Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 51 "part 2, Chapter 16"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from NaughtieScribe
I liked everything but the group hug in this chapter. That part seemed a bit to hallmarkish for me. The harrassment is escalating, and Anna is clearly in real danger. I also worry very much for the baby's safety. His father and grandma sure don't give a crap about his well being. I feel serious heartache coming.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2012
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I liked everything but the group hug in this chapter. That part seemed a bit to hallmarkish for me. The harrassment is escalating, and Anna is clearly in real danger. I also worry very much for the baby's safety. His father and grandma sure don't give a crap about his well being. I feel serious heartache coming.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2012
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Thank you.
Comment from Helen Tan
Still a clean chapter. Poor troy, in his attempt to help Anna, his own demons have resurfaced. I wonder whether he really saw his biological mum's abuser or it's just a figment of his imagination from all this stress.
"It's seems my medical records showed up on the Internet today."
It - appostrophe not required, otherwise it would read as - It is seems
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Still a clean chapter. Poor troy, in his attempt to help Anna, his own demons have resurfaced. I wonder whether he really saw his biological mum's abuser or it's just a figment of his imagination from all this stress.
"It's seems my medical records showed up on the Internet today."
It - appostrophe not required, otherwise it would read as - It is seems
Comment Written 11-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and I will fix that error.
Comment from cce29
I like your photo. I really like the Chapter. It gave me enough info to have an idea of whats going on with out reading everything before this point, yet it left out enough that I want to read everything before this point and after. Great job. Really caught my attention. And I'm glad you have the SAFE info
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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I like your photo. I really like the Chapter. It gave me enough info to have an idea of whats going on with out reading everything before this point, yet it left out enough that I want to read everything before this point and after. Great job. Really caught my attention. And I'm glad you have the SAFE info
Comment Written 09-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the like review.
Comment from peggles
This is an excellent chapter Barbara
I am glad Anna got out of that fix and now the police are involved
Where is this going now
I was surprised when the post closed I wanted more
hurry up with the next my imagination is going into overdrive
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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This is an excellent chapter Barbara
I am glad Anna got out of that fix and now the police are involved
Where is this going now
I was surprised when the post closed I wanted more
hurry up with the next my imagination is going into overdrive
Comment Written 09-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the like review.
Comment from misscookie
Another interesting chapter and I love the movement of your story.
As always there is never a dull moment.
I thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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Another interesting chapter and I love the movement of your story.
As always there is never a dull moment.
I thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the like review.
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Comment from Kate Walker
Love the pacing. This moves along at brisk, steady clip that keeps the reading pulled forward as if by a string. Not an extraneous word anywhere.
And yet I saw all the characters virtually through their dialogue alone. And though I haven't read preceding chapters I felt I was doing ok with the story.
What I liked very best was the fact that each of the characters was expressing emotion and those emotions came through clearly.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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Love the pacing. This moves along at brisk, steady clip that keeps the reading pulled forward as if by a string. Not an extraneous word anywhere.
And yet I saw all the characters virtually through their dialogue alone. And though I haven't read preceding chapters I felt I was doing ok with the story.
What I liked very best was the fact that each of the characters was expressing emotion and those emotions came through clearly.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from RUMLOVE1000
Very great detail went into this story!
I loved how the flow of the story moved and carried the viewer where he or she was meant to be at all times. The introduction of the characters were precise timing as well.
Abuse could have a negative impact on a person for a lifetime and this story demonstrates such a thing in an excellent fashion.
I loved the level of difficulty that went into this work and words chosen which makes it easy to follow :)
Kudos!
Blessings,
Rumlove1000
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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Very great detail went into this story!
I loved how the flow of the story moved and carried the viewer where he or she was meant to be at all times. The introduction of the characters were precise timing as well.
Abuse could have a negative impact on a person for a lifetime and this story demonstrates such a thing in an excellent fashion.
I loved the level of difficulty that went into this work and words chosen which makes it easy to follow :)
Kudos!
Blessings,
Rumlove1000
Comment Written 09-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Hareem.S
This is another nice chapter. I am sorry to hear that troy has to face his demons too. Can't wait for these two to get over them and maybe one day get together.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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This is another nice chapter. I am sorry to hear that troy has to face his demons too. Can't wait for these two to get over them and maybe one day get together.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from eliz100
This was a good read from beginning to end. I kept wondering, "Where is the baby?" I thought he would be with Betty. Just wonderin'
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2012
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This was a good read from beginning to end. I kept wondering, "Where is the baby?" I thought he would be with Betty. Just wonderin'
Comment Written 08-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2012
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The baby is with Betty. He makes an appearance in the next post. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from dhee khaye
What a lovely title. What an exceptional beginning of the story. You make all the scene wonderful. I never seen any dull moments here. i never felt eagerness to stop by on reading, for I never got bore doing it. Great job!
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2012
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What a lovely title. What an exceptional beginning of the story. You make all the scene wonderful. I never seen any dull moments here. i never felt eagerness to stop by on reading, for I never got bore doing it. Great job!
Comment Written 08-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
