Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 52 "part 3, Chapter 16"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from NaughtieScribe
I knew it, the bastard could have seriously injured the baby. Thank goodness Troy was there. I hope the ass gets gang raped in prison. Let's see if he then feels so macho as to shove a woman, with a child in her arms no less. I truly have no sympathy for the likes of animals like that.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2012
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I knew it, the bastard could have seriously injured the baby. Thank goodness Troy was there. I hope the ass gets gang raped in prison. Let's see if he then feels so macho as to shove a woman, with a child in her arms no less. I truly have no sympathy for the likes of animals like that.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2012
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Thank you.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
barbara:
Somehow I missed this chapter so I wanted to go back
and read it. You write so well that I really hate it
when I miss any of it. Now I understand the part about
the pushing of Anna in the next chapter.
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2012
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barbara:
Somehow I missed this chapter so I wanted to go back
and read it. You write so well that I really hate it
when I miss any of it. Now I understand the part about
the pushing of Anna in the next chapter.
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
Comment Written 20-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I am sorry you read this when no points were attached.
Comment from Scornwell
Though I haven't followed the story I found the writing descriptive and concise. I have always found your attention to detail an attribute to your style that draws a person into the story.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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Though I haven't followed the story I found the writing descriptive and concise. I have always found your attention to detail an attribute to your style that draws a person into the story.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Allieas
Wow, I haven't read the rest of the novel, but this is really powerful even as a snippet. It's an important issue and I really think you've captured the emotions that go along with this kind of a situation. The dialogue sounds very real, too. This is amazing :)
-Alexandra
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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Wow, I haven't read the rest of the novel, but this is really powerful even as a snippet. It's an important issue and I really think you've captured the emotions that go along with this kind of a situation. The dialogue sounds very real, too. This is amazing :)
-Alexandra
Comment Written 16-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Herb
Another great chapter well written and nothing I can see needs changing. The medical record thing reminded me of a soap opera. :)
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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Another great chapter well written and nothing I can see needs changing. The medical record thing reminded me of a soap opera. :)
Comment Written 16-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from ScarletClearwater
Wonderful dialogue and nice pace moving through this piece. It was engaging. I really enjoyed the read and the topic is one of such importance.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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Wonderful dialogue and nice pace moving through this piece. It was engaging. I really enjoyed the read and the topic is one of such importance.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from WilliamDeen
Nice work Barbara. Good read from beginning to end. Your dialogue flowed well and moved the story along. Good action and excitement near the end for the reader. Good hook leaving the reader wanting to find out about the intruder/attacker is in the next posting. Well done. Keep Reading & Writing. billy
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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Nice work Barbara. Good read from beginning to end. Your dialogue flowed well and moved the story along. Good action and excitement near the end for the reader. Good hook leaving the reader wanting to find out about the intruder/attacker is in the next posting. Well done. Keep Reading & Writing. billy
Comment Written 16-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Piggies Grandma
This chapter is very well written and very well thought out barbara. I enjoyed reading it very much. Poor Anna, will they every leave her alone?
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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This chapter is very well written and very well thought out barbara. I enjoyed reading it very much. Poor Anna, will they every leave her alone?
Comment Written 16-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Eldercrone
A nicely developed and written piece! You are good with dialogue and with pacing; the story moves right along. Also, you seem quiet good at making dialogue reveal your characters' character. This ability is one of the hallmarks of good fiction (the ability to show, not tell). It is also one many writers never master. My only suggestion is really minor. You use the word "spilt," and, unless this is dialect, I believe the correct word is "spoiled."
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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A nicely developed and written piece! You are good with dialogue and with pacing; the story moves right along. Also, you seem quiet good at making dialogue reveal your characters' character. This ability is one of the hallmarks of good fiction (the ability to show, not tell). It is also one many writers never master. My only suggestion is really minor. You use the word "spilt," and, unless this is dialect, I believe the correct word is "spoiled."
Comment Written 15-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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Thank you for kind review and encouragement.
Comment from angel123
Your story about domestic violence is interesting and I enjoyed reading it. It held my attention and left me wanting to read more. I will try to keep up with your story. I have no suggestions for any changes. Troy is a good man.
Angel123
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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Your story about domestic violence is interesting and I enjoyed reading it. It held my attention and left me wanting to read more. I will try to keep up with your story. I have no suggestions for any changes. Troy is a good man.
Angel123
Comment Written 15-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
