Radishes and UFO's
A personal story10 total reviews
Comment from PedrosA5LeggedDonkey
You write like down-home cooking. Easy to fill up on and smile at the end. I had to laugh along with you and your dad in the car.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2012
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You write like down-home cooking. Easy to fill up on and smile at the end. I had to laugh along with you and your dad in the car.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2012
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Oh my, I had forgotten I had even written this piece. Thank you for reading my work. My dad was quite the character. He loved a funny story.
Comment from adewpearl
Rod Sterling - Serling
that theme song music in my head - is in
land on planet earth, and today - add comma
idle away my hours, and the topic - add comma
my Mom ended up in the hospital - mom - don't capitalize since not used as her name
It was just a little fancier than we normally visited, but - add comma
An amusing story - a pleasure to read :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Rod Sterling - Serling
that theme song music in my head - is in
land on planet earth, and today - add comma
idle away my hours, and the topic - add comma
my Mom ended up in the hospital - mom - don't capitalize since not used as her name
It was just a little fancier than we normally visited, but - add comma
An amusing story - a pleasure to read :-) Brooke
Comment Written 13-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Thank you Brooke for your kind review even with all the SPAG's. I will go back and correct. Thank you for your input. Rod Serling was also known as Rod Sterling. :o) Same guy. :o)
Comment from cthompson4
How funny and thankfully you play acted well so the lady who was hit was none the wiser. It's good to have great memories of our parents, especially after they are gone.
In the sentence "He took it out and placed it on his plate so gently then proceeded to stick his fork in it" I think there needs to be a comma between gently and then.
Good job and thanks for sharing. Take care, Charlene
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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How funny and thankfully you play acted well so the lady who was hit was none the wiser. It's good to have great memories of our parents, especially after they are gone.
In the sentence "He took it out and placed it on his plate so gently then proceeded to stick his fork in it" I think there needs to be a comma between gently and then.
Good job and thanks for sharing. Take care, Charlene
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Thank you Charlene for your kind review of my story. I will go back and correct with a comma. I think I must have been asleep in class the day they covered grammar and punctuation. :o)
Comment from Val Crisson
Funny and tender at the same time. I really do like these "homey" (for lack of a better word) pieces. They are a delight to read!
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Funny and tender at the same time. I really do like these "homey" (for lack of a better word) pieces. They are a delight to read!
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Thanks Val. I am glad you liked my story.
Comment from reconciled
Wow, very well written! Its hard to keep someone's interest in a story, but you certainly kept mine.This is an excellent story of a special moment in your life, thank you for sharing.God bless you-Michael.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Wow, very well written! Its hard to keep someone's interest in a story, but you certainly kept mine.This is an excellent story of a special moment in your life, thank you for sharing.God bless you-Michael.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Thank you Michael. I am glad you enjoyed my story. I miss my Daddy so much that it is always sweet for me to write about him.
Comment from Scarlet T
Great story! Well written that I laughed out loud at the radish flying across the restaurant. Not admitting it is even better! Love the short stories that have great messages within them. Nicely done. And...I love the Twilight Zone as well!
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Great story! Well written that I laughed out loud at the radish flying across the restaurant. Not admitting it is even better! Love the short stories that have great messages within them. Nicely done. And...I love the Twilight Zone as well!
Comment Written 11-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Thank you Scarlet for reading and commenting so kindly to my story. I am glad you liked it.
Comment from Tawnyowl
Great story. It is one of those family anecdotes that just has to be told! You paced it exactly right and the denouement was unexpected and delightful to read. Glad to hear your mum survived the scare and loved seeing the intro to the Twilight Zone again after many years. It would be nice to see a re-run!
It was one of my favourites!
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Great story. It is one of those family anecdotes that just has to be told! You paced it exactly right and the denouement was unexpected and delightful to read. Glad to hear your mum survived the scare and loved seeing the intro to the Twilight Zone again after many years. It would be nice to see a re-run!
It was one of my favourites!
Comment Written 10-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Glad you liked my story. Yes, it's funny how I can remember so many of the episodes from that show. It was the beginning of my love affair with Sci-Fiction. :o)
Comment from ridinaround
Great story. I love reading memories. Suggestions: "I" is used way too much, some repetitive wording such as: ...waited for the food to arrive.
It took a while for the food to arrive...
Two consecutive paragraphs begin with "Dad". And I think you could play up the flying radish and hook to UFO a little stronger. Good effort!
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2012
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Great story. I love reading memories. Suggestions: "I" is used way too much, some repetitive wording such as: ...waited for the food to arrive.
It took a while for the food to arrive...
Two consecutive paragraphs begin with "Dad". And I think you could play up the flying radish and hook to UFO a little stronger. Good effort!
Comment Written 10-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2012
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Thank you for your suggestions. You express my own feelings towards the piece. I knew it needed work and I will go back and do some reworking. :o) I appreciate your input.
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Thanks, glad to help!
Comment from Misrael
Rather strange but good non the less and it is good for a laugh or 2 and I enjoyed reading it very much. Good job and good read.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2012
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Rather strange but good non the less and it is good for a laugh or 2 and I enjoyed reading it very much. Good job and good read.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2012
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Thank you Misrael for your kind review. I am glad you got a laugh from the story.
Comment from Modee
haha. I always wondered if UFOs were really just flying radishes from some HUGE alien in another galaxy. Very nice story. Very entertaining. :)
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2012
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haha. I always wondered if UFOs were really just flying radishes from some HUGE alien in another galaxy. Very nice story. Very entertaining. :)
Comment Written 10-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2012
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Thanks Modee. I admire your work so much. It pleases me so much that you enjoyed my little story.
