Can't afford toothpaste
A Cinquain24 total reviews
Comment from Deejharrington
I loved the picture and the sentiment! And boy, can I sympathize. Living on a pension is so difficult. No one knows exactly how tight things are. I refuse to consider bankruptcy, I made the debt, I'll pay it. But, some weeks I have to decide between meds, gas, or food.
deb
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2012
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I loved the picture and the sentiment! And boy, can I sympathize. Living on a pension is so difficult. No one knows exactly how tight things are. I refuse to consider bankruptcy, I made the debt, I'll pay it. But, some weeks I have to decide between meds, gas, or food.
deb
Comment Written 14-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2012
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deb my dear friend, I know exactly what you mean, I too feel the crunch and hope/pray these hard times to pass soon, I thank you for the wonderful insights, God bless you.
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you are welcome. I keep saying it can't get worse, and then it does:)
deb
Comment from Joan E.
I relished your unexpected final line, making this a perfect cinquain with a turn at the end along with a significant title and specific syllable count. Neat cartoon as well! -Joan
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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I relished your unexpected final line, making this a perfect cinquain with a turn at the end along with a significant title and specific syllable count. Neat cartoon as well! -Joan
Comment Written 13-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Joan my friend, I am pleased to read your wonderful comments, as always, I appreciate the encouragement and thank you very much.
Comment from adewpearl
I LOVE your title as a significant additional line in this satiric poem in excellent cinquain form
good alliterative grouping of means/money/mouth and in bad breath
great downward the final line
this is one of my favorites of your poetry, ameen :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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I LOVE your title as a significant additional line in this satiric poem in excellent cinquain form
good alliterative grouping of means/money/mouth and in bad breath
great downward the final line
this is one of my favorites of your poetry, ameen :-) Brooke
Comment Written 13-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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You made my day Brooke, I thank you for the lovely comments and the encouragement, God bless you.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi ameen,
I love the humor in this cinquain poem. In fact I do like the cinquain form as it gives the poet more words to express themselves. You have done a great job with this one. Too funny! Blessings, chey
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Hi ameen,
I love the humor in this cinquain poem. In fact I do like the cinquain form as it gives the poet more words to express themselves. You have done a great job with this one. Too funny! Blessings, chey
Comment Written 13-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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chey my friend, I am happy to read your encouraging comments, appreciate the time and the wonderful review, thank you very much.
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You are always welcome!
Comment from Spitfire
I would say you're buying the wrong brand of toothpaste. Great alliteration with money and mouth, and bad breath. The only other second meaning I come up with is use of money to support political leaders-- all leave a sour odor.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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I would say you're buying the wrong brand of toothpaste. Great alliteration with money and mouth, and bad breath. The only other second meaning I come up with is use of money to support political leaders-- all leave a sour odor.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Yeah, would you believe that, the SuperPacs and all spending billions to support their candidate, it's literally buying democracy. I thank you my friend, appreciate the stop and the wonderful review.
Comment from l.raven
Very clever. Today people a lucky if they can afford toothpaste. And how sad is that? And I don't see things getting any better. Great write, well done
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Very clever. Today people a lucky if they can afford toothpaste. And how sad is that? And I don't see things getting any better. Great write, well done
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Hello Linda, much obliged my friend, appreciate your visit and the wonderful review, thank you very much.
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your so welcome
Comment from bowls
Very funny! This is a clever message delivered in a very few words. I guess many have t cut back wherever they can. Too bad the results are not always pleasant. :) Nicely done!
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Very funny! This is a clever message delivered in a very few words. I guess many have t cut back wherever they can. Too bad the results are not always pleasant. :) Nicely done!
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Hello bowls, my friend, I appreciate your visit and the wonderful review, glad you like the poem, thank you very much.
Comment from Gypsymooncat
Hahahahahaha! What else can a person say?? At times I think a person is best to chew an apple with the price of toothpaste these days ... and yet even apples can cost a small fortune! Now parsley could work ... but then it can sometimes be hard to get unless you have a plant. Ah who cares? Breathe easy my friend; bad breath is a sign of the times! Excellent work, thanks for making me laugh :)) Cheers xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxxoxo
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Hahahahahaha! What else can a person say?? At times I think a person is best to chew an apple with the price of toothpaste these days ... and yet even apples can cost a small fortune! Now parsley could work ... but then it can sometimes be hard to get unless you have a plant. Ah who cares? Breathe easy my friend; bad breath is a sign of the times! Excellent work, thanks for making me laugh :)) Cheers xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxxoxo
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Hello again my friend, I thank you for the wonderful and kind, generous review, take care.
Comment from Jean Lutz
Only yesterday I was shopping for toothpaste, looking for the cardboard dangling beneath the shelf to tell me what was on sale. I was lamenting to myself that even basic hygeine things are unaffordable. Perhaps I will start making my own with baking soda and salt. At least your clever words and "Realist" art add some humor.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Only yesterday I was shopping for toothpaste, looking for the cardboard dangling beneath the shelf to tell me what was on sale. I was lamenting to myself that even basic hygeine things are unaffordable. Perhaps I will start making my own with baking soda and salt. At least your clever words and "Realist" art add some humor.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Hello Jean, my friend I appreciate your visit and the insight, that's what many in the poor countries do...make their own with baking soda/salt, thank you very much for the wonderful review.
Comment from Peter@Poole
You've made a comical assertion within the confines of a cinquain and I can't fault the syllable count, my friend. Peter
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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You've made a comical assertion within the confines of a cinquain and I can't fault the syllable count, my friend. Peter
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Peter my friend, I thank you for the time and the encouraging review, God bless.
