but it's just a suggestion.}
3. She stepped [up ==> over] the curb and stood on the sidewalk, before turning toward Troy. "Would you like to come in for a few minutes?" {Just a slight change for visual effect.}
4. As Troy runs after the attacker, I suggest that Anna calls after him,"Be careful! He may have a gun." {I think that would be a natural warning.}
I really like this short chapter. I also liked the fact that Anna finally invited Troy to come inside. It's time for more romance.
Love and Irish hugs for a great story.
Roger
5. When Troy comes back to the door I suggest that she will be holding the phone and will tell Troy, Thank God you're safe. I already called 911 and the police are on the way.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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I like all of your suggestions and will make the changes. Thank you for your support and help.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Oh, this is getting creepy!!! Someone In her home while she was gone.That would freak me out. Great job on the accuracy and advice in this book!!! Debbie
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Oh, this is getting creepy!!! Someone In her home while she was gone.That would freak me out. Great job on the accuracy and advice in this book!!! Debbie
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and your insight.
Comment from AprilShower
Hi, Barbara. It's a good thing Troy followed Anna. Well written. I just noticed a typing error below: I am still wondering why anyone would put Troy's medical history on the internet. Guess there will not be any peace until that crazy family of her ex is in prison.
Paul answered the ringing door (b)ell.
April
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Hi, Barbara. It's a good thing Troy followed Anna. Well written. I just noticed a typing error below: I am still wondering why anyone would put Troy's medical history on the internet. Guess there will not be any peace until that crazy family of her ex is in prison.
Paul answered the ringing door (b)ell.
April
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome, Barbars.
Comment from Gungalo
Wow, he did it, he made a wrong move. Sigh it must be so annoying and scary to not know when you are going to be accosted by someone. I hope they catch him and put him away forever.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Wow, he did it, he made a wrong move. Sigh it must be so annoying and scary to not know when you are going to be accosted by someone. I hope they catch him and put him away forever.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Thank you for yoru kind review.
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A very good chapter.
Comment from hyway94
I wish I could keep up with all you write, their always good. I read one other chapter a couple weeks ago and it's just like I haven't missed anything. As always I can't find anything wrong. Boy I just wish I could write like you. Thank you.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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I wish I could keep up with all you write, their always good. I read one other chapter a couple weeks ago and it's just like I haven't missed anything. As always I can't find anything wrong. Boy I just wish I could write like you. Thank you.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and your encouraging words.
Comment from misscookie
I like this chapter as If you didn't know.
you always have aurprise waiting in your atories I guess that's why I keep reading.
thank you fopr sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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I like this chapter as If you didn't know.
you always have aurprise waiting in your atories I guess that's why I keep reading.
thank you fopr sharing.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're very welcome.
Comment from Karen Payton Holt
Hello Barbara, another gripping chapter. The way the domestic scene is suddenly thrown into threatening territory,mwith a blindside attack. Your descriptions are effective and take the reader there. Great job.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Hello Barbara, another gripping chapter. The way the domestic scene is suddenly thrown into threatening territory,mwith a blindside attack. Your descriptions are effective and take the reader there. Great job.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
